WOOT J-MAN is back in Da housseee! Thank you for showing that transition. I always wondered what it would like for Parker to be involved in Jarod's return. The only time he's been returned on TV is when she'd been shot and was in hospital and had nothing to do with his return.
So I feared this chapter would begin with Jarod all settled in back in his Centre wonderful lol. But you did the harder thing and showed Parker's disbelief, guilt, fear, and Jarod's fear, pain, and betrayal and you show us the tension that those emotions put on the characters, making them and their relationship more strained than usual. You showed us the transport, and what usually would be considered a transition scene left out. I'm glad you didn't leave it out. I love to see what happens between and behind scenes so big thanks from me. Oooohhh and he just got done confessing basically that there was something between them in Carthis and Parker was moved by that because even she can't deny what happened bewteen them. And that stirred in with Miuna's murder... so complex. You write them brilliantly and have a hell of a comman of the language, story, characters.. just all of it. Impressive as always.
Reviewer: Monica_Bitch Signed
[Report This]Date: 18/05/23 02:45 pm
It keeps better and better and I keep needing more and more. Please feed this addiction.
Reviewer: April L Signed [Report This]Date: 18/05/23 02:34 am
Holy hell this is amazing. You know how to get your hooks in deep. Top notch, mate.
Reviewer: James Signed [Report This]Date: 18/05/23 12:57 am
Didn't expect this and.... maybe I should have. Congratulations 🎉!! Please 🙠🙠🙠write more and don't ever stop.
Reviewer: Monica Signed [Report This]Date: 17/05/23 11:22 pm
Oooh wow, please keep going. I'm so stoked!
Reviewer: Lacy Signed [Report This]Date: 17/05/23 11:04 pm
Jarod's back in the Centre! Oh, my goodness. I can't wait to see where you take us next. Thank you for writing.
Reviewer: nopiupiroie Signed [Report This]Date: 16/05/23 09:44 pm
There must be more. Now. Please. OMG. I love it.
Reviewer: Renea Collins Signed [Report This]Date: 16/05/23 02:57 am
Welcome back. I love this and particularly love how in character they all are. I have to see them when I read and I always do when I read you. Parker tried to conceal her real emotions and not let it show that she is afraid, hurt, and doesn't want to return Jarod. But Jarod sees all. I think he was pushing her to see if she'd react. That was always my explanation for him being cold and mean to her on the tv series, too. Please continue.
Reviewer: Contessa Signed [Report This]Date: 14/05/23 10:53 pm
🎉 🎉 🎉 🎉 🎉 🥂 🥳🥂🥂🥳 🥳 🥂🎇 🎆 💥 LOVE this!
The Pretender is back at the Centre. OMFG! Thank you so much for writing and sharing with us. I know you get tired of it probably and that I can be 🥴 frustrating to you and I know the Twitter thing isn't what you want. But you keep going to keep this dream alive. really thank you
Reviewer: Lorraina Signed [Report This]Date: 14/05/23 05:53 pm
Oo oh this is so freaking awesome! More please?
Reviewer: Cal Signed [Report This]Date: 14/05/23 03:55 am
I've missed you much. Welcome back. I believed that Parker would be forced to escort Jarod to the Centre when Lyle came into the play here. Jarod knows that, but knowing it doesn't make it feel like less of a betrayal. He's hurt. I don't think he meant to hurt her that badly, and I think when he sees the sweaty handprint on metal confirmed that he had hurt her and that returning him to the centre hurt her. She was clinging to railing, holding on for dear life actually. You capture the complexities brilliantly and insert the subtleties. There's such nuance in emotions and characters and it's delicate and you excel here where it's most important. If that wasn't enough you excel elsewhere. You're a wordsmith and you have truly mastered the craft. I look forward to reading the remainder, and to other story updates, and to new projects.
Take care of yourself.
Until next time Mirage or is it Maria?â¤ï¸
Ciao!
Reviewer: Michael Signed [Report This]Date: 13/05/23 09:21 pm
Heyyy yeyy! You're back and better than ever and I can't get enough and always want more. Rich dialogue and pretender perfect characterizations and I love this story. More please??
Reviewer: TheDarkAngel Signed [Report This]Date: 13/05/23 07:11 pm
Holy WOW!! oh, Mirage you are an 😇 angel. You write like the devil sometimes fortunately for us. Thank you for not letting these characters fade and die, for breathing the breath of life into my favorite TV series, and it's refreshing breath. I can't let this series go even if the fandom is shriveling. You could be a writer for TV if you wanted and they are probably hiring what with the writer's strike. That way you can get paid for what you do so well and still have time to write for us If you don't already have a writing job that is. Please never stop writing.
Reviewer: needlepoint Signed [Report This]Date: 13/05/23 05:19 pm
Amazing 🤩ðŸ˜! I need more now.
Reviewer: Gunner Signed [Report This]Date: 13/05/23 05:22 am
Congratulations!🎉 Please continue! I love it so much. Please update your other fics, too.
Reviewer: Jameason Signed [Report This]Date: 13/05/23 01:21 am
Top shelf as always. You're a hell of a story teller and author.
Reviewer: Jake Signed [Report This]Date: 13/05/23 12:41 am
I love your stories. It's obvious that you put a lot of thought into them. They are satisfying and well written and of the highest quality. Gotta say I thought Jarod would escape at the last possible moment. I'm thrilled he didn't. Thank you for continuing to write and share with us. Now more than ever I need you to write when it is so obvious there will be no continue of the original pretender by Steve and Craig. I still vividly dream of the 3rd and 4th movies and it haunts me daily until I read you. You give me the pretender fix that I used to only get from a new episode of the pretender. I'd lose it without you and this place.
Reviewer: Jillian Signed [Report This]Date: 12/05/23 07:50 pm
💯 🎯 right in the Pretender feels. I can't wait to see how this will all go now that The Pretender has returned to the Centre.
Already there is perfect tension and passion. Its everything I've wanted. Please continue. I'm so thankful ðŸ™
Thank you thank you for writing and sharing you amazing talens.
Reviewer: Chloe Signed [Report This]Date: 12/05/23 03:29 am
WOOT! My namesake and Jarod are throwing the stabby words at each other, both are scared, Parker's got some guilt, Jarod feels she's betraying him. Those kids! They're all in character! Lordt!
I was afraid you were going have her help him escape, or they were gong to escape together, or he was going to escape alone. They can do any of those later but there's gotta be some Centre creaminess mixed into the yummy blend of dark roasted darkness you're brewing for us. Thank you for doing the hard thing.
I was worried that you had left us for another fandom. Please don't leave us. Write more. Update everything. I could read you all the time 22/7. I love this tv series and you keep it alive. Don't ever stop. I'm forever grateful to you.
Reviewer: The Miss Parker Signed [Report This]Date: 11/05/23 10:31 pm
Oooh o oo! So Parker takes Jarod in?! Oh, wow. He's not going to break back out in the next chapter is he.. it's always disapointing when he doesn't get to stay for awhile.
So I'm trying to unbox all of this and... what a perfect gift box you've arranged for us Mirage!! THANK YOU AGAIN before I continue...
So... in the second sentence we see that Parker is in disbelief just like Jarod is. She can't believe it's happening either ... suggesting she didn't expect Lyle to show up. She thought she'd break Jarod out and... let him go?? She's always let Jarod go. It's like their thing, their unspoken arrangement. She caught him, brought him to her house for the hypnosis and let him walk away.... which was hella surprising for someone who wants him back so bad so this... her disbelief in the second sentence is based on always letting him go.
Her next move is to give him fuel...his goal is fuel too, again both of them are insync with his plans to have the energy to escape.
She's got so much confusion in her mind...trying not to answer his questions, just wanting to get through it. Then he asks if she thinks he's dangerous after Carthis, she interrupted before he talked about the almostKISS, and I think she's disassociating here, but I also think... maybe she wonders if Jarod's guilty? Do you know in that episode where the Centre locks down and Briggie plans to blow up Mr. Parker's helicopters... Parker had to hear and see her MR Parker cry for Catherine before she continued on to save his life. This theory goes along with Parker always talking about the emotional umbilical between Sydney and Jarod and Jarod jumps right in to ask about snapping. I think Jarod not wanting to talk about Miuna when Parker mentioned her could have been misinterpreatated by Parker as Jarod not caring about the girl.
The verbal assaults are the same fear-anger chain reactions we've seen in the past from them. Jarod went a little too far tho cos he's desperate and we've seen Parker visibly wounded before like that, and it would hurt something awful when she's already vulnerable like this.. with her plans being messed up by Lyle's arrival and her not believing the reality that Jarod's going back to the Centre, and with this girl's brutal murder, too. We've seen before on the tv that she has a lot of sympathy and humanity for someone who is supposed to be so bad ass so this murder would bother her. Parker is right about ending up like her mother, and was right in the car limo in Scotland too. They were surrounded by guns, outgunned.
Lyle was perfectly in character, too. Wow. Amazing, Mirage.
That last line means Jarod will be giving them big trouble I bet. I can't wait. Jarod back in the Centre. No last minute escapes, gun fights, or his dad swinging in like Tarzan. Brilliantly done.
Reviewer: Jami Signed
[Report This]Date: 11/05/23 07:52 pm
Top notch, Mate.
You bring the characters to life.
Reviewer: King Of Pain Signed [Report This]Date: 11/05/23 03:37 pm
oh, wow, this is awesome. I can't blame either of them here for their actions And words. They're both afraid and there's so much appropriate tension. I love that Parker sees to it that he eats. I love that jarid pushes out the pain and anger to give his body fuel and doesn't think of miuna because right now the focus is escape. Out of the park brilliance Mirage. I thought I was gonna have to take to Twitter to get you back here . pheww just in time you show up and give me the update. please update all your other stories too. more!!
Reviewer: Leslie Signed [Report This]Date: 11/05/23 06:36 am
I'm excited for more!! Please write quickly. I know you're updating like five stories. I can never get enough of you.
Reviewer: Monica Signed [Report This]Date: 29/03/23 10:03 pm
Oh💕 Parker arrives with snark to spare and she's telling the truth..Jarod can be a drama queen sometimes.
Reviewer: Monica Signed [Report This]Date: 29/03/23 09:56 pm
Blue flickering lights! Jarod's in trouble now. Brilliant descriptions and plotting.
Reviewer: Monica Signed [Report This]Date: 29/03/23 09:52 pm
