Masterful. You don't add too much detail. You don't like to hear yourself speak as we say in the business. You're not too vague either. Balance is beautiful. You have that. You tell the story well and it's no secret how scarily on-the-nose you write the characters.

I know you aren't a shipper. I know it, and, yet still I read that last paragraph and I have to say after reading everything else pretender in the interwebs this is the most stunning bordering heart wrenching happy ending. It's not cheesy, it's not too syrupy. That Parker didn't reach the decision lightly and almost parted ways with Jarod makes it that much more

I know you aren't a shipper. I know it, and, yet still I read that last paragraph and I have to say after reading everything else pretender in the interwebs this is the most stunning bordering heart wrenching happy ending. It's not cheesy, it's not too syrupy. That Parker didn't reach the decision lightly and almost parted ways with Jarod makes it that much more poignant. Beautiful. Thank you for this. My review isn't posting properly.

This is so exquisite, ChristmasY but also keeping with the darkness of the TV series. I love it. It's a perfect Pretener Christmas tale with a happy ending! Can I trouble you for a sequel? The child is hers and I think Jarod has to find out IF she doesn't tell him.

I always crave more.

Until next time,

Ciao!

Hello there, you've been away for a while, is everything ok? I want to check in. It's not easy when you go silent on us especially when you've made it so clear you don't want to write if we share you on twitter or Facebook. You won't let us share you and your work and no one knows if you're ok. Please be well. We want you to please update something soon or write something new .. anything will be good even a short story. At least let someone know you're ok and safe. I care about you.

Ciao!

You cleverly include providing details that make what can seem implausible plausible. First you remind readers of the basically in-lab incest. Jarod and his mother's semen and egg combined is medical incest, and you give a plausible, extremely possible scenario in which Raines' ideas are approved and funded, and I can't believe the US or Russia haven't already prepared to repopulate this way. I hope you don't give republicans any ideas ...they already brag about "grabbing women by the you know what" and defend child predators like Dennis hastert, to Moore, etc, and support Matt gaetz child sex trafficker and rapist Brett kavanaugh and Clarence Thomas. Nixo was in office in 1969..makes sense. I'm curious to to see how they Jarod and Miss Parker go forward from here, and if they can. Jarod makes a compelling argument in their favor. Eloquently written.

Bravo!

This is evolving brilliantly. Miss Parker seems to be experiencing an unwanted self-reckoning and also a renewed battle with her inner voice/dominant parent's voice. I think Jarod's return to her life triggered the return of all of the baggage and the past, the romeo/juliet /forbidden fruit angle of her and Jarod's relationship, and it's reasonable and plausible that she'd fear even subconciously that Jarod's presence would attact any fragments of the Triumvirate, Quintumvirate or any other org to her and her children. She must also be worried about Jarod in law enforcement even if she seems displeased by him playing doctor. I'm not a mother, but I know many of them and all mothers feel inept and like they're screwing up, so that also seems in character and plausible and it adds even more realism, and makes Miss Parker even more relatable and real. That tune playing speaks for itself. She's running. I don't think that she or Jarod would ever really get away from each other. All the running only leads them running into each other. I feel lucky to have read this and that you're willing to explore deeper. It's an ancient television series and I'm glad it's been given new life by fans. You excel in every facet of writing and story telling. As a fan I particularly love the added-for-continuity paragraphs and how you move the story forward and it goes without saying the characters. I read your stories and visualize the characters, scenes, settings. It's amazing. I look forward to the next installment. Thank you.

Ciao!

I've missed you much. Welcome back. I believed that Parker would be forced to escort Jarod to the Centre when Lyle came into the play here. Jarod knows that, but knowing it doesn't make it feel like less of a betrayal. He's hurt. I don't think he meant to hurt her that badly, and I think when he sees the sweaty handprint on metal confirmed that he had hurt her and that returning him to the centre hurt her. She was clinging to railing, holding on for dear life actually. You capture the complexities brilliantly and insert the subtleties. There's such nuance in emotions and characters and it's delicate and you excel here where it's most important. If that wasn't enough you excel elsewhere. You're a wordsmith and you have truly mastered the craft. I look forward to reading the remainder, and to other story updates, and to new projects.

Take care of yourself.

Until next time Mirage or is it Maria?❤️

Ciao!

**chef's kiss**

Bravo!

I never mention your fight scenes when I review and I have to say now that I  can imagine myself as Jarod and also as Mark. You convey both perspectives brilliantly. Your fight scenes are as brilliant as your romance scenes and say in the life scenes. You inject so much energy, passion, and action into everything you write and that and the plausiblilty and characterizations are always so striking to me. I crave more already.

Until next time Mirage...

Ciao!

Bravo! Bravo!

I hear often about how brillantly you write Jarod and Miss Parker. Let me say that I'm astounded by how on-the-nose Lyle also is. Masterfully done, Mirage.

Your voice is powerful and your writing is stunning. Your prose is rich and moving. You leave me fascinated and in awe.

Thank you. More please? I'm more intringued than I can express.

Until next time, Mirage...

Ciao!!

You've outdone yourself again. This is edgy and outstanding work. I'm pleased to see that another chapter has alread been posted.

Exquisite as always, Mirage.

"Mr. Woozy." "Patchwork" of horrors. Those are references to the Wizard of Oz works, aren't they? I love that you included them, a little nod and homage, and it fit in so subtly and naturally. Now I'm wondering what other Easter eggs I've missed over the years. I also love that you pay homage to canon and provide continuity. You reminded me of the picnic scene that I'd honestly almost forgotten. Little Parker said she hopes the man she loves makes her lightheaded too. Now she's hanging out with Jarod and is experiencing vertigo but her mom is suggesting it's not just the boat causing it. I love your insights into the inner sense and how it works and how Parker is sitting there while Jarod cooks but her mind is engaged elsewhere. Jarod senses she doesn't feel well and that something else is going on and cooks her dry toast without drawing attention to it. I hope she hasn't been impregnated the way Catherine was, and thank you so much for this stand Parker has taken to not forgive and finally realize that her father basically raped Catherine to impregnate her with Ethan. It was always strange that Parker would shrug off something that traumatic and tragic and keep trying to please her father after that ultimate betrayal. This is real character growth and I agree with everything you said about lines being crossed, the taboo of estrangement. It's funny that this is considered a family show but it's centered around a dysfunctional family that is killing Parker. The writing is real and raw and I think maybe you can relate in some way. I can relate too. You really know the characters and where to put them. Please continue.

Ciao!