"time wont bleed it out of her" ohh! I love your writing style and voice. No shrimp or Asian. Thomas. OH, god that's how it is when someone you are in love with leaves you. Will be there smut in this later? I hope so.
Reviewer: needlepoint Signed
[Report This]Date: 07/03/15 07:40 pm
Ok gotta say right off that I LOVE the crime scene and Brandt and Warren's interaction. The poor town lost its innocence and that is conveyed here. The visual I get when I read you..oh Mirage! I know to sit and curl up, grab my blanket first lol. I love this new adventure and I'm so excited.
Author's Response:
Thank you, needlepoint. You are correct: the village lost its innocence. I'm glad you like this.
Reviewer: needlepoint Signed [Report This]Date: 07/03/15 07:37 pm
Girl...u r brilliant! Want More!
Reviewer: TheDarkAngel Signed [Report This]Date: 07/03/15 09:06 am
u hve D best gadgets...mr. operative would h8 me lol but i love ur fics ...please never stop writing for us.
Reviewer: TheDarkAngel Signed [Report This]Date: 07/03/15 09:04 am
coughing up my zinfindel laughing...zina..love!
Author's Response:
Yes. Cough it up, cough it all up; it's probably for the best, TheDarkAngel. Zinfandel. It doesn't give you headache? Sorta like Raines sticking needles in your brain? Perhaps the blinding pain was induced by my brain cells screaming out loudly as they shriveled up died. Ah, well. Clean your screen off and try to drink more responsibly from now on.
Reviewer: TheDarkAngel Signed [Report This]Date: 07/03/15 09:01 am
Amazing. Your stories always are.
Reviewer: TheDarkAngel Signed [Report This]Date: 07/03/15 08:59 am
two stories update and one of them is brand new!! aweasome start can't wait 2 see what happens. am so freakn stoked! more more more!
Reviewer: TheDarkAngel Signed [Report This]Date: 07/03/15 08:48 am
Give me more soon. I'm going crazy to know what will happen next. Thank you for always writing, always updating. Thank you for sharing you talent and genius writing skills with us. You are amazing!!!
Author's Response:
Thank you for reading and for all of the lovely reviews, Contessa.
Reviewer: Contessa Signed [Report This]Date: 06/03/15 08:18 am
You really got the momentum down and after reading your chapter note...yeah, so you woke up and just wrote it out? Purged as you say? I wish I could dream brilliant stories. This chapter is so funny. I love Mr. Operative. He tries to be confident but he just wants someone to talk to and he's smart and loves the simple things and hates smartphones. Just what I want in a man.
Reviewer: Contessa Signed [Report This]Date: 06/03/15 08:15 am
Jarod never met any people and especially women that didn't like him so it's nice to see it happen. MOst people fall at his feet and that's unrealistic. Yeah, sure he looks good but come on! No one looks good enough to worship. You nailed his behavior when dealing with difficult people though. I think it would go this way. Wow Rachel. Damn. GIrl you are good.
Reviewer: Contessa Signed [Report This]Date: 06/03/15 08:11 am
Cox totally put her in her place. Smack down. Poor MP. Superb writing though. Damn. just the way it's suppose to be.
Reviewer: Contessa Signed [Report This]Date: 06/03/15 08:08 am
Awesome start! You should be writing the novels girl!
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading and reviewing, Contessa.
Reviewer: Contessa Signed [Report This]Date: 06/03/15 08:06 am
Really feeling for Rachel right now if Jarod is the one on that tape killing people. The small town-ness of this setting is so great! Still using corded phones and vcrs while Parker is Madrid watching an assassination on her retinas. It's just like mansions next to trailer parks. It's like this dystopian utopia in town and vice versa a uptopian dystopia in the Centre and I see the contrasts every day myself. I live in a big city and drive through small backwards spots on my way to another big city to work. One stand out point I need to make is that It is refreshing to see that life doesn't fall in Jarod's lap easily in this story or any or your stories. 9/11 would make things tough for anyone including our genius and EVEN before 9/11 anyone with half a brain would have vetted him first. Keeping it real is what you do. Fantastic story already. I wait patiently for more.
Author's Response:
Haha. So do I. I feel even more for Jarod when Rachel catches up with him. Thank you for reading and reviewing. I will be posting more soon.
Reviewer: Con-O Signed [Report This]Date: 06/03/15 02:54 am
OW. That's all I have to say about that... sike! Very nice. I do like what you did there.
Author's Response:
I'm happy you like it. Thanks for reading and reviewing, Con-O.
Reviewer: Con-O Signed [Report This]Date: 06/03/15 02:40 am
Please tell me that Zina will be a recurring character. I'm so intrigued! I want to know more about Gloria and her first hire too. I know the Detective and rookie can't be around for all of this, but I do want to see more of them.
Reviewer: Con-O Signed [Report This]Date: 06/03/15 02:37 am
Mirage when I read your work it is just like coming home again and watching The Pretender on television. The setting, plot, characters, your descriptions. What would we do without you? I hope we never find out.
Reviewer: Con-O Signed [Report This]Date: 06/03/15 02:25 am
Can't give it anything but a 10. Thank you Mirage!
Reviewer: Con-O Signed [Report This]Date: 06/03/15 02:23 am
"extraordinary and compromising position, viz. with her body pressed obscenely against that of man whose name she'd never even spoken in his presence. The neat tableau of impropriety was both outre and unprofessional."
Stellar writing Mirage. Thanks for sharing with us and please, please, please update this and all of your stories soon. I love it!
Author's Response:
Thank you so much, Jen, for reading and reviewing. Pretender fans are the best.
Reviewer: Jen Signed [Report This]Date: 06/03/15 12:25 am
"Madrid was hot and sticky and Parker spent the better part of her hours there trying to wash it off"
See I love that? Even Madrid is a terrible place to be if you are forced to be there.
"Fresh laundered towels, you moron.Naturally, she was tetchy, jet-lagged, in extremis. There's no air conditioner, for God's sake! And no booze! Cox is trying to kill me." Miss Parker.No writes her better than you.
"The female operative—this stolid woman, his par excellence, yclept 'operative'—didn't exude openness, physical or otherwise; she possessed all the warmth of a blizzard" lol
She was watching the scene of the crime by putting in contact lenses that are uploaded with footage. Original. I don't know much about tech stuff but I like the way you explain it for us.
Reviewer: Jen Signed
[Report This]Date: 06/03/15 12:22 am
Zina! I know we are going to learn all about Zina.
"Jarod nodded curtly, once. Ah, rumors. The coin of the realm." lol He learned everything he needed to know...or he thought he did anyway.
"You've been promoted.""You've been demoted," Jarod returned without missing a beat. "What happened?" He asked, solicitously." Love the exchanges there.
"yes, indeed, he had certainly found his métier" LOl.
"Uh, no," he correctly gently, "that's not all what happened the last time." TRUTH. Last time he had sex with her and left without goodbye.
"Oh, how she wanted to trust him!They all wanted to trust him. All of them. With the exception of Zina. And Miss Parker." LOL. Perfect.
Reviewer: Jen Signed [Report This]Date: 06/03/15 12:15 am
"She glimpsed her loss each time she passed a mirror. She couldn't diminish the specter of loss, fear, death; after all, she lived with a ghost.
She lived like a ghost.
Death walked with her."
Time hadn't healed thus far, and time wouldn't bleed it out of her" Ahhh, love this.
'The Centre was a stage"
"She and Broots were they players"
Ahhh Mirage.
Reviewer: Jen Signed [Report This]Date: 06/03/15 12:08 am
Yes! You never do what I expect you to do. I was waiting anxiously for an update to The Return or A Hero's Heart and then you up and post an entirely different story...and it's a fabulous story too! I love the crime scene stuff and these new characters. I feel horrible about Gloria...that image in my mind of blood in her hair...someone else's blood in her hair gave me chills. It was like being there. You are visual. I can't wait to see where we're going next but count me in for the ride. Thank you for posting five chapters at one shot too.
Reviewer: Jen Signed [Report This]Date: 06/03/15 12:04 am
This last chapter, 5 was so short. They are all too short. I know you are short on time but gahh.
So eloquent. Exsquite. I love that something happened outside Jarod's control..Rachel being there and that he was clueless and we had to see him find his footing with the dectective. You blow me away every time. :) ;) I'm still upset that you aren't writing a Pretender novel, :( that you didn't contact Steve and Craig. I like your work way better Mirage. =) You have a professional style that isn't forced. I don't know what else to say.That I might convince you. ;) I hope you will post more soon. Hugs and happiness to you. Hurry up and write the rest. Update the rest of your stories too!! =)
Author's Response:
Thank you for reading and reviewing, Christoph. You are correct: I have not contacted Craig and/or Steve. I can't do that. I'm not going to pester them. I will never pester them. Life has a way of sorting itself sometimes and as par for my usual course, I'll beat my own path and arrive where I'm supposed to be and with my self-respect intact. Don't be upset. I'm certainly not. I will update. Hugs and happiness to you as well- and thanks for that too.
Reviewer: Christoph Signed [Report This]Date: 05/03/15 06:18 am
Ooooh when MP isn't happy nobody is happy lol. That operative was so cute to me. Her reaction to him is classic Miss Parker. Priceless. I swear you must have these characters in a drawer or something or you're friends with them. I'm envious. People do say lol in public. LOL. The world is crazy. I love the gadgets. Very clever.
Reviewer: Christoph Signed [Report This]Date: 05/03/15 06:08 am
Jarod makes an appearance just when I was beginning to wonder if he would...lol. I trust you and I hope you trust yourself and your muse. Zina is so funny. My new favorite original character. Jarod was totally patient and then thought he might have to save her life if she choked on gum.
Jarod with Rachel... I love this: R- "you look tired" J- "hmm, my, you are awfully sharp. Have you ever considered a career in law enforcement? Perhaps profiling?" LOL! He's a big flirt. I could really go on. It'a all so wonderful.
[Report This]Date: 05/03/15 06:04 am
