23 year old fan of the best show EVER!
PretenderJarod is implicated in a spate of homicides.
You are so good to Broots and it was just like that...after work they are friends. I hate seeing MP having to work under Cox and listen to him but that's the job and you did right by the my series. Awesome job.
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Jarod makes an appearance just when I was beginning to wonder if he would...lol. I trust you and I hope you trust yourself and your muse. Zina is so funny. My new favorite original character. Jarod was totally patient and then thought he might have to save her life if she choked on gum.
Jarod with Rachel... I love this: R- "you look tired" J- "hmm, my, you are awfully sharp. Have you ever considered a career in law enforcement? Perhaps profiling?" LOL! He's a big flirt. I could really go on. It'a all so wonderful.
Ooooh when MP isn't happy nobody is happy lol. That operative was so cute to me. Her reaction to him is classic Miss Parker. Priceless. I swear you must have these characters in a drawer or something or you're friends with them. I'm envious. People do say lol in public. LOL. The world is crazy. I love the gadgets. Very clever.
Reviewer: Christoph Signed This last chapter, 5 was so short. They are all too short. I know you are short on time but gahh.
So eloquent. Exsquite. I love that something happened outside Jarod's control..Rachel being there and that he was clueless and we had to see him find his footing with the dectective. You blow me away every time. :) ;) I'm still upset that you aren't writing a Pretender novel, :( that you didn't contact Steve and Craig. I like your work way better Mirage. =) You have a professional style that isn't forced. I don't know what else to say.That I might convince you. ;) I hope you will post more soon. Hugs and happiness to you. Hurry up and write the rest. Update the rest of your stories too!! =)
Thank you for reading and reviewing, Christoph. You are correct: I have not contacted Craig and/or Steve. I can't do that. I'm not going to pester them. I will never pester them. Life has a way of sorting itself sometimes and as par for my usual course, I'll beat my own path and arrive where I'm supposed to be and with my self-respect intact. Don't be upset. I'm certainly not. I will update. Hugs and happiness to you as well- and thanks for that too.
Reviewer: Christoph Signed Amazing new chapter Mirage. You go girl!
Reviewer: Christoph Signed "It's frozen" Broots is so great. You are the only author who writes all of the characters the way they are suppose to be and the only one who writes stories that could actually be made into a series and that are plausible and I mean all of your stories could be too. It's amazing. Very professional Mirage. I'm glad that Lyle, Raines and Willie are dead and that they died because they lied to the Triumvirate. Great the way Adama's nephew did the deed as an act of vegeance. Damn it was perfect! Miss Parker's repsonse was classic Miss Parker. You hit it right out of the park. You always blow me away! JUst don't ever stop writing. The characters, dialougue, the plot, all of it. You are Pretender Perfect.
Reviewer: Christoph Signed I have nothing original to add. You are a genius. I hope Miss Parker will help Jarod. More please?
Reviewer: Christoph Signed Top notch Mirage! "little old greyhaired women buying guns" lol. I know which network you mean. The old prolifers lol. They are pro-death penalty, pro-gun, pro-war....they can't be prolife so lol you nailed the real life problem! I LOVE that Jarod looks at the refrigetor offended by it for being empty. You really know Jarod well. You know all of these characters well but Jarod and Miss Parker are the hardest for most authors but you write them flawlessly and you make it seem so easy. It's scary how well you write them! Good work! Give me more!!!!!
I don't know if I know Jarod well. I just write what comes to mind and try not to overthink it. I don't think about it at all- that's probably obvious. I will update as soon as I possibly can. Thank you, Christoph, for reading and reviewing.
Reviewer: Christoph Signed OH MY GOSH WOW. Mirage. I love this chapter. SLow speed chase. Nearly undone by a child. Very awesome. Funny how Jarod always got sidetracked in the show from finding his family....and here in this chapter he gets sidetracked trying to heal from bullet wounds and then trying to find out what project Miss Parker is involved in....because he jumped to conclusions and thought she wanted to sleep with him just to have a child to give to the triumvirate...which she could do. I always thought that would be a way to get Jarod. It makes sense here because the Centre will have to kill him and the cops who arrest him. They can't let Jarod talk. I think it's funny that Rachel doesn't believe him about the Centre or the Triumvirate and she just wants him dead. It makes Miss Parker seem nicer cos at least she never tried to kill Jarod lol. There is some foreshadowing I think...somethings Sydney didn't say to Jarod about Miss Parker? really amazing writing and always a fresh perspective and plot. More please?
Reviewer: Christoph Signed Woohoo! You know you just made my entire year I hope. No one really expresses the spirit of the show, the real Pretender like you do Mirage! I'm talking about the real pretender the one from the dvds...not the books... I don't recognize Jarod, Miss Parker or Broots...probably because there is no Broots in that first novel in the novels. I don't know what that is with the Pretender title on it and DaVinci's virtriutrian man on it. BUT THIS MIRAGE is the way I love it!!! Your writing hearkens back to the good days. It's like the Pretender never ended and you picked up where the dvds ended without missing a bit or in this case without missing a piece. Thank you thank you for keeping the Pretender spirit alive for me. Without you, I'd just give up on this fandom. You'll never know what you mean. I love Jarod and I love Miss Parker and I love that there is still one person who still writes them the way they are supposed to be and writes so that I can still see Michael as Jarod and Andrea as Miss Parker. Please never stop writing for us. I'm so greedy for more.
Hi, Christoph. Aw, thanks. I'm glad you liked it.
Reviewer: Christoph Signed Yeah I didn't like that Jarod set her up with Thomas and especially when Tommy was all like "fate" and stuff lol. But it's so like Jarod to try to distract her but I guess he didn't realize what he was doing getting drunk and going off. Funny they keep winding up together like on the show. I love your writing. It's just like watching an episode of The Pretender, but maybe you are better. Very sad chapter but Margaret wasn't looking so good and all the years of being on the run and being afraid aren't easy for an elderly woman I'm sure.
I love that Misss Parker called Jarod a liar there at the end, meaning he lied when he said he'd never bother Miss Parker again lol. We all know he can't stop bothering her. Bothering Miss Parker is what J-man does best. You did this nicely without being too cheesy or making Miss Parker too coddling with him. You kept her in character. You always do. More please. Soon.
Hi, Christoph. I hope it wasn't too syrupy. I'm working on the updates. Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Reviewer: Christoph Signed OW. I hope your arm is okay. Sounds like a real bitch... and still you update for us because you love us so much. I love you too Mirage and thank you. I was confused when I read chapter 18 and had to go back and then I saw you had updated two chapters at once. Impressive writing. I will still give you two reviews for two chapters since it is our only currency system. ;) Jarod's gonna get a distraction..I know because I read ahead. Love this story.
Reviewer: Christoph Signed Did not expect to see Jarod waltz into the Centre like that. WOWSA. Hell of a twist. speaking of twist... um someone with that username twisted seems to have cursed you on the shout box or something. I guess because you were injured and unable to type? But I'm still here and still loving your writing.
That was a good save by Jarod. She doesn't know that he knows about the miscarriage. I love how honest they are being now, like they've cut the shit and forgotten their pride finally. SHe was trying to defuse the tension by saying it would have been Broots or Sydney she proposition but it's Jarod who can become THomas and it's Jarod now that she's attracted to... this sexual tension.
OHHHH! What I need right now is more Mirage. MORE. Will Jarod and Miss Parker act on the sexual tension that is always always always interrupted and unresolved? The time is right right now. They need to have sex more than any couple and especially HER. It's been since THomas for her. OMG> Please. Give it to us.
Reviewer: Christoph Signed
Ooh, this is getting interesting. So like MP to assert herself and I love her for it. She's a champion for women. I can tell you are too.
The power struggle is to be expected I think and they do it so well. I love that ending. What are these two going to get up to in the work place?
More please?
Oh, you'll find out when you read the new chapter. Thanks for the R & R, Christoph.
Reviewer: Christoph Signed Holy mother of God! Mirage! Your writing blows me away! Now after all of that epic sex and then 'it might not be sex because that might not be Jarod.' EVIL! You're more evil than Craig and Steve have ever been. And you're a genius. You are an evil genius! I can't stop reading this. I do appreciate the clarification.
But back to the sex... mindblowing is right! Had to change my panties lol. I love that Jarod in all his tenderness and sweetness wants to make love to her but I totally see why she'd want Thomas to be the main memory of love making. It's like with the gift her mom gave her that Debbie found and we find out Parker doesn't want to open it because there'd be nothing else for her mother to give her and yeah as tore up as Parker was over Thomas this is not just plausible but canon. We never see her hook up with another man after Thomas and Jarod didn't do anything but keep her busy looking for him.
I love their inner thoughts. I really hope she was with Jarod and not the imposter. I have a feeling you're about to end this one and I'm going to miss it but I can't wait to find out who she was with and how this will end. You always keep me guessing. More soon please?
I'm evil? Thank you for that. It's effortless really.
I'd forgotten about that episode you mention. Seems sorta plausible. She was rather devastated by Thomas' murder. You'r correct. I think I can wrap this up in two chapters. There will be more. Thanks for reading and reviewing, Christoph.
Reviewer: Christoph Signed Just when I thought it couldn't get bettter............it gets better. I'm over here hanging on your every word and clutching my couch pillows. I'm so scared that there was foreshadowing??! and Jarod was warning her and kept trying to get her to stay somewhere safe and in the end he's going to be right and she's going to be killed oh please say it ain't so Mirage. I have never wanted to be so wrong in my life.
Reviewer: Christoph Signed Woot you're baack and with a hell of an update. Mirage wow. I keep repeating Alex was honest with her Alex was honest with her. He's not wrong about Jarod. Ohhh! You give it and you snatch it away from us. I'm so impressed. I need more please.
Reviewer: Christoph Signed Nice. I love it. I concur with Jarod and his Mum...babies in cages... how familiar does that sound right now? And you mentioned modified cage cribs way back before real life started copying you. I really love how Jarod and Parker are communicating. His 'just talk to me. Please." kills me. Yes he must be aching for her. Thanks for him treating the issue with the importance it is due and that he's not brushing it off as nothing or letting her brush it off.. I'm so happy Miss Parker is still kick ass and tough and is realistic and not insane. THank you too for shedding light on bipolar disease because Catherine is always portrayed as perfect. I had a bipolar aunt and I can tell you it's not picnic. You were truthful about that too. Even if this is fiction you keep to the facts. I want more.
Ah, right, it's tragically familiar disgusting and I don't know--incomprehensible. The things humans do to other humans, huh? Because they feel superior and exceptional and consider other humans less than human. It's lost on them entirely that humans become something less than human when they put living things in cages. It's heartbreaking to see history continue to repeat itself, but not surprising.
Jarod couldn't stop her if she wanted to brush it off. It's not really so much that's he not "letting" her do anything. He can't control her. She has found her own way. Of course, Jarod wouldn't be Jarod if he didn't try to interfere help.
No, it's difficult when a loved one is suffering. I imagine being diagnosed with bipolar isn't a picnic either. Thanks for reading and reviewing and your thoughts.
Reviewer: Christoph Signed Oooh uuuuh! Ok I sooo want them to finally have sex in this beautiful story, but I get the same vibe as Jarod. First, was "In the future," he said, "tell me when you need help." and her "That would completely cramp my style," she intoned haughtily" ...and then "wrong"...and yeah, she chose the word wrong for a reason, plus the "you know" and then the omission/lie, not telling him. SO many reasons why he should proceed with caution. She can't tell him she needs help and that is totally just like Parker. She doesn't want to talk about the abuse...and yeah, who would? I understand. And she called them wrong. Plus hey it's Parker and all the baggage. She would be close to him in one episode and then boom, "where is the stupid bastard" in the next episode, not caring about Kyle dying..."let's go home Jarod". Hot. Cold. NO in between. You really capture that like no other author. They have a child and they shouldn't mess it up. I wonder how it will finally go down.. pun not intended but I would like to read some more smut so lol...I'll get me coat.
Please update soon. I love this story and I love you for writing it. More!!
Reviewer: Christoph Signed Inept isn't the word I'd use to ever describe you Mirage. You are adept. You know what you're doing and you know these characters well. I love your work. Eloquently written and better than most novels that have been published. What I love and hate about your writing is that you do it so realistically. The characters are so fleshed out. It' like watching them....I had a problem with that in the darker stories where Jarod is so evil...it was scary then. What you said about the FBI... right now on this date at this time, that is so spot on. Glad I'm not in the US. More please. I love your writing.
Thank you for reading and reviewing, Christoph. I feel as if I should apologize for those darker fics. I haven't even read them and I'm pretty sure I avoid them- some of the Muses are dark and disturbed, I suppose. I hope those Muses remain dormant. I don't like evil, or even slightly agitated, Jarod. Oh, that. Yeppers. Be glad you aren't. What a mess. I will write more eventually.
Reviewer: Christoph Signed I'm eternally impressed with your talents Mirage. Will Jarod be sex coaching Parker in future chapters? I do hope so. I don't expect it in the next chapter...so don't worry or anything that we're all hungry for the hot stuff. I'll just go back and read Circles Of Hell and Nemesis...the chapter titled Lucidity that is the hottest sex scene eva! The transition has been done well and they are moving forward. Parker is stubborn and would want to ignore the trauma. I like that Jarod knew she wanted stress sex and I can see his doubts because she says sex and he says make love. Plus in chapter 2 of part 5 she said wrong when talking about them. Thanks for not just having them together and ingoring the past and them going on like this wouldn't be complicated. They were mean to each other so many times on the tv show and just being chased by her and the lies her father told her...all of that...it's just so complicated. You write them beautifully, so naturally. Why aren't you writing the novels? Booey all that. You are writing the official story as far as I'm concerned. Just please keep writing.
Ah, that's odd. I don't exactly agree with the Muses (I rarely do). I appreciate the kind words. Thanks for reading and reviewing, Christoph.
Reviewer: Christoph Signed Oh, my God Mirage! Where on earth have you been? Big hugs and welcomes back!!! I'm so relieved that you're ok!!! It's like Christmas when I see your updates... first I see the pressies and then I get closer and then I open them up and it's even more than I could have ever hoped for. I love the way they are with each other and that it's real and it's hard. Thank you. This...damn girl you perfectly wrote my favorite characters. Let me just say now that you never have to end this. I'm glad you didn't rewrite. Sometimes RL imitates real life... "On a bender" real life is drunk for sure. You wrote about a freak blizzard in Texas once and then there was totally a freak blizzard in Texas. Just keep going. Please never stop writing. Update your other stories too please. I love them. Thank you so so much for coming back to us.
Reviewer: Christoph Signed Amazing update. I can't ever get enough Mirage. More please?
I'm working on it, Christoph. Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Reviewer: Christoph Signed So much to break down here... first that you have Parker remember Jarod's words from Carthis.. and then to have Sydney talk about Parker's odd behavior after Carthis and you don't lose sight of what already happened and sweep it away like it never happened. They have history that they build and build on. The Pretender tv series had a good thing going. I don't like that that was tossed out the window with those "OFFICIAL" novels. So that's another reason I love your work. That and you're a damn incredibly fantastic author.
I like the human sacrifice mentions and how it tied with Carthis and that it ties with the bloody blade. We should never have forgotten that people were sacrificed for the Centre including Miss Parker's great great family.
I love how Major Charles and Miss Parker get along and even joke about which movies are like her predicament. I like that Sydney thinks Miss Parker believes she had some of Jarod's "JUSTICE" coming to her. I love that Jarod had to be sure Sydney would on board. I love that Sydney is finally going to stick his neck out for Miss Parker. He couldn't protect them both in the past and chose to protect Jarod. I want to see what happens next. Your writing is so exquisite Mirage.
I love this story. I love the parts about Catherine. I love the Sciencey- mind stuff. Sydney sounds just like Sydney here. I love that all of the characters sound and speak in character.
I wait eagerly for your updates.
Thank you for reading and for the generous review, Christoph.
Reviewer: Christoph Signed Wowz. I'm blown away by your writing, your turn of phrases, the elegance and eloquence and .. how on earth are you able to write them all so spot on in character. It's like watching an episode. You make my heart swell Mirage. .... and I haven't mentioned the sex. I admit that in the past I've found your sex scenes masturbatory, so worthy of getting my ovaries off on. This was pleasurable anyway without so much of the detail that got my ovaries off in the past hint hint wink wink. You realized we were all masturbating to your sex scenes and felt weird huhhh? I want you to know that I come for the high quality stories that you write too and how much in character my fav characters are cos I love these characters and that it's the content that most pleases me. Arousal is just a bonus and a sex scene that lasts so long I can bring myself off while reading without having to scroll back up and reread is just cherry on top... lol. I hope you're not ashamed. You done good girl. Can't wait to see what happens next. Please update Devil's Advocate. It's been a while.
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