lobotomy..the centre is a messed up place and I'm thankful to you for exploring it's darkness.
Reviewer: lisa Signed
[Report This]Date: 25/03/23 08:53 pm
Tight story all the way. This chapter is really tight. You start revealing everything and let it unfold naturally. That requires some talent and you seem to filled with talent.
Reviewer: Angela Penn Signed [Report This]Date: 23/09/21 04:32 am
Holy cow! This exceeded my expectations Mirage. What on earth are you doing in fanfic? You could be writing best selling novels. Even those stupid trumps get on the best sellers list! They buy their own books to do it and that's a bad example but you could be there, too, legitimately. You should be writing the Pretender novels. Please update soon. I need to know what happens next. Will Jarod and Miss Parker get closer now? Will he tell her what he discovered? Will she hate him when he tells her what he discovered? It's so intense. It's just like the series. Dare I say this is better than the series. Is that ok? Is there something I can say to make you share the next chapter faster? I need more.
Reviewer: Ree Anonymous [Report This]Date: 07/04/21 05:58 pm
I literally just sat down and read all of this in one delicious serving and I can't wait to read the next installment. I'm usually a hardcore die hard Jarod-MP shipper with little care for the Centre stuff or the Sydney stuff but balance the two perfectly and I don't know why or how because they aren't even together in this but the possibility that they were during a weekend made me hungry to know more and you write it well with the same forbidden fruit tension thing the pair have from what I saw on the series. I'm glad that Sydney is alive and hope he can be ok but with a lobotomy a person usually is never ok again. But that means Jarod and MP will have to take care of him forever? Being that close all the time would lead to them becoming intimate? I like that Jarod wanted her and couldn't have her on the tv series and you continue that want and need he has so beautifully. Your writing is really clean and professional. You know what you're doing and right now you're driving me crazy. I need more. Please?
Reviewer: Angie Anonymous [Report This]Date: 02/04/21 10:05 pm
What do I have to do to get more of this? Please tell me and I'll do it. You make it feel like coming home from school and tuning in on tv only you really make it plausible and you're continuing. The characters are the characters I know from the tv and love and ohhh thank you. I love this. It's so much fresher but it's still what I know. I love it. More please?
Reviewer: Amy Nicole Anonymous [Report This]Date: 01/04/21 03:40 am
Top notch writing as always. You're one of the few authors I read here and the only one that keeps me coming back.
Please update soon.
Reviewer: King Of Pain Signed [Report This]Date: 29/03/21 10:31 pm
Brilliant. I need more.
Reviewer: Markus Anonymous [Report This]Date: 28/03/21 10:53 pm
Thank you for your beautiful writing. I missed it very much. Hope to continue reading this soon.
Reviewer: Vania Anonymous [Report This]Date: 25/03/21 08:23 pm
I've been away from the fandom for a long while. Saw you trending among friends on twitter and yep here you are. OmG this amazing. Please keep writing. Your talents and gifts are needed so much. You're the best.
Reviewer: Miss Parkere Signed [Report This]Date: 25/03/21 12:37 am
Phew that was close but I know Syd will be ok cos I know YOU LOVE him. I recall the "older man" thing we discussed and I feel ya there. But you know that MTW is basically an older man too now so... just sayin'. It's 'bout to kick in, the difference is I'm older too but you aren't. You're still young enough that MTW will legit be an odler man. Let the fangirling begin for you lol.
I love the writing, the storytelling. You've mastered the craft and write them in character. I can't ask for more but I'm legit gonna ask you to write more. Please.
Reviewer: Jillian Signed [Report This]Date: 21/03/21 10:17 pm
Top notch Mirage. The top of the top notch dare I say.
I'm sorry about the other review. In the future I'll review you as Captain Obvious to remind me of my mistake.
Please update soon. You're rocking it.
Reviewer: Michael formerly not THAT Michael now known as Captain Obvio Anonymous [Report This]Date: 16/03/21 02:58 am
Can I have some more please?
So much drama and excitement. Will Jarod kill the baddie? What next? So excited for more. Masterful story telling and writing.
Reviewer: Gwen Anonymous [Report This]Date: 14/03/21 11:52 pm
Oh my God I love this so much. You write them as they are and I need that so much in my life right now. I saw the review response where you said you might as well drop the medical drama and oh my god are you serious? Someone said you didn't like MTW but now I'm curious and I think it isn't true. I know I LOVE him and can't understand why anyone wouldn't want to hit that. I think you do like him. Would you seriously work with him?! Keep writing. I need you now more than ever.
Reviewer: Claire Anonymous [Report This]Date: 13/03/21 11:59 pm
Can't get enough of this. More please!
Reviewer: Gunner Signed [Report This]Date: 13/03/21 05:19 am
Amazing. Your descriptive work is amazing, the characterizations are amazing. You transition seamlessly. The story has me on the edge of the seat.Please update soon.
Reviewer: Leslie Signed [Report This]Date: 12/03/21 06:30 am
I need more of this now. Please.
Reviewer: Renee Collins Anonymous [Report This]Date: 12/03/21 06:15 am
I love it. It is perfect.
Merci!
Reviewer: Mlle Parker Anonymous [Report This]Date: 12/03/21 04:59 am
You always yank me back me. OMG. I like that Miss P saved the day here by saving Jarod. Saving Jarod helped Jarod help Sydney. Miss P also helped Jarod help Sydney hands on and they do work together well. I feel the chemistry between the characters. I love you for that!
Really complicated things happened but maybe they can work it out. I love that Miss Parker really saved the day. Hero! Right on time for women's day!
More please?
Reviewer: Lorraina Signed [Report This]Date: 12/03/21 04:23 am
Ahhhhh. Oh I love this. I love how Miss Parker recognizes she is not invincible and can't magically save him, and is allowing herself to cry. I love everything about it.. except that there isn't more to read. Hurry and update. Love you.
Reviewer: The Miss Parker Signed [Report This]Date: 12/03/21 01:26 am
Top notch. The rumors are all true. You're amazing. More, please?
Reviewer: Jason N Anonymous [Report This]Date: 11/03/21 05:28 am
Ooh. Stunning. Thank you so much for this Mirage.
Reviewer: Christoph Signed
[Report This]Date: 11/03/21 03:28 am
Oh, wow, phenomenal writing here like always Mirage. Gah, I'm envious.
Aversion therapy explains so much and I prefer that as a way to go forward than if Parker were just really bad like she is on the tv show, but assuming this had happened she wouldn't have to feel like she needed to be forgiven. I always imagined that for her and Jarod to be eventually be together she would feel really obligated to be really sorry and like she has to earn his love and try to compensate to be worthy. I hated that thought when I was younger watching the tv. I like this so much more.
The Ementine drug causes vomiting and naseau and can cause ulcers and other problems. My shrink uncle knows about this therapy. He asked to see this and I showed him. He didn't realize it was fanfic but after reading you has a really high opinion of fanfic. I love that Jarod's reaction to Parker being tortured with this therapy is the very reaction Parker would have had all the times they showed her pictures of Jarod, or whatever is was, to make her averse to him. Vomiting. I hope I'm not wrong to assume much. Jarod's thoughts were that they punished her because of him and Raines wanted her loyalty so they had to do something to turn her from Jarod.
You give us all of the details but do it in just a few words.
The horror show part, Miss Parker having to help Jarod. I asked my shrink uncle if he knew why Jarod would want the uninjured eye bandaged too and gah you are a genius! You're really familiar with first aid and medicine. The eyes would both track and that could injure the already big mess going on in Sydney's eye. You gotta bandage both. I get stabilizing the object and not removing it and especially not in a dirty place like that. The ng tubes... oh, gah. Force feeding or was that for torture purpose only?
My mind can't stop thinking.
Please never stop writing.
Reviewer: Chloe Signed [Report This]Date: 11/03/21 01:29 am
Ohhhh, wooot! Mirage is back! "women frighten me" so much this. I love it. I like that Jarod has women's backs and I love that you know that Jarod would have our backs lol. You're not the Jarod hater I thought you were and I guess you've been trying to tell us that for a while. This helps.
SO, omg. Aversion therapy and tampering like that would explain why MP always forgets that Jarod helped her and her daddy betrayed her like the very next episode lol. And that the drug used in the aversion therapy could have caused the ulcer... wow!
Mind=blown!
Reading your description of how Jarod reacted to Parker's tears reminded me of their graveyard scene when he almost lost it and then took a deep breath and lifted an eyebrow and then he totally ran from there because it was just too much. He took a breath so deep his chest moved. So I think that's what he did in this scene too that you wrote. OMG. Amazing. That Jarod vomited too when he realized what had been done to her, that she had been given a drug that made her vomit tons over the years ^I googles it^ is a stroke of genius on your part. He reacted to her vomiting presumably after being induced to vomit as a react to Jarod. That's like the ultimate in Jarod feeling what she had felt then. It wasn't her fault, and realizing his own wrongs because he was tormenting her all those years under the assumption that rejecting him was a choice, but it wasn't really completely her choice. Even if she hadn't been drugged, coercion was involved.
The visuals are amazing.
I'm so super glad that Syd is ok for now. I love the details you impart like how he's speaking German and asking for his mother. It tells something about the state of his mind and the trauma.
This was so rich in detail and craftsmanship. You're a wordsmith and I'm an addict. I need more. You go places I'd never thought of. I want more. I need more.
Reviewer: Jen Signed [Report This]Date: 10/03/21 09:36 pm
