I love this. Everything makes complete sense now, why Jarod assured her they would get Sydney through it, his anger and hurt when Sydney was still missing, and the reason MP always has that gun glued to her hand around Jarod. She never fired a shot at him during the tv series and was all talk and no action, bark and no bite. She's scared of him, I've always believed even from the pilot episode that she's scared of Jarod and always will no matter what the novels say but she's always scared that she'll let herself go and have sex with him. You write it the way it should be and cannon and I want more. Please. This is pretender perfect. It's heaven.
Reviewer: Miss Angel Parker Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 08/05/21 11:01 pm
Please give me more. Thanks for adding some sex even if not real sex and just oral. OMG. I need more. I guess Im glad syn is ok too. You did make me feel bad for him but he kind of has it coming.
Reviewer: JarodandParker4ever Anonymous [Report This]Date: 08/05/21 07:38 pm
More. Please. Now?
Reviewer: Shelby Anonymous [Report This]Date: 06/05/21 06:02 pm
I can't stop reading, can't stop loving this. I need more.
Those positions... are they possible? So like is Jarod ..he must have pushed his hands beneath her butt and lifted and when he shifted her to one arm her butt was like probably on his arm?
You're skinny aren't you? You're always writing stuff that makes me go..wow, skinny people sex. Like h0w Parker leans all the way to her knees with her forehead? Is that possible for some women? I'm not a really skinny person.. and I get that you have to write for a skinny person because she's skinny but ...it's motivation for me to lose weight cos skinny people sex is ultra hot ... isn't it, Mirage? I love the story.
So glad Sydney is ok again and I thought he would be. You love him. Please post more soon.
Reviewer: Chloe Signed [Report This]Date: 06/05/21 02:31 am
Bravo Mirage!
Thank you for including details of the weekend. We Pretender fans love our details. They were close to happiness and then it was snatched away, and that's a page right out of the Pretender canon. It's all the more plausible because of the aversion therapy and only aversion therapy would make sense because it's like Miss Parker would forget events and crimes that she just witnessed her father commit and each time she met Jarod it was always the gun and the fear, even though she'd literally just been in a bank with him or was saved by him. After 3 seasons of that I knew that something had to be seriously wrong with her. Nothing else was plausible or believable. You explained it all brilliantly.
Congratulations.
Take all of the time you need to update.
Ciao!
Reviewer: Michael Anonymous [Report This]Date: 04/05/21 01:54 am
The chapter notes are hilarious lol. The important thing is that Syd is alive but what we want more of is Jarod and Parker. I didn't expect the certain activity but oh my god I'm so glad you included it. I have to say that Jarod has been sufficiently dark just being the guy I remember from the series and you've done an exceptional job of fleshing out all of the characters and not filling this with details. You left me wanting info that you'll probally provide in due time. THere are story arcs and not everything can happen at once so I get that. You didn't give me too much certainly. You didn't start out too slowly but you also didn't give everything away too soon. I saw no typos or grammatical errors and I just love this. You're a gift to the fandom and to writing. Congratulations and thank you.
Reviewer: TheDarkAngel Signed [Report This]Date: 03/05/21 09:52 pm
So well executed. I like the expansive knowledge you have about medical stuff and varied topics. I always learn something when I read you and that's not the reason I read you but I feel like I'm learning and being entertained so that means it's not just a guilty pleasure ''''wink wink'''' plus it's well written and helps my brain. It's good for me. Thank you for sharing your talents with us.
Reviewer: Ali Perez Anonymous [Report This]Date: 02/05/21 11:48 pm
More.
Now.
please.
omg.
Reviewer: Melissa Anonymous [Report This]Date: 02/05/21 11:43 pm
Bravo! I love how you open in an emergency room waiting and then show the doubt Jarod begins to feel and why. You explain things perfectly and don't get bogged down in the details. It's a fine line and you are a high wire walker I guess because you don't cross the line into too many details.
I like how you gave us details of the weekend, and transitioned beautifully between scenes, present and past. Nick found them at a pretty low point after both of them were remembering the past and suffering from the Centre's crimes. and still upset about Sydne. That was an excellent choice that allowed Nick to think they were just upset for Sydney and nothing else was going on there.
You've implied all along that there has been a deep relationship between Sydney and his family, Parker let it slip to Jarod that Nicholas knew about Parker and Sydney's closeless, because they're all close. Michele gave Parker love and comfort and they are really familiar with each other and Parker is used to letting them fuss over her because she didn't object and wasn't strong enough at the time, and then Sydney said everyone he loves is in the same room so that means Jarod has been seeing Sydney, Michele, and Nicholas too. But they kept the gatherings separate. I want to know more about those relationships and if Sydney thought Parker avoided Jarod because of the Centre or some other reason. Did they like have two separate birthday parties and stuff, one for Jarod to attend and one for Parker to attend, or, what? You said 6 faces so that means Broots and Debbie were there? Does that mean gatherings involved Broots and Debbie, too? I want to know more about the relationships and how deep they all are.
Gotta say, the "certain activity" was amazing and I'm glad the people you let read this asked for dirty details but this wasn't dirty. It was nice and loving, it was really sweet and tastefully written and you stun me Mirage. I like that Parker instigated the oral sex and I love their funny conversations, and flirting. It's amazing. I also like that the weekend of oral sex followed years of communication and bonding and Jarod trying to understand her, and he's Jarod so yeah, he does put a positive spin on everything. He's so hopeful.
So brilliant job as always and thanks for being you and being here and ... just thanks. :)
Reviewer: Cal Signed [Report This]Date: 02/05/21 10:08 pm
Oh. Ohhhhh. "This is the second time you have reached for a gun that wasn't there—and that we both know you would never use—to defend yourself against a threat that isn't real. I don't think I have to tell you that your gun wouldn't be adequate if I were even half the threat your father taught you to believe I am." Ooh. Lots of oomph and I love Parker's reaction, and love to see how IN character they all are. The aversion therapy makes sense and what you've done... is doh brilliant as always. More, please?
[Report This]Date: 02/05/21 07:51 pm
Oh holy mother of... GIRL! You're the best. The best. Thank you so much for this. I was expecting any kind of sex because the story is amazing without it but those two went and had the best hottest kind of sex ORAL and holy wow had to grab the hubby and come back to this. So satisfying Mirage. Thank you.
Reviewer: Melanie Anonymous [Report This]Date: 02/05/21 02:34 am
Nice. I hope you'll update soon. You write the intimate parts very tastefully and professionally and we need more of that. You really keep them in character and know where to put them and it's a craft you've mastered. You're a wordsmith obviously. I'm glad Syd is ok. You got me on a cliffhangar worried about what Lyle is doing tho. Please update soon.
Reviewer: James Anonymous [Report This]Date: 02/05/21 01:15 am
OMG. Just omg. I can't get enough of this.
Hot hot hot and hot.
I can't help but to see Michael T. Weiss and Andrea here, doing this. You're awesome.
More!!
Reviewer: Valerie Anonymous [Report This]Date: 01/05/21 11:39 pm
How bad am I that Jarod's OhKay and thrusting his fingers in his mouth are scenes I can't stop seeing and that I will always remember? God I have always wanted to see him do that after fingering her.. booya instadamp panties. Good GOD woman. No obscenities this time and.. as much as I love darkJarod and rapeyJarod there is something to be said for SexyJarod in the heat of summer. I can see them shooting each other with water pistols too. Feel free to c ontinue making me happy. i'm so fuckn happy now. I'm glad they're not together and I'm glad they haven't had d*ck and kitten intercourse. Thanks for this and sorry if I was rude with obscenties. Love ya so much and love the way you write them. I saw no typos and wow your ability to keep them in character is crazy amazing.
Reviewer: Gunner Signed [Report This]Date: 01/05/21 08:19 pm
Ohhhhh! So wow. Had to change my panties. That was hot and hot. I love the way you write, how professional it is and how well plotted and written. You added oral sex to appease fans, how cool is that, and I can't tell where you added anything because it's so seamless, like it had belonged there, all the transitions were smooth. Something DID happen, but not sex sex, just oral, but that's amazing. I need more. More details. More sex. WOW. Just freaking wow. I love how chelly and Nick takes care of Parker and I need more of that too. So intense and rich. Powerful Mirage. More, I beg you.
Reviewer: Miss Shannon Anonymous [Report This]Date: 01/05/21 04:26 pm
Loving this and still waiting for more. I hope you're ok. It's been a while.
Reviewer: Kels Anonymous [Report This]Date: 30/04/21 12:04 am
Holy cow! This exceeded my expectations Mirage. What on earth are you doing in fanfic? You could be writing best selling novels. Even those stupid trumps get on the best sellers list! They buy their own books to do it and that's a bad example but you could be there, too, legitimately. You should be writing the Pretender novels. Please update soon. I need to know what happens next. Will Jarod and Miss Parker get closer now? Will he tell her what he discovered? Will she hate him when he tells her what he discovered? It's so intense. It's just like the series. Dare I say this is better than the series. Is that ok? Is there something I can say to make you share the next chapter faster? I need more.
Reviewer: Ree Anonymous [Report This]Date: 07/04/21 05:58 pm
I literally just sat down and read all of this in one delicious serving and I can't wait to read the next installment. I'm usually a hardcore die hard Jarod-MP shipper with little care for the Centre stuff or the Sydney stuff but balance the two perfectly and I don't know why or how because they aren't even together in this but the possibility that they were during a weekend made me hungry to know more and you write it well with the same forbidden fruit tension thing the pair have from what I saw on the series. I'm glad that Sydney is alive and hope he can be ok but with a lobotomy a person usually is never ok again. But that means Jarod and MP will have to take care of him forever? Being that close all the time would lead to them becoming intimate? I like that Jarod wanted her and couldn't have her on the tv series and you continue that want and need he has so beautifully. Your writing is really clean and professional. You know what you're doing and right now you're driving me crazy. I need more. Please?
Reviewer: Angie Anonymous [Report This]Date: 02/04/21 10:05 pm
What do I have to do to get more of this? Please tell me and I'll do it. You make it feel like coming home from school and tuning in on tv only you really make it plausible and you're continuing. The characters are the characters I know from the tv and love and ohhh thank you. I love this. It's so much fresher but it's still what I know. I love it. More please?
Reviewer: Amy Nicole Anonymous [Report This]Date: 01/04/21 03:40 am
Top notch writing as always. You're one of the few authors I read here and the only one that keeps me coming back.
Please update soon.
Reviewer: King Of Pain Signed [Report This]Date: 29/03/21 10:31 pm
Brilliant. I need more.
Reviewer: Markus Anonymous [Report This]Date: 28/03/21 10:53 pm
Thank you for your beautiful writing. I missed it very much. Hope to continue reading this soon.
Reviewer: Vania Anonymous [Report This]Date: 25/03/21 08:23 pm
I've been away from the fandom for a long while. Saw you trending among friends on twitter and yep here you are. OmG this amazing. Please keep writing. Your talents and gifts are needed so much. You're the best.
Reviewer: Miss Parkere Signed [Report This]Date: 25/03/21 12:37 am
Phew that was close but I know Syd will be ok cos I know YOU LOVE him. I recall the "older man" thing we discussed and I feel ya there. But you know that MTW is basically an older man too now so... just sayin'. It's 'bout to kick in, the difference is I'm older too but you aren't. You're still young enough that MTW will legit be an odler man. Let the fangirling begin for you lol.
I love the writing, the storytelling. You've mastered the craft and write them in character. I can't ask for more but I'm legit gonna ask you to write more. Please.
Reviewer: Jillian Signed [Report This]Date: 21/03/21 10:17 pm
Delightful!!! Damn, girl, you're an amazing writer. I'm wowed again. More please.
Reviewer: needlepoint Signed [Report This]Date: 17/03/21 10:38 pm
