Hmmmmmm. So I heard you don't like Jarod?? I read the first part with scenes with Jarod and Cate and kept thinking Mirage doesn't like Jarod? Really? Hmmmmmmm. Not even a little bit? Do you realize what you've written? What Jarod did for his daughter is beautiful and I'm a big muscular, bearded, tatooted ugly biker but you made my eyes get misty. She was terrified of storms and he didn't force her to confront the fear or any of that. He did it the right way and in a safe way so she knows that storms get some respect but that fear isn't really necessary. You can make fun of me and call me a whimp or a girl but it's a precious scene between father and daughter. How on earth did you think to do this for Jarod and his daughter and for all of us? It's really heart warming.

You are too humble and modest. It's not fanfic. It's fiction. Stop calling it fanfic. I didn't see any typos. I've addressed your notes now I'll review this chapter.

I said already how natural they are and they are. In this chapter they continue to grow closer and become more familiar. I read this and it seems so easy but because you're not a shipper it probably wasn't easy for you. I want to thank you for doing what isn't easy and listening to your Muses.

Now I need to talk about Margaret the most complicated character. She is going to be doubtful. We saw her run from Parker in fear in Scotland so we know somethings up but you've done an astounding job of fleshing her out and developing her and I love her now, I empathize with her. I know why she's behaved the way she has. You give us the missing pieces and they fit perfectly.

Overall this chapter was Jarod in full psychiatrist mode and it's amazing how he detaches himself from the personal feelings and slips into the other skin. I was going to say a little weird too but he did this with her in the past before they were in love. I think they were in the Keys when he offered to help her remember, something about infomercials and he was talking about traumatic memories and Parker looked really put off and dislocated a thumb to escape and we know she must have really not wanted him to talk to her like that. What does that say about her? I think it says there was loads she didn't want to remember and was afraid for him to pull it out of her. I'm giong to rewatch the entire show again with your writing in mind. It makes sense.

Their child is extremely intelligent and has her mother's gumption. She won't be thrust into a role she doesn't want. She's right, too. She is a little baby. All of this speaks to the plausibility of the story, cements the character as a real person and she is real enough to see. You end this somberly with Jarod back in full Jarod mode and I think by now we all know that you don't like that version of Jarod and Miss Parker really never seemed to either so that struggle continues. I'm curious about how all this will play out, if Miss Parker can tolerate all of Jarod, all versions or if it'll come to a head, become too much for her to deal with. The whole dilemma continues for her and for us and I'm glad that you haven't strayed from the television series. You fill in some blanks and ahhhh what can I say. Mirage, I think I love you.

I've spent the morning reading this entire series through this part and will pause here to share my thoughts. Mirage, I have a lot of thougths. I think you continue to improve and don't know how when you started off in top form. The dynamics of the show are easy to understand but there are nuances that I didn't think would ever translate to writing. These are characters who communicate with expressions, gestures, and movements. We see them sit hard at bad news and even the official novels don't really SHOW Jarod's expressions and movements or any of the characters really. We see so much through Jarod's expresions on the tv. You capture not only the dynamics of the show but the emotions, movements, expressions as well. I've seen others say that reading you is like watching the tv show all over again and it is. I sincerely request more.

Brilliant writing and story telling. This is a beautiful chapter of love, loss, forgiveness, sorrow. It means so much. Thank you.

Usually I call every sex scene you write hot hot hot and this was still hot in a more intimate and meaningful way. All the shippery goodness in this Mirage makes me so relaxed feeling. They love each other so much. I don't know if I'm more touched and crying because Jarod was crying and said he was sorry or if it's because Parker wouldn't even touch him because she didn't want to do anything he didn't want to do and we know his reasons for not wanting to have sex yet was for her and that she might get it all confused in her mind again with that whitman bad person. So Jarod caught her fingers as her hand was pulling away and I can SEE that happening and all of it. Oohhhh! I can't stop crying with my happiness at this. Please more. Please please please! You just won the fandom again.

So stoked for this and for good reason too girl your writing is so REAL, the characters are real enough to touch. MORE, please? Before I lose my mind!

Exquisite Mirage. You tackle so many difficult topics and this one is painful too. Forced conception, forced gestation, and force parenthood are cruel and unimaginable and I speak as someone who was stealthed by a guy that removed a condom without me knowing it during sex, and you covered that before in Forces Of Nature before I even knew it was a thing with a name. Not everyone wants to be a parent. I'm one of those people. Some people scream "adoption not abortion" as if they get to control another's choice and too dumb to realize that it means a person has to be preggers for 9 months and maybe they don't want to be preggers. I like sex. I consent to sex. I don't consent to preggers. I'm not mommy material. I forget to feed ME sometimes lol know what I'm saying? What you did here is the end result with neither having to endure the preggers but now they have to raise this kid and this is the priority now and will be for the rest of the kid's life. I like how you write this and you do it with a lot of your stories. If a person is going to abort it's all well and fine but if they are going to have the kid then damn it they need to do it right. I see people in public hitting their kids and I always think they should have aborted. Some people shouldn't be parents because they suck at it. This was honest. I like that the best characters ever created, aside from Sam and Dean and Castiel, and Felicity and Noel, and Lucifer and Maze, and Spencer Reid, Penelope Garcia,Derek Morgan, Hotch, and Emily Prentiss, etc, etc. I'll start over. I like that Jarod and Parker, my favorite complex couple characters are the ones that are dealing with all of these real life adult issues honestly without all the surgar frosting bs. I think hoensty is missing in real life and especially in debates that affect real lives. I love this about you. You're so honest that it hurts. Keep hurting us with honesty. There is beauty in this honest pain. More please?

Wowz. I'm blown away by your writing, your turn of phrases, the elegance and eloquence and .. how on earth are you able to write them all so spot on in character. It's like watching an episode. You make my heart swell Mirage. .... and I haven't mentioned the sex. I admit that in the past I've found your sex scenes masturbatory, so worthy of getting my ovaries off on. This was pleasurable anyway without so much of the detail that got my ovaries off in the past hint hint wink wink. You realized we were all masturbating to your sex scenes and felt weird huhhh? I want you to know that I come for the high quality stories that you write too and how much in character my fav characters are cos I love these characters and that it's the content that most pleases me. Arousal is just a  bonus and a sex scene that lasts so long I can bring myself off while reading without having to scroll back up and reread is just cherry on top... lol. I hope you're not ashamed. You done good girl. Can't wait to see what happens next. Please update Devil's Advocate. It's been a while.

OMG! I need more of this. I heard this wasn't as explicit a sex scene but it was beautiful and without so much detail. I giggled because the person who rec'd this to me said they usually orgasm too while reading your sex scenes. This was still tasteful and way sexy too. I want more. Beautiful story so far and the characters ARE the characters I miss from tv. More please?

Color me impressed as hell. I heard you were addicting and the rumors are all true. Your committment and ability to complete projects equals your writing talents. I got burned on fanfic a few times and swore to never begin reading a story that isn't complete and I made an exception for you because I've noticed you've completed several of your stories and you did it brillianty. I got some spoilers for reading the last paragraphs first but I needed to see before I jumped in on this story. You BETTER finish this. :) No but seriously please don't leave me hanging for 25 years!!!! Someone please ask me again why I won't invest in the TP novels after already investing in the TP DVDS. I dare anyone!! I get fooled once by a person and that's always enough. So congrats. You do it, you do it exceptionally well, and you complete what you do. Congrats congrats! I love this.

Young lady I hope you're typing your butt off right now. This is amazing. Top notch writing. I'm so freaking impressed with not only your natural skill as an author but the plot and the plausibility. Everyone is so in character that it's surreal to read and a little scary depending on how dark Jarod. I compare reading you to falling into the TV and into Pretender world. You're that amazing. Thank you for sharing with us. Congratulations!!!