Amazing. Have I told you lately that your prose is exceptional and your characterisations are eerily spot on?
Firstly, I love Parker's interrogation, how it's all business as usual at first [possible flirting?] and then she holds Jarod's feet to the fire. He comes through ok. I'm glad about that. He's not a stalker, wasn't watching her, was just watching out for himself without being too weird about it.
There are still some feelings there. The visual descriptions you share, the smiles of sorrow and longing. Oh, Mirage. It's like I'm watching them.
There is always a way back. That's the most Jarod thing to say ever and I love you for climbing into his mind and into all of these characters mind somehow.
Miss Parker's aw honey you shouldn't have was the same perfect sharp wit but I think she meant it too and don't blame her for any reluctance to boot up that laptop.
Many authors can accurately write one character well. You write them all and I feel young again and like I'm watching a lost episode. Thank you for sharing your gifts with us.
I've said it before but here I go again. This is Pretender perfect.
Reviewer: Con-O Signed
[Report This]Date: 20/09/21 07:31 pm
Yes. I'm so glad you're back. More, please?
Reviewer: Jillian Signed [Report This]Date: 18/09/21 09:42 pm
Please make it happen. I love your stories so much. You're my favorite author and you keep it real always. Congrats!
Reviewer: Miss Angel Pretender Anonymous [Report This]Date: 18/09/21 08:30 pm
Hey look at you go. Girl, keep it coming. I love your writing voice and story telling skills and how reading you is like watching The Pretender. More please?
Reviewer: Imogen Anonymous [Report This]Date: 18/09/21 07:51 pm
Top notch!
Don't you dare give up now.
Author's Response:
I fully intend to complete the scribbling. Give me a minute.
Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Reviewer: Jarod Anonymous [Report This]Date: 17/09/21 10:43 pm
"awww honey you shouldn't have" LOVE. That's the best line eva.
Awesome job Mirage. Don't stop now. You rock!
Reviewer: Kat Anonymous [Report This]Date: 17/09/21 05:09 pm
You don't ever hold back and I love it. Your writing is really crisp, bold & energetic. Every letter is placed to perfection. Your prose is punchy and concise. You blend narration and prose brilliantly and transition with a natural ease. It's enthralling. It's poignant. It's addictive. I laugh. I long. I cry. I can't look away.
Some subject matter hasn't always been comfortable.....I say that after squirming and cringing while watching Risque Business where Jarod pulls the story of two rapes from a sex therapist.
Reading is easier usually but because you write so vividly I still SEE everything going on in your story. The same thing I love about your writing is the same thing that scares me about your writing. You yank me into the story and sometimes I don't want to be there. It's a compliment I swear. I'm sorry if it seems too critical. I don't know how you do it. I don't think I'll ever be able to tackle some subject matter at all and definitely not at your skill level. Please keep writing. Please?
Reviewer: Leslie Signed [Report This]Date: 17/09/21 04:23 am
Yes, "haven't we all" been having trouble sleeping. So much yes. Your stories are so relatable and relevant. I'm sleeping better since the elections at least, the recall election and Presidential one. Small wins right? You're the highlight of the year, too. I love this story so much, how well it's plotted and all of the surprise twists. You're doing a beautiful job. Thank you for being you. Keep writing please.
Reviewer: needlepoint Signed [Report This]Date: 17/09/21 03:08 am
My heart. Ah, man, they are talking about the plans they were making and you can tell they still love each other. Evil. You are evil. You're like Steve and Craig evil. But you answer the questions and you finish the story.
You always keep me wanting more. So hurry up and write.
Reviewer: Lisa Anonymous [Report This]Date: 17/09/21 12:03 am
Amazingingly written. I've been sitting here reading this thinking that Jarod has moved on and thinks they were wrong together and what do you do? You just had him talk to himself like we all know he does on the dvds like all of the time and I'm so relieved now. Even if they don't get together they still want to. Sometimes we can't be with who we want for reasons that we can't control the way Jarod and Parker are on the dvds and that's fine with me. As long as they love each other and secretly miss each other. Thank you for all this work and keeping this series alive. It's important. This is one of the better shows out there. It had problems, wasn't consistent, stretched reality, bent logic, and that was before the entrance and exists of long lost unknown family, the way Jarod always just stands there when he finds his mother instead of running to her. He doesn't know what to do when he finds her like Parker doesn't know what to do with Jarod when she finally catches him and then the inner sense happened and then stopped happening and then it got worse in Scotland and I think a genius in that shape could stand a little cold water long enough to catch the boat. Warm up hugs with mom would have been cool. I just read The Pretender Survival Guide by Evlyin so I'm feeling all of that. Somehow you take all of the craziness and solve it. The stuff I hated most is what you repaired or explained..like only an editor and writer could to make it make more sense. I don't know what I did to deserve you but thank you. I know you love this series. I can tell. You're here for a reason and I'm grateful. I love it, too, and I'm so glad it's still alive. Thank you to the stars and back. Stay healthy and safe too.
Reviewer: Felicia Signed [Report This]Date: 16/09/21 08:26 pm
Stunning. I just read this twice. I have never seen/heard better dialog. Heck, I haven't seen better writing. Full stop. The way she tells him that there was no way back and his reaction. I could see it. You're one of those authors who illustrate with words and put me in the scene with the characters. That can be scary. This time it was bittersweet. They stop short of flirting. I'm glad they didn't flirt. But I love the playfulness in the first part of this, too. Who am I kidding I love it all. You're amazing. MORE!!
Reviewer: Gunner Signed [Report This]Date: 16/09/21 04:44 am
Yay! There you are.
Jarod:"You're not Nicholas."
Parker: "Astute observation. You must be a genius or something."
Ohhhhh I love Miss Parker more than anything and you write her better than anyone. This back and forth with Jarod and his sweetness has me over here grinning like a dummy. People call you the antiJarod but look at you go. You write it like you it is and sometimes it is ugly. Or what you wrote, "truth's immutable brutality." Keep writing the truth. I love it. Even when it's dark and even if it is brutal.
Pretender Perfect as always Mirage. A definite 10.
Thank you for sharing your talent with us and congratulations on another beautiful chapter.
Reviewer: Chloe Signed [Report This]Date: 16/09/21 02:58 am
You have been so missed.
Your writing is totally exquisite. I just can't even... the way you open and close the chapter. Transition. Descriptive work. Expressions. Mannerisms. Dialog. Charaterisations. Story telling. Grammar. You have got it all. It's so mind blowing. I can never get enough. I need more.
Reviewer: JarodAndMissParker4ever Anonymous [Report This]Date: 16/09/21 02:41 am
OMG they are so cute together that it's like the universe wants them to be together forever and why don't you? Outstanding writing Mirage. That ending is full of hope. Make it so!!
Reviewer: Jen Signed [Report This]Date: 15/09/21 07:17 pm
Ahhhhh ok wow. The beginning. What a shippery feels beginning. They are so sweet together. It's perfect. Jarod is a doctor? OMG! Parker calls him out for that and for all of the other sketchy shit he did and I love it and she also is reasonable when he tells her the truth that he watched and listened but only in the Centre, which is fair. SHe was chasing. When she stopped he worried. Thank you for mentioning unspoken arrangements. I always thougth they had somethign between them they never discussed. Parker is still evading him hella mucho here.Things are still unfinished. I've got faith you'll finish it. I love Parker's gentle snark, slightly saltiness, the "astute observation you must be a genius", the "traitor", the "aww honey you shouldn't have." The end is packaged as beautiful and bookends the perfection. Jarod saying "no, I don't believe me either" after Parker leaves. She leaves because she's hurt that he said that "not soon enough" wasn't the correct answer for them. She still has feelings. She told him that when she basically said time flew by really and that means nothing changed for her. The way they talked about the places they were going to see was heartwrenching. The longing sorrow looks...oh, Mirage. You take my breath away with the beauty, pain, love, and tragedy. I need more. Now.
Reviewer: TheDarkAngel Signed [Report This]Date: 15/09/21 01:54 am
I needed like an entire minute to sit and process that one. Very intense and powerful writing Mirage. Your command of the language and these characters is impressive as hell. The intensity between Lyle and Parker stunned me. She is not suicidal. She was testing him I think and showing him she isn't scared. I think she wants him to fight. She's a ballsy woman, has always been. But I'm still on the edge of my seat with my bottom jaw on table here. You remind us all of Jarod's creepiness and even I feel his eyes on them from here but I hope he isn't watching. I want him to move forward with Parker and I don't know how she can do that feeling this freaked out by him. I'm freaked out by him too and now when I watch an episode I always, say, "yep, Mirage was right. He's being stalky and weird." I didn't see it when I was younger. But it was right in my face the entire time. I thought he was good and the others were all bad. Now I think Jarod is kind of bad. Like Dexter and Lucifer in some ways. I need more of this either way. You're like crack cocaine and meth and oxy. But more addictive.
Reviewer: Monica_Bitch Signed [Report This]Date: 25/08/21 01:00 am
Wow I'm blown away by your writing. I love all of Parker's internal dialog. My GOD you capture her and all of these characters brilliantly and your descriptive work is stunning. I can see everything and everyone. You keep me coming back. I'm stoked that Lyle is getting some help even if it's not what he thinks of as help. I will read this chapter again and again. It's all beautiful and amazingly well written. Please don't ever stop writing. More!!!
Reviewer: Jillian Signed [Report This]Date: 22/08/21 01:36 am
Mirage, Mirage, I can never get enough of your writing. I'm eternally impressed and cannot wait to see where you'll take us next.
Congrats!
Reviewer: Chloe Signed [Report This]Date: 11/08/21 04:34 am
So... the art? The way you talk about art? Is that part related to a certain actor's art? I'm really curious.
You ARE an author. When I'd rather read your fanfic and pay you $$$s for it than read the official novels... there is no doubt that you're an author. I crave the next part already. Thanks for sharing and congratulations!
Reviewer: Jerry Anonymous [Report This]Date: 07/08/21 10:48 pm
I love the visual descriptive work and.. everything else. Amazed. I'm so amazed. More please?
Reviewer: Jen Signed [Report This]Date: 02/08/21 08:35 pm
Oh my GODD! I love this.You totally rule!
More!!
Reviewer: Angie Anonymous [Report This]Date: 31/07/21 04:24 pm
I'm in love with your writing. You built the tension and horror up in this chapter and the anxieties and guilt Parker was already feeling would be made so much worse by the silence of that building and the art was evoking emotions, too, and then Lyle added to all of that by talking about Jarod watching and it's common knowledge to all fans that Jarod stalked her, followed her, watched her on the tv series and then he knew she didn't want the police involved in this story and also on tv and that's why she went to get LYle out of hospital in this novel and then later Jarod even told her he had camera inside the Centre because she had stopped chasing him. I think it would be unnerving and really uncomfortable to feel like you're being watched. ON top of all those emotions Lyle began pleading with her for help and crying. I think her tears are called for. She's really vulnerable also after nearly losing Sydney and with Jarod being in her life again and also after learning about the aversion therapy and torture she went through. She probably thought she could save Ray too but Lyle killed him and it's so much pain and so many different emotions. I think she still loves Jarod anyway probably. It's so hard for them always. It's so emotional and vivid. I could read you forever. Please keep wrriting.
Reviewer: Miss Angel Parker Anonymous [Report This]Date: 30/07/21 08:27 pm
SQUEE! Oh, wows, Mirage you went there and I'm so thrilled. That was a super intense moment between the twins...just omg! Lyle saw it in her face that Parker could empathetize with him and I love that he offered to free her. Maybe he thinks now he can try to be strong and get through because his sister is doing the same?? I love it. Your writng is hella professional and the characters are always in character. It's all so intriguing. I love the mystery of the painter always painting a blank white canvas on a blank white canvas, and yay Lyle respected those pronouns. You are a rock star! More please?
Reviewer: TheDarkAngel Signed [Report This]Date: 30/07/21 07:45 pm
Bravo! It's always beautiful to see that you've updated. I never know what you'll do and as always I'm surprised.
Miss Parker turning to Jarod and telling him to deal with the doctor is the most Miss Parker thing ever or since the last Miss Parker thing she did in one of your pieces. There's a comradery there whether you and Miss Parker want to admit or not Mirage and you know that obviously.
Jarod is typical Jarod here and you always excel with characterizations so this is no different. Miss Parker chooses to tag along but he also knows enough about her mind to know that she would wish she had asked where he was going prior to tagging along.
Love Lyle or hate him or feel indifferent like you but he's right about prisons and he's right that cops get trigger happy. I love that Jarod actually wants to do right by Lyle finally and it's a moment of grace really that I didn't see coming ever. Jarod had opportunities to do this on our televisions and that would have been perfect justification for him staying close to Blue Cove, more than he didn't to "kill the drama" as Parker said once on the tv series. Instead it seems like he played God with Miss Parker's life. I think she would need the encouragement to comfort Lyle. My heart swelled when she apologized to her brother for what she was doing and the scene is she and Jarod holding a recently sedated Lyle down so it's traumatic for her and Lyle, especially when she knows that she was probably treated the same by Raines during the aversion torture therapies.
Thank you for the beautiful update and keeping this series alive.
It's not easy to be patient. I wish you well and quick writing Mirage. Until next time
Ciao!
Author's Response:
Dude, same. I never know what I'm going to do either, and no one, absolutely no one, is ever more surprised than I. Right, I'm acutely aware that the pair have established a genuine camaraderie, and I can freely admit it. Oh, I was truly shocked when Parker joined Jarod in the van- and I have some sympathy for Jarod and the position he's in, the conflict. Yeah, Lyle is never exactly incorrect. I think we can understand the presence of ill intent while also understanding that these beloved, more human, characters are capable of telling the truth; their honesty is brutal and they are often crass about it, and I suppose it's off-putting and sort of compels people to dislike them. Mm, yes, Jarod had the opportunity to do all sorts of things (give Parker her mother's diary, leave Parker alone, etc.); he is the "chosen one" haha; of course he's playing god. Scary.
Thank you for reading and reviewing.
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