Reviews For Slumber
You must login (register) to review.
Title: Chapter 1

Damn I mean... damn.

mind=blown

No more words needed

 



Author's Response:

Thank you for taking the time to read and review, Jami.

 Reviewer: Jami Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 04/12/21 06:03 pm
Title: Chapter 1

Have read this 4 times and can't get the image of Jarod shout-crying over Parker's body in her mum's coffin out of my head. I'm weirdly speechless and crying. These are the most painful few paragraphs I've ever read. You are brilliant. I need more.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Renee Collins.

 Reviewer: Renee Collins Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 04/12/21 05:53 pm
Title: Chapter 1

Ooh oh. Oh. This is brilliantly executed. 89 perfect words? How did you do it? Amazing. Parker saying she's nothing like her mother only to end up exactly like her mother. Why didn't I think of this story? I love it. Jarod is reacting the way I want him to and the way he should and the way he would. I think Sydney wasn't the only umbilical. If something happened to his Miss Parker he'd lose his sh!t. More from the Mirarchives please. You're a star! Keep writing. I love your writing. So many insights and original reads.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Jane Doe.

 Reviewer: Jane Doe Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 04/12/21 05:14 am
Title: Chapter 1

This is first-rate story telling and professionalism I've come to expect and always come back to. 

Cheers!



Author's Response:

Are you sure it was my fic you read?

Thanks for reading and for the generous review, Jeremy.

 Reviewer: Jeremy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 04/12/21 05:05 am
Title: Chapter 1

I'm crying. Jarod's agony breaks my heart. He killed for her. You gave the perfect amount of detail with few words. I'm too overcome with feelings right now to properly review but just know I love this and I'm thankful for you and your talent. I read things like this and hope everything is going well in your life. I know this is a dark series but you write these things so fluidly and vividly that I have to wonder about trauma in your life and be concerned.Don't flame me for caring.

Congratulations Mirage. Thank you for continuing to share your gift.



Author's Response:

I'm sorry. No one is supposed to cry. I'm not going to flame you, or anyone-- for any reason.

Everything is going in my life- sometimes well, sometimes not.

Please don't be concerned. Any trauma or horror you read in my scribblets is the direct result of the fictional Raines or other Centre madmen (or other fictional person in general).

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Christoph.

 Reviewer: Christoph Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 04/12/21 04:14 am
Title: Chapter 1

Breath taking is my first reaction. Jarod looked at the coffin and it hit so real. I've recovered from the numbness to say top notch authoring. You're a hell of a story teller and author. You're the best. Bravo!



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading and for the much-too generous review.

 Reviewer: James Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 04/12/21 03:13 am
Title: Chapter 1

Omigod what? I can't think all that well. You really threw me for a loop here. I legit believed that Jarod and Miss Parker were having a conversation and then I knew when she suddenly didn't reply to him with no-i'm-not-like-her that something might be wrong but not that wrong. Then he looked at the coffin and omigod what have you done? Miss Parker is in her mother's coffin. Jarod killed Raines because Raines killed Miss Parker. This is so short too. I feel punched in the heart Mirage but it is so beautiful. You are too talented. Why are you so talented? The way you wrote it, one line building it up and then omigod. I am going to cry now. I feel like I left Jarod alone with a coffin and he's going crazy. What will he do now? He is in love with her or he wouldn't be losing it that way. I need more of this. She's not gone now? I know it's complete and it's beautiful but I need more.



Author's Response:

Should I apologize?

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Jen.

 Reviewer: Jen Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 04/12/21 02:13 am
Title: Chapter 1

Now THAT is how it's done!
You are a wordsmith and that's why I feel this so deeply and see it all so clearly. My heart... oh Mirage.
You are good, girl!!!
I do want to check in 2 and see are you ok after all of this darkness. I know you probably get asked this alot but you write alot of darkness. You and Stephen King.. I'd like to pull you both aside and ask you all about your childhoods. I want to know where this horror you write comes from... somewhere dark. Stephen King is an alcoholic.
What about you?
I worrry about you. I hope your childhood was happy and perfect. I totally worry.
Now where is my selfie pic of you and Michael T. Weiss? I hope it's ok that I torment him about you. I love him so much and you have to talk to him. He's so fun to get to know. I want to show him your writing too ..this one mostly and show him how much his Jarod persona is devastated in this story. It's so devastating! MORE!!!


Author's Response:
Oh, fuck. Please tell me that you intended to type "torment you about him" and not the awful thing you typed.
Don't torment the talent, Lorraina.

Torment ME instead. Yes, I know you love him. Hell, everyone loves him, but what happens at Missing Pieces stays at Missing Pieces, and because I only use this name here at Missing Pieces you should absolutely never utter this name aloud to anyone (you certainly shouldn't show this to anyone) because it could trigger the apocalypse and isn't there a law against tormenting actors?

The "horror" comes from The Pretender. No, really. The premise of the series involves child abduction and exploitation, and, hell, that's just the intro.

Next stop: forced impregnation, forced gestation, and birthing-tables-with-fucking-shackles oh my!
You're evidently worried about the wrong person. Ahem.

I didn't create this series.
Birthing tables, Lorraina, with fucking shackles.

My childhood? Is everyone shrinkJarod now? Because that would be hell (just like my childhood). 

Stephen King is a joy, isn't he? I have all of his books, kindle copies of his books, would love to write something with him, and this is how I "fangirl", by the way: I'd love to write/act/sing/play with that author/actor/singer/band.

What about me? Are you asking if I'm an alcoholic? Seriously? I'm almost strictly a glass-of-wine-with-dinner-occasionally person, and I don't have a problem with that at all.


Reviewer: Lorraina Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 04/12/21 12:43 am
Title: Chapter 1

I'm dying! Jarod is a wreck. You wrecked Jarod!

I've never seen something so painful and beautiful and well written and this bittersweet that even in that kind of pain he's hoping Miss Parker will rest in peace and really be nothing like her mother in that way. I get your summary. I love the title. I can't believe I'm not ranting that you killed Miss Parker but it's only because you wrote it so well and it's so plausible. I'm gutted and I'm still like "but it's so perfectly constructed."

only you Mirage. Thank you for being you and sharing your talents and gifts as author and story teller. What else in the Mirarchives?



Author's Response:

You're not dying, I hope. I'm a bit surprised, too, that no one has slayed me for this.

I like to think that Parker is breakfasting in bed in Matera or Lucca (or anywhere, really) and not dead at all-- while Jarod weeps and mourns and wallows in regrets.

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Angel Parker.

 Reviewer: Angel Parker Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 03/12/21 10:32 pm
Title: Chapter 1

Holy wows! You just wrote a complete story in under 90 words and said so much with every word. Totally accurate Jarod was talking to Miss Parker who is inside her mother's casket and he was screaming and crying at some point and didn't realize it because he's insane with grief and I just can't right now...

Jarod killed Raines because Raines just killed Parker and Raines also killed Catherine. Oh, and they share face and name? Catherine Parker and Catherine Praker. I just.. can't...

This is the most tragic, stunning, heartwrenching, beautiful...and so short.

Oh... wait... he had to dig up the coffin and put Miss Parker in it... oh my god.

I don't like you. I love you. I hate you. I love you. I want more.

The Mirarchives IS a dark place. How do you find this darkness and then wrangle it and mold it and make it work so perfectly. I can't right now....

I'm so stunned and blown away.

 



Author's Response:

Yes, Jarod had to retrieve the coffin, and I imagine he also had to retrieve Parker's corpse from the Centre as well, after killing Raines. Jarod's been busy.

Thank you for reading, Chloe, and for the generous review and rating.

 Reviewer: Chloe Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 03/12/21 08:51 pm
You must login (register) to review.