Retribution goes awry when Jarod inadvertently kills a man. (Story in English)
YES! A Mirage update is always welcome! Thank you for sticking with it. I know you're ghostwriting, I know you have your projects in real life, I know you are soo busy, but thank you for doing this for us. Thank you so much! These are missing pieces to the story I fell in love with years and years ago. You gave me something I thought was gone forever. You don't know how special that is. Thank you for the gift and this story and all these gifts and missing pieces. Damn! You nailed the characterrs. You always do!
No, no. Thank you for reading and for the lovely review, Chloe. Reading and reviewing keeps ff alive.
Reviewer: Chloe Signed
Don't forget this and The Return and Devil's Advocate and Hero's Heart. Feel free to add a few more fics and sequels. ;) :) I will never get enough of your writing.
Haha. I love your enthusiasm. Thanks.
Reviewer: Chloe Signed OH MY GODDD! Mirage I want to grab you and hug the hell out of you...but then you might not write so well lol! Honey HONEY HONEY! Tell you what, baby, don't worry about responding to the millions of reviews that I know you must have in your inbox and here combined and just write. Write write write. Hurry and do it really fast.
Thank you, Chloe. No I intend to respond to every review. I finally, finally, finally answered every email review and I will get to them all here. I'm updating as quickly as I can. This story has been finished for years and I haven't had time to upload the chapters. I have to search the old hard drive and scraps of paper to find all of the chapter parts. I will get it posted eventually. Thanks again.
Reviewer: Chloe Signed More. I need the rest of this asap! You are killing me. Please keep going. Fast preferably.
I'm not really killing you- that wouldn't be nice. I'm updating as quickly as I can. Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Reviewer: Chloe Signed Was on the edge of my seat and nearly fell off a couple times! Don't stop now Mirage. You have that way of writing. It's like a brilliant novel. I want more and more.
I won't stop writing. How do you feel about long pauses? Are those allowed? (fingers crossed) Thank you reading and rewiewing, Chloe.
Reviewer: Chloe Signed You've made my month! I'm so glad you decided to continue even though you wanted to stop at chapter one. It would be fine but I love all the little secrets and I can read you forever because your writing is really above par {Centre speak}. You're the reason I still read fanfic and I hate calling your work fanfic. It's fiction. I love this. Continue please.
It's not so unendurable now that the end is in sight. I might survive this one after all. Thank you for reading and reviewing, Chloe.
Reviewer: Chloe Signed This came together beautifully. I can't even tell you didn't want to write it. It's not forced. So natural Mirage. I want more. Update soon.
Reviewer: Chloe Signed "Says the guy who can't remember when he last slept" oh my my my my my!!! I so agree with Parker. Jarod says "You're not" and then "Oh my god you are" lol I think that hesitance and fear is fitting. Wonderful Mirage as always. The characterisations were spot on. I LOVE your writing. It means so much. Congrats!
Reviewer: Chloe Signed When Jarod and his clone are presumed dead and further cloning attempts prove futile, Raines is determined to find another way. He finds it in Dry River, Arizona.
Fact check lol. I'm laughing through my tears. You don't have to worry about facts but that is so cool. But what's more. The way you describe people..Tess, her dad. He's disturbed and just in despair and I can tell by his worrsome, almost defeated it seems "please don't let her out" and Tess. Just crazy amazing Mirage. You bring people alive, to life. They stand up on the page and in Tess's case toddle around and whack the windows and look cute and eager. Her reasoning is the reasoing of child. But her realiazation that people go away and don't come back sometimes no matter how hard we cry for them...that broke my heart wide open. I am still crying.
I sobbed Mirage!! SOBBED! Where does that kind of pain come from that you feel so deeply that you turn around and translate it so vividly to me? Or is that too personal? You've had loss and I think it pours out of you when you're least expecting. I think it makes you write. I don't know what I'm writing. I'm not even sure you realize what you've done to me. Keep doing it. The laughter and tears you bring me are wonderful. I've been saying it for five years. Magic. What you do is magic. Can't give it anything but an all star rating hon.
Reviewer: Chloe Signed Ooh Ooh! Mirage I love your originality in thinking up plots, quips and those fictional terrorist organisations! You are amazing. This chapter was too short. I was settled in for a long read.
I forgive you. I'll read something else of yours. I hear that Forces of Nature is a twisted 1 so might check it out. Please never stop writing. I'm not sure what I'd do without you.
I assure you: I am not amazing. Thank you for the rather generous review nonetheless, Chloe. I see that I'm too late to advise you against reading FON. I apologize in advance. Thank you for reading.
Reviewer: Chloe Signed Wow. Just so much wows. Mirage! Welcome back! You have been missed. I was really worried about you this time because it's been a little while. I'm afraid you're going to not come back and update one day. Let me just say that I'm glad you're here! Now this update. Wowsers! Did not see any of that coming. First Parker's repsonse to Jarod's slip up presuming the girls dead but then Parker. She saw the photo and probably only decided to go along with protesting too loudly for too long because she thought the girls were alive. Jarod does manipulate her ,he has in the past. But it was subtle even here that I ddin't realize what he'd done until she called him on it and put him on the same level as her father and the Triumvirate. Then the landscape descriptions. Love! Such an emotional reaction from Gracie's mom. I feel so much for those parents. The ending...you always cinch it up and tie together so right. Jarod lying to the parents...heart is broken. I'm excited for more please make it so and make it soon if you can.
Reviewer: Chloe Signed Happy dance! Very eloquent as always. I love how in character they are. No one writes them quite like Mirage writes them. Thank you so much. More please?
Thank you, Chloe, for reading and reviewing. More will be posted soon.
Reviewer: Chloe Signed Mirage Mirage Mirage Mirage.... I'm leaning back all chilled with a coke and getting really hot thanks to Jarod stroking Parker's hair unconsciously and all... uhuh and asking permission so sweetly... you get it? And then Parker twirls herself into a child and now I know how Jarod felt in his near coma state. Awkward. I think his life was flashing by him as he was running after the car and being hit an SUV and volleyed onto a Mercedes and thrown to the ground and knocked unconscious. I think he knew in his mind that Parker was being abducted and she is such a large part of his life. It was beautiful and haunting and so real the way you wrote it. I think he relies on her in some ways and that's why in adult Parker's absence the little girl is there in his mind. Did NOT SEE THAT COMING. But I love it. Wow. Your writing skills are beyond anything I've read ever. I hope Parker is safe and I KNOW you are going to tell us where she is and what happened to her. Did she find out who the traffickers weere or what? I know you'll tell us. I can't wait. Please will you also update Devil's Advocate, The Return, Oblivion... just all of them please. I know you're busy but I'm begging. THank you to the moon and stars and back again for keeping these characters alive.
Reviewer: Chloe Signed Oh Mirage. First, I have to say thank you for that response to my review. I am going to talk to someone, taking your advice. I remember Bush was an awful potus but he didn't brag about raping women and then get elected... or mock a disabled person.. and he wasn't a reality tv star or failed business-con man. I'm not handling this well at all. I don't feel at home in my own home any more. I will keep fighting and... wow thank you for caring enough to tell me what I need to hear. I turned a review into a cry for help counseling session. It really is good therapy to read too tho ...just saying. This chapter like all of them is brilliant. Stay sweet Mirage and keep being you and please keep writing.
There is a bit of good news now (in recent days); I hope that has lessened some of the anxieties. Regarding the "awful potus": his awfulness isn't nullified simply because someone else is more overtly abominable and imbecilic. We don't wipe a criminal's record clean and release them from prison simply because a more recent criminal has ambled along and is far more violent. We must remember history. It's tragic to see it repeated this way.
Please keep fighting. Continue. ; Always keep fighting. And know that you're not alone. There are groups. There are still decent people (you have to look closely to find them sometimes) in the world. I'm relieved that you've made the decision to take care of your mental health; I'm proud of you, Chloe.
I agree that reading is good therapy. I hear writing is good therapy, too.
Take care of yourself.
Reviewer: Chloe Signed
Ahhh Mirage. You can write them so perfect together and Jarod so tender with Parker. I wish you would do it more often. Miss Parker would be dismissive of Jarod's concern being who she is and what she has become. You kept her stoic, cynical and humourous just as I remember from my dvds. I love how in character they are even this is dark. You're shining a light on human trafficking and possible serial killings plus genocide of an entire country and it is dark.
She and Jarod always seemed like opposite sides of the same coin to me but I'm rethinking that now. Here she's darker than him but with her training would be darker and need to go ahead and take out the garbage. No chance of repeat offending that way. Miss Parker has always kicked ass and this Miss Parker is what the world needs right now. I see that this isn't marked completed so I hold out hoping there will be a happy ending for Jarod and Parker. They deserve it and they love each other. I wanted to mention Rachel's files too.. that was exceptionally written and so FBI profiler-ish lol. You kept her in character too. Guess you're a fan of both shows? Nicely done. I need more. Now.
Reviewer: Chloe Signed Awesome! Parker calling Jarod's place a fuckpad is just what I needed in my life. She is so snarky and badass. I love the sort of role reversal thing you've got going on. She's John Wick and he's Martha Stewart. It's just too cool. Have you noticed a resemblance between Keanau Reeves and Michael T Weiss??? because I have and so when I read that Jarod might have answered with that Jonn Wick line I giggled like a little girl. You inject these little bombs of joy and humor in already stellar writing. I love this fic if you can't tell. I need more now. The bruises like a necklace....oh my god Mirage I just need more. You're a genius and I need more.
Reviewer: Chloe Signed Please say it's not all there is to this. I could go on reading this for hundreds of chapters. I want more and more. It's nice to see Jarod a little behind the curve and not sure of himself. It's more realistic and fitting with what's happened. more please if I have the right to ask?
Ah- well, there won't be hundreds of chapters. There will at least be one more. Thank you for reading and your lovely reviews.
Reviewer: Chloe Signed OMG! So amazing Mirage. I love your writing. The way you bring them in gahhhh I'm envious. She puts her hands on the table kind of aggravated and Jarod just covers her hands... so simple and so beautiful. I need more. I got some questions about The Pretender in general if you can asnwer them.. like why did Jarod run if he was a genius and could have exposed the Centre? I already emailed you but no response yet. Please. Or check your email..
A crime scene, a chance meeting, two people transcending the lives chosen for them. Jarod POV. S.M.U.T.
I just need to say how much I STILL love this.
Reviewer: Chloe Signed When you care enough to send the very best
Not sure how I missed this 1. The opening alone blew me away! You begin with the gift itself (that is the title and it was perfect).... and then the description of the gift...the questions about the gift and how Miss Parker got the gift...and was surrounded by Christmas setting (love we'll all muddle through somehow and it brought tears to my eyes!!). Last but not least what she did with the gift... that gift enabled her to give another gift...that keeps on giving. WOW! WOW!!!
I'm in awe of your ability to unfold the story so elegantly. You literally grab the reader by the hand and say come along with me....you give us no choice. It's really a journey with you Mirage! Everyone was completely in character, everything was Centre Christmas perfect! Thank you thank you thank you!
Reviewer: Chloe Signed Christmas isn't Christmas until I read this 10 times and now it's official Mirage!! You capture the spirit, heart and soul of The Pretender, the Centre, Parker, and Christmas. A big splash of twinkling lights in the darkness. It just like Christmas. That's what we do really, try to light up the darkness to make life a little easier and special. You do that for me every time you share your work with us. Please never stop gifting us I need your light and color 🙏🙏’—❤️
Part IV
Mirage, Mirage, Mirage. I love this series so far. Your prose is exquisite and you have a real knack for developing existing and original characters, for intense descriptive work and fleshing out the characters. Please don't ever stop writing for us.
Thank you, Chloe.
Reviewer: Chloe Signed "Mario's tunnel" bahaha. Miss P's wit is in great form. Finally Nia leaves! I feel sorry for her. I always thought that Jarod pitied her felt bad for leaving her after having sex with her. I loved the inclusion of the caulbearer. It sheds some light on her 'inner nonsense' as you say. Thank you for helping me make heads or tails out of season 4. I'm a gardener so of course I love the secret garden. Your descriptive work is so exquisite. It's beautiful. Incredible writing as always..."Parker turned to stare out at the darkness, to see anything except Jarod's face, and disengage, withdraw, hide in silence."
Reviewer: Chloe SignedMiss P is a protective lioness defending her child. I wouldn't expect anything less. :) I like what you did there but was there a hint of foreshadowing? I hope you'll elaborate. "You say prodigy like it's a bad thing" lol. It was bad for Jarod. Miss P seemed to think he was a weirdo or monster when she first saw him with the bunnies. I think intelligence can be divisive, I think Jarod's abilities to be anyone frightens Miss P. He could become her and find out her secrets.;) I'm glad Wade had Miss P in his life. This warms my heart. "You blame yourself." I know I'm not the only who got chills when Jarod said that. Oh Mirage. Hurry and write the rest.
You're right. Oh, dear God! He could become her and discover her secrets. Now that is a truly terrifying prospect. I don't want to think about that. Yes, yes. I am hurrying. I have quite a bit to write, however. Thanks for understanding, and thank your for reading and reviewing, Chloe.
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