Part IV
Characters: All the characters
Classifications: Genres: Angst, General
Warnings: Warning: Language
Series: The Return
Chapters: 9 Table of Contents
Completed:No
Word count: 42888
Read Count: 6550
Part IV
OMG! Mirage, what another great accomplishment this is. Terrific update like always. Please don't make us wait too long for more.
Thank you for reading and reviewing, Lorraina. I'll try to update soon.
Reviewer: Lorraina SignedHave I told you lately how much I love your writing? I've tried to write but I haven't been able to bring the story and characters to life. The way you do.
You have so much passion for The Pretender #thepretenderlives and I see that in your writing. Keep doing what you're doing. You're definately doing something right and it's incredibly inspirational.
Why, no, Lorraina, you haven't. You should continue writing and you should share it here. Don't write the way I write. My God! That would be horrible! Write the way you write. I will keep doing what I'm doing. Thank you for reading and reviewing. And I'm serious: write.
Reviewer: Lorraina SignedTop notch Mirage! I wish you were writing the novels and the next film and you should direct it too YOU have vision!
Thanks, Lorraina. Well, I could write a fic about writing novels and a film and directing- I have to be realistic here.
Reviewer: Lorraina SignedI read in awe Mirage. First, the way you write Jarod and Parker in a way that puts me with them, that shows Jarod and Parker and their looks and their gestures. You *KNOW* these characters. I see Michael and Andrea and I love that they say things that they would say on the should. I hear their voices. It's like watching the show. I miss the show. I dont' have to when I read you.
The way you move this story along seemlessly, the plotting. It's so natural when they are new and still bicker and it's so natural the way you bring them closer over time. It's natural when Parker withdraws again because she always did return to the back to normal after coming close to Jarod. I can see that it's getting harder for her to do that as feelings grow. Your write them so naturally. After the big let down, I gotta say that I'm thankful you're still here for us and I know that so many people agree. Thank you for sharing with us no matter how hard it is for you to make time for this and no matter how much work it must be and I know it must be really hard to write so well. Keep writing for us please. Give us a chapter soon.
Reviewer: Lorraina SignedFull circle- with a twist
I can only say WOW and don't stop writing. I felt like I was there with them, with my characters with Michael and Andrea. No one fleshes out characters the way you do. I love the fresh dialog and originality. You develop characters we already know and you make them yours. You are the best.
Thank you, Lorraina. I apprecaite your review.
Reviewer: Lorraina SignedJarod is implicated in a spate of homicides.
I went away for a while because after reading the official novel Rebirth by Steve and Craig I was disappointed and the xmas fan fic thing was #*@**@ and I won't be buying that novel/story/whatever either and it will never be canon in my mind. YOU are canon to many of us. I want YOUR novel. You brought me back again when I saw the twitter traffic. I'm so addicted to your stories. This is one is awesome. I just read the entire thing. The chaps are sooo short Mirage but the momentum is magnificent! I love the way it begins with your Pretender worhty original characters. Top notch Mirage. As only you can be.
I see. I would rather not talk of- uh certain things. Mm moving on. I hope the momentum is okay. Thank you for reading and reviewing, Lorraina, and welcome back.
Reviewer: Lorraina SignedOh snap! Miss P is on her game. I love it! Love all the high techy stuff! Amazing!
Reviewer: Lorraina SignedThank you for the note. I hate cross overs!! Passionately! Zina is wild. I love her bas ass attitude. It's like a younger, low income Miss Parker.
"Ah rumors, the coin of the realm" lol! Crammed pack with snark. LOL Jarod will still save her life if she chokes on gum. Too sweet. That doesn't sound like a cold hard killer? Did I miss something?
Reviewer: Lorraina SignedWait. I feel so stupid. My bad. He's only been implicated. Not charged. Sorry.
Awesome chapter. More Miss Parker. You are an artist with words. THere's nothing more I can say. It's wonderful Mirage.
Reviewer: Lorraina SignedRachel. I don't know about her. Or why Jarod was having sex with her while he was having sex with Zoe. What a playa. lol . It's so refreshing to read you Mirage, after reading around. You really are my favorite author. So...is it the clone...oh nevermind, I know you will explain everything. :)
Reviewer: Lorraina SignedI love it! "And it just screams intrigue and mystery, doesn't it?""Mm," purred Parker, "in a thousand languages." LOL! That is just like Miss Parker. Thank you thank you! "There were no wasted seconds watching live and unsuspecting employees doing their jobs, snapshots of life and death in lurid juxtaposition. "
Ahhhhhhhh Beautiful.
Reviewer: Lorraina SignedRachel is also unraveling lol. I like that no one is invincible. You put the characters in deep **** and then untangle it and get them out in a plausible way. Intelligent and elegant and succinct. I love it.
Reviewer: Lorraina Signed"I've reviewed his plan," Raines continued in a laudatory tone, meeting Lyle's gaze, "and it's brilliant.""Oh, yes," sang Parker bitterly, "it's a screaming success if the goal was multiple causalities," she said reproachfully."
BOOM! LOL!
Reviewer: Lorraina SignedOoh! uhhhh! Mirage! It's time for Jarod and Parker to hook up girlfriend! Please make it so. Exquisite writing as always. Every fic of yours could easily be a series continuation. So plausible. YOu are the only author who does right by the characters and the series. I want more and more.
Reviewer: Lorraina SignedI need more of this in my life girl. Like right now. Love it. I love how Jarod wants Parker to leave with Sydney and he thought she was leaving. He's gonna be so totally pissed when he finds out she's still in danger. OMG. Perfect. Pretender perfect.
Reviewer: Lorraina SignedOy wow I love this and omg your writing is so super addicting and I can't get enough. I read your last response to my review of Oblivion and I'm very confused abt my ? abt Michael T. Weiss because you said you'd never give details but then you answered every question I asked about his looks and how he acted and .... what do you mean by Yes and no he does and doesn't look Jarod how can that be??? How can anyone be nicer than Jarod???? Are you trying not to answer? You are 2 discreet. Why can't I talk about him here? He was Jarod for all of us so it's good to talk abt him. You can tell me all abt when you have met him honey. I met him and maybe got too close lol but he's sooo hot the hottest and sexiest man alive!! He's a celebrity so itss ok. If you hugged him or something tell the world!!! Tell me. I want the details!! I want that selfie of you and him. Don't you like him?!!!!!!!!! Write faster!
Awesomeness. You gotta add art to everyone of your stories. Sorry about the other reviews. I won't harass u about showing me your selfies with Michael T Weiss any more. I love the direction this has taken and the tension and J's anger. They are so in character and it's so plausible. omg I need more.
Reviewer: Lorraina SignedMORE¡ it can't be over!! I love it too much! 💕
Reviewer: Lorraina SignedThe tape? Ok so I've been on pins and needles going nuts and now I'm going even nuttier. Please update soon. I love your writing.
Reviewer: Lorraina SignedOMG! I love it Mirage. You're definitely my favorite author and ... I won't say anything about the certain actor. So I hope you aren't mad or anything. Will I score points back if I say that I obeyed your request not to share you on social media? I know you don't like social media so I don't share you there. Ok? I've been good.
Keep writing please. I need more of this in my life. I'm going to read some of your other work today. I thought you were awesome with all the characters and I gotta say that I've never seen Sydney so well fleshed out and in character. I know you excel with Jarod and Miss P but it's when you get Sydney sat down with Jarod this way... brings back good memories. This is now a good memory. It's like watching after school again. Big sighs. I love you.
No worries, Lorraina. I appreciate your taking the time to read and review. Thank you.
Reviewer: Lorraina SignedYess this is what I'm talking about right here Mirage. You are the BEST. Perfect descriptions. I want that cake. Jarod's right that Cate shouldn't feel like she should comfort adults but she's just doing what they did. Kids are intuitive like that. I love how IN character these characters always are when you write them. I need more! Especially right now. I'm feeling Emily. Thank you for being a voice of reason and please notice I'm not bugging you to meet Michael T. Weiss. I'll stop that for a while.
But when this is over...
lol. I'm still not going to bug you. You're a sweet girl and an amazing author and I know you're a good person. Good people don't like trump. Bad people worship trump.
It's just.. if I were you and I had seen Michael T. in passing in public several times I would have taken that as a sign from the universe to say hi and ask for an autograph and selfie. Or do you need a better sign...like the universe have you two totally really literally physically accidentally bump into each other? Is that it Mirage?
So anyway get better. I missed you so much.
Reviewer: Lorraina Signed
A past transgression jeopardizes Sydney's life.
WOOT! Yahhyy Mirage. This is super PROFESSIONAL authoring here girl. I get tingly from how much in character they all are...like watching-the-dvd-accurate.
I get even more tingling all over when I back up a few chapters and there is Jarod. and parker. The way you write Jarod will always be my favorite thing about you even though you write the other characters just as pretenderperfectly.. he is just like Michael T. Weiss when I read him ... and like Jarod. Have you finally met Michael? Do you not like him or something? I know you're all like "don't objectify him" and stuf but comeon! You can objectify him a little.. he's a celebrity he'll understand. He probably knows he's hot. I can't believe you don't at least have a crush on Michael! What's wrong with you. Isn't he hot? Don't you want to hit that? He's an artist, too and you probably didn't know that did you? He does art on canvas. You do your art in writing for us which is nice. You do like art I can tell by some of the art and sculpting stuff you put in your writing and artist names. You also have the environment in common with him... and I think politics too which is pretty cool so you HAVE to like him. I've never met a girl fan of this series that didn't want to run into him and like all over him.
I want more of Jarod and Parker or Jarod alone. I want that selfie of you and Michael too. It would be so cool.
One more time: I like everyone involved with The Pretender; therefore: I like Jarod's player--- in a completely subtle and composed, nonthreatening, nonobectifying, not-going-to-maul-the-man or "hit" anything regardless of how cold or hot he may or may not be sort of way. I'm probably abnormal and I'm okay with that.
"hit that?" Mm. What? That implies all sorts of fuckery, criminal fuckery- um how to explain this? Consent, Lorraina, is sexy. You're a fan of the series, you've watched The Pretender, and will recall that bit of advice regarding other people's things: "we. do. not. touch. them."
I don't always agree with Jarod, but he was right about this one thing at least and you should listen to the man. Those are words to fucking live by.
Sure, yes, I have the environment in common with him--and something like seven billion (and change) other people, too. Spoiler alert: it's not going to end well at all for earthlings.
Also: I would never meet and tell. Haha.
And thanks for reading and reviewing, however, please limit the review to the scribblings.
OMG!!! I f-ing love this Mirage. Ooh ooooh uhhh Jarod is so angry and afraid ...dangerous. HOT. They haven't touched much yet. I want to MORE about the weekend. You write them perfectly that I can't--- shit I need more. I see Michael and Andrea and my favorite actors when I read this. MOre more MORE!!
I saw the response to my other review and yah I wouldn't try to hit that right there on the sidewalk.. or I don't know. I probably would. But I wouldn't commit a crime against him. I like him. I wouldn't do anything to Michael that he didn't want me to do ya know?? I totally know what you mean. I should tone it down and I will. I'll stick to the review but I am glad that you don't have some issue with him because I want you to like all of the people that I like.
Reviewer: Lorraina SignedI love the deeper explorations of Lyle, the whys, his psyche, and the damning info about Sydney's knowledge. Sydney is often idolized and Lyle demonized but Sydney is just as responsible and Lyle is actually a victim.
Thank you for something I wanted to see done on television ages ago.
I want more. You're writing is so clear and you are so talented and I'm not going to harrass you at all about you know who and that selfie you probably still don't have with him. Winks winks kisses kisses xxoo
Write fast.
There will be more. I think.
Thanks for the r & r, Lorraina.
Reviewer: Lorraina SignedYou always yank me back me. OMG. I like that Miss P saved the day here by saving Jarod. Saving Jarod helped Jarod help Sydney. Miss P also helped Jarod help Sydney hands on and they do work together well. I feel the chemistry between the characters. I love you for that!
Really complicated things happened but maybe they can work it out. I love that Miss Parker really saved the day. Hero! Right on time for women's day!
More please?
Reviewer: Lorraina Signed