I remember the first time I read this and how shook I was. I should have reviewed this then. Parker's slipping a little bit, trying to keep up the facade but smoking again and scotch. She's shaken and still trying to be tough. You balance her emotions brilliantly.
Reviewer: lisa Signed
[Report This]Date: 25/03/23 04:02 am
Sydney and Parker both warned the Centre about severing the emotional umbilical. This is exactly what I'd expect Jarod to do. He's always been crazy. He's good crazy part of the time and a hellion the rest of the time. I so enjoy reading you Mirage. I've missed this.
Reviewer: Angela Penn Signed [Report This]Date: 23/09/21 04:07 am
oooh a scene I've always wanted one where Jarod forces Parker to see that she's helpless and better watch out. He could do anything and I always wondered why he only played pranks and juvenlie crap games with her when she's complicit hunting him down like a piece of meat. I feel sorry for her too sometimes because her mum did die trying to rescue her and all the children including Jarod but Jarod really shouldn't have put up with so much of her shite over the years. He can be a genius, do anything. He should have done some bad things to her. Here its realistic and she knows he can do anythign and there's nothing sh ecan do with her back to the wall like it is but she's still so strong. You keep the realism going and canon. I like how Jarod is going back to Lyle now and it's like he can't help himself.
Reviewer: Jodi Anonymous [Report This]Date: 11/05/20 12:09 am
Bravo. Your writing is on point and the characters are the characters and that's refreshing. It's always concerning when you write Jarod dark even though I know he had his dark moments. I hope you still realize that Jarod is a good guy, the hero of the series Pretender and I think we can agree with that. It's hard to argue about his goodness. This is plausible. Jarod loves Sydney and is panicking now and that's well in character. Jarod and Miss Parker have always hurt each other this way. Neither mince words and they can be rough around the edges. I really appreciate that I recognize the characters, that they remain in character and that you haven't changed anything really. You picked up the pen and continued the story.
Top notch Mirage. I expect nothing less from you.
You're a superstar.
I await impatiently for an update.
Ciao!
Reviewer: Michael Anonymous [Report This]Date: 25/11/19 01:09 am
I'm gonna need more of this real soon. Please say you're writing more. Please. You write so well that I can only call it magic. It's magic and I'm addicted. More.
Reviewer: April Anonymous [Report This]Date: 22/11/19 10:27 pm
OMG!!! I f-ing love this Mirage. Ooh ooooh uhhh Jarod is so angry and afraid ...dangerous. HOT. They haven't touched much yet. I want to MORE about the weekend. You write them perfectly that I can't--- shit I need more. I see Michael and Andrea and my favorite actors when I read this. MOre more MORE!!
I saw the response to my other review and yah I wouldn't try to hit that right there on the sidewalk.. or I don't know. I probably would. But I wouldn't commit a crime against him. I like him. I wouldn't do anything to Michael that he didn't want me to do ya know?? I totally know what you mean. I should tone it down and I will. I'll stick to the review but I am glad that you don't have some issue with him because I want you to like all of the people that I like.
Reviewer: Lorraina Signed [Report This]Date: 20/11/19 12:38 am
I love that you show us the real damage and the darkness that comes from it. Real damage has been inflicted by the Centre and I know most of the victims have good coping skills but I have thought they all coped too well and Miss Parker especially would learn about some terrible things her father did in one episode and then act like she's forgotten about the terrible things in the NEXT episode. She's repressing or thinking about something else. THat's not healthy. I think Jarod copes too well too but he also seems to be getting revenge for what happened to him each time he takes down a bad guy. THat's not healthy either. I think Jarod would lose his mind if Sydney was gone and I think it would happen slowly like you're doing it here. His thought processes arent' fully functional and this is so accurate and plausible and I love it. I can see this has the potential to become even darker and hella fast and I'm on board. This isn't a kid's series. It's not a famiily show. It's dark and I get why ou write it as such. more please? Congrats and thank you for keeping this poor little series alive. No one writes them better than you.
Reviewer: Jen Signed [Report This]Date: 19/11/19 08:39 pm
YES! I'm so thankful that you're updating more often and you got quality AND quantity and that's hard to pull off.
Jarod is afraid and that's obvious and he thinks his best lead is someone in the Centre which makes perfect sense and it's either Parker, Lyle, Or raines but raines is missing so that narrows it to Parker and Lyle and Lyle could be behind it because he might be trying to entrap Jarod and it would be easier to have Jarod come to him but Jarod doesn't know about this other Centre victim so that cycle you mention will have him going back and forth between Parker and Lyle until one of them gives him some information that he can follow or confesses and I can see getting way violent and I'm scared because this IS Jarod and he can be anything. I'm a believer. I'm still on board no matter what happens next. I welcome the darkness. More please? I'm so excited.
Reviewer: TheDarkAngel Signed [Report This]Date: 18/11/19 08:57 pm
Top notch Mirage. This is another totally plausible piece of fiction and it's been riveting but also horrific to witness and I do feel like I'm there witnessing this. I like how Jarod is devolving while the guy that has Sydney is also devolving and while Miss Parker is also devolving. They are all products of the Centre and are all coping badly. Parker's "goddamn delight my life is" is brilliant. I love it and I want more.
Reviewer: Christoph Signed [Report This]Date: 18/11/19 01:59 am
