Wow.  This one cuts deep.  The characterization is perfect, as usual.

I have a confession to make:  when I first saw season four and tP 2001 I HATED the idea of the inner sense.  It sounded like so much pointless mumbo jumbo.  I've read a lot of fanfic since then, but you're this is the first piece I've read where I actually *liked* the inner sense as a plot point.  Your writing sells it--it's haunting, almost.

Heart pounding and emotional.  It's rare that those two descriptions can be used together.  Good work!

Okay, you've finally gone and made me cry for real.  Good writing . . . *sniff, sniff*  I'm off to read the sequel . . .

Would you write more if I said pretty please?  Strange and disturbing as it all is, I'm hooked.  Pretty please?

Author's Response: More is on the way and will be uploaded soon

Good chappie!

Gracie really does seem to have the emotional maturity of my fifteen year old sister.  She doesn't like not getting what she wants . . . and she has two muscley, violence prone men trying to make sure she gets what she wants.  Not a good combination . . .

The "boss" at "home" has me more worried, though.  Need more soon!

Now there's a chapter to make you cringe . . . but that's probably the idea.

When I wasn't cringing, I was very intrigued by the dialogue.

Just one suggestion:  you might consider upping the rating?  And maybe adding a warning or too?  I think this story might need it.

Thanx for the new chap!  Gracie's character is finally coming into focus.  Talk about brainwashing . . . It was clever the way you incorporated all the Australian trivia into the story.  It's just the sort of thing Jarod would be naturally curious about.

Lots of implied brutality in this chapter . . . It's interesting that Gracie went straight to Jarod after what happened.  Reverse Stockholm Syndrome?  Whatever the cause, it certainly makes the story interesting.

Hope there's more soon!

Eerie.

I . . . wow.  It's been a long time since a fanfic has left me speechless.

I usually hate stories where Sydney betrays Jarod because I love studying the bond between them.  This story was different.  All the characters were spot on and readers got a rare glimpse into Syd's tortured mind.

It's been a long time since a fic made my heart hammer and nearly brought tears to my eyes.  Your story did both in less than a thousand words and without the gimmicks of guns, bombs, or character deaths.  You communicate so much emotion using only the simplest of pretenses.  I love your writing style, and if there's more to this story I'd be eager to read it.

Wow.  I've never read "The Sound and the Fury," but this style really intrigues me.  It's a bit hard to read at first, but it feels more like Angelo's "voice" than anything else I've read.

Excellent piece.  Your analysis of the characters goes much deeper than most, and the portrayal is spot on.

Oh, did I ever laugh!  Want more when you get the chance, but not at the expense of "A Winter's Tale"!:):):)

Author's Response: Hey, updated. ;-)