Awesome! Need more after a cliffhanger like this! Please hurry up with the next chapter!
Author's Response: More is coming, Anna. Thanks so much for reading and reviewing.
Date: 22/01/11 10:46 am
While I agree with all the other reviewers that your story is great I feel like it is starting to drag. So much going on with very little closure. While I would love to see Miss Parker and Jarod together I don't think she she deserves him. He's been trying to help her for years while she's been...well the 'Ice Queen'.
Author's Response: Hi, Red. Fb is always appreaciated. Generally, absolute closure is reserved for the conclusion; however, I won't guarantee even that.
Date: 17/01/11 03:51 am
I'm sorry it took so long to review this wonderful chapter. I couldn't seem to get through that code system. Two nights!!
Hopefully this is it. I wanted to let you know again how much I enjoy your writing -- it gets better with every chapter. Your phrasing, your use of dialogue and just the plot is evolving.
I am envious of your writing skills and your ability to weave very neatly executed twists and turns in your maze of mystery! You know me... can't wait for more. I love your writing so it's not that it is a good "Pretender" (which it is) but it is a well done PRETENDER story. In my opinion you have kept true to the characters and I love it.
Please continue this!
Author's Response:
Please don't apologize, Nightowl. You've been incredibly supportive with your reviews and inspiring with your own story- which by the way, I (and every other pretender fan) can't wait to see updated. (this year? Please?) ;) No pressure.
And speaking of pressure, ;) I sit here reading this review from you-- you, a truly talented author -- and I realize (once again) that I am (*gulps*) waaaaaay out of my league here. If anyone is going to be envious, it's going to be me.
Thank you, once again for your support, and for these reviews that are better written than any of my stories.
Reviewer: nightowl Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 03/01/11 05:36 pm
P.S.: I am happy that Jarod wasn't the one with Olivia!
Author's Response: Haha. Me too. That would be rather awkward.
Date: 01/01/11 01:16 pm
I'm SOO glad it was Nicholas enjoying Olivia and not Jarod! That's what I'd been hoping for. At least Parker and Jarod are getting better at making up after they fight; I wish they could just trust each other. My memory of the show isn't helping me with who the mystery man in the book might be, so I guess I'll just be surprised.
Thanks for continuing, and Happy New Year!
Author's Response:
Thank you, Jane Q. Doe. I believe the pair have finally reached a turning point and that the majority of the bickering has passed. Maybe. ;)
Happy New Year!
Reviewer: Jane Q. Doe Anonymous [Report This]Date: 01/01/11 03:02 am
Author's Response:
Thank you, Sue. It shouldn't be too much of a wait.
You are awesome!
Reviewer: Sue Anonymous [Report This]Date: 27/12/10 11:42 pm
Love it! So intense. Need more:)
Author's Response: Thanks, Anna, that's what I love to read! You will get more.
Date: 25/12/10 10:37 am
OHMYGOD, finally an update, its about time. Lovelovelovelove that that was NOT Jarod with Olivia so glad to see that Parker is letting Jarod help her and can't wait to see what will happen next. Love that she almost seduced him, just the idea was goode but she respects their relationship to much that's great. and it Michale Partrick back? new twist. More soon I hoep and Merry Christmas MIrage
Author's Response: Thanks, tpfan. In my world, only Parker is allowed to have mutliple relationships while poor Jarod waits patiently.. haha. And yes, you're right, I felt that it would cheapen her and devalue their friendship so I decided to forgo the 'seduce the cop' route but it was fun to briefly entertain the idea. Thanks again, tpfan. I hope you had a very Merry Christmas.
[Report This]Date: 24/12/10 04:57 am
You sure don't like them fuzzy.
Love all the twist and turns you throw at them. You let them all seem so natural.
I hope you keep entertaining us for a long time for I look forward to every new chapter of story.
Author's Response: Thank you, Eden. I hope you continue to be entertained. Reviewer: Eden Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 03/12/10 07:21 pm
Awesome chapters! I can't wait for the next one, especially after that cliffhanger! Please don't let us wait too long!
Reviewer: Anna Anonymous [Report This]Date: 27/11/10 03:23 pm
oh-my-God! If this person really is Jarod I'm soooo curious about how you're gonna make Parker react. hahaaa! Always imagined that one had to feel sorry for the person Miss Parker would walk in on. *chuckles* But actually I just imagine her screaming "MY EYES, MY EYEEEES!!!" and running out of the room. ;-) Boy this is really something that makes me sick in my stomach. But not due to your writing!! Just the idea of Parker walking in on J having sex. *shivers*Very well written piece,as always. Like the less fast-action level you managed to create here. And the whole nightmare scene,almost kiss scene,Parker meeting her family thing...it's just a bliss to see those characters get some rest. (and then to let it end with such a BANG). Can't wait for more,as always.
Author's Response:
Hahaha, love that. "My eyes, my eyes!!" Sorry that I made you feel sick, but maybe it's all better now.
Thanks for the review, Ice Angel.
Reviewer: IceAngel Signed [Report This]Date: 24/11/10 11:19 pm
wow, this chapter was incredible I couldn't stop reading it. You have picked up the pace and moved to a new scenario within the old.... a new curve in the mystery. great job!
I can't wat for more.
Reviewer: nightowl Anonymous [Report This]Date: 24/11/10 10:56 pm
Wow wow ,what is going on here!?! I was hoping for some hot scenes but with Jarod and Miss Parker!;-) Great part!!!
Author's Response: I think there may be some (hopefully) hot scenes between Parker and J coming up soon. Not too good with the hot stuff, but I'll try. Thanks, dimana.
Date: 24/11/10 06:32 pm
Poor Parker, additional awkwardness ensue.
Reviewer: g18 Anonymous [Report This]Date: 24/11/10 09:17 am
Great new chapter I went back to read the last few to keep in the flow of the story--and I realized how much you use dialogue to move the story along. AND you do a terrific job of it, it is a skill! Another tool in the writer's tool box.
When I first read the beginning of this chapter I was hoping it was a dream but you wrote with such definition of characters and actions I was relieved when you wrote it as a dream. Thank you for the great read. I am looking forward to find out how the J/MP relationship goes from here and to learn more about MP's time in the Centre, we know it couldn't have been fun! but you use such tactful means of telling it that I may not cringe so much as it is revealed.
Thank you for sharing you talent.
Reviewer: nightowl Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 14/11/10 04:12 am
I love how, when there's a serious threat, they can't help but work as a team - and the glimmerings of their old friendship comes thru in how they worry about each other.
(shudder) If it's true, poor Parker, being kept prisoner by Lyle for a year. Here's hoping she'll let Jarod help her, and they can make some headway on who's behind her set-up.
Reviewer: Jane Q. Doe Anonymous [Report This]Date: 12/11/10 02:17 am
Finally an update! This is my favorite fan fic I want you to know. I love everything about it, the perfect characterizations and especially how well you described the motorcycle ride oh and Jarod's urgency to get that vest on her. You made it clear that he's torn between doing his job and his feelings and it will probably get complicated. This is such a great mystery suspense thriller drama with some comedy and quite a few memorable lines that sound exactly like something the characters would say. I would love some romance but it's your story, ohhh please Mirage, update this soon.
Reviewer: Miss Ice Queen Anonymous [Report This]Date: 07/11/10 01:56 am
uuhhhh! excitiiing! *fidgetting on chair* Can't wait to read the next one.
Sooo wanna know what the hell happened between Lyle and Parker. Did he touch/torture her or not..sure would fit his profile. And what was that nightmare in the beginning all about? can't wait to find it out! :-) Maybe Lyle isn't dead afterall...*psycho music playing*
Still feel like the cop trying to solve this crime scene puzzle! Great storry! Am looking forward to what other bread crumbs you'll be giving us about the truth of what really happened when the Centre came to an end.
Author's Response: Thanks, IceAngel. I'm going to answer all of those questions in the coming chapters. You may be right because nothing ever is what it seems in Centre wonderland - dead people who aren't really dead and such. One can never tell... Reviewer: IceAngel Signed
[Report This]Date: 01/11/10 12:59 am
I really like that part but like always crave for more! This story is getting so ineresting...
Author's Response: Thanks dimana, more is on the way.
Date: 30/10/10 10:12 am
Great intrigue, many twists and surprises. One for me was the Strip Club! wow! you played as Parker may have done it. I'm not sure which character surprised me the most in that scene. Good job with the twist, I'm curious to see how the next chapter plays that moment between J and MP. Could be v-e-r-y interesting.
You managed to keep the tension up throughout your story, a little different with the strip club part but still left me trying to figure out what would happen next. Fun moment with that.
I think you are doing a terrific job all in all and can't wait for more ---as always.
Author's Response:
Hello nightowl and thank you so much. I'm wowed by your wow.
I don't know what possessed me to think up a strip club/adult play land. Investigations tend to lead to distasteful places, unsavory characters & it doesn't get more distasteful than this! But it allowed Parker to "come out & play"- her toughness, street savviness & of course, Jarod's reaction to her antics. I also wanted to eliminate Janeane as a suspect and reveal an element of trust. Oh well, it's done now.
I may squeeze in a hint of Parker/Jarod romance, don't know yet. Thank you so, as always. I need all the encouragement I can get. Fingers crossed that I don't screw it up too badly.
Reviewer: nightowl Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 11/09/10 03:51 am
Awsome. I lik how Jared defended Miss Parker, how Janeane called Parker an evil bitch offered a job, slash with the stripper juared's reactions. Nice to read that he knows she does trust him we knew all along she did. Gald you back, give more please.
Author's Response: Yes, James. They turned a corner and voila! Trust. It is good to be back, my friend. Thanks so much for reading and reviewing.
Date: 09/09/10 03:12 am
Once again I'm amazed by your writter skills!!! I hope to read some more Jarod end Miss Parker /some more romance/ but don't mind me you are doing great job!
Author's Response: That means a lot dimana, thanks for the words of support. I don't know about romance, I'm not good at all with the romance but ultimately, it depends on which direction the story takes. Thanks again for the input.
Date: 07/09/10 10:40 am
uhh must have more of this
Author's Response: Thanks, Leah. More is on the way..
Date: 07/09/10 03:36 am
Loving this, funny, great to see parker giving it to the rookie agent, Jarod's reaction, clear writing and no typos, so glad you stopped apologizing for typos! now make my day and update fon!
Author's Response: Thanks pretenderoxx, I wanted to give it a little twist of humor at least to make up for some of my darker fics. Glad you like. Oh, and I just updated FON! (that dark fic I was just referring to.)
[Report This]Date: 05/09/10 09:32 pm
hahaa! this was fun. ;-) although I just don't wanna picture Parker in such a shabby place liket hat strip/swinger/pervert club, I still kinda enjoyed that tempest-parker-scene,and especially lil' innocent Jarod's reaction to it.
Kinda got confused,however...why did they go to that place,and who was that "jeaneane" that got her arm dislocated? It's getting all a bit confusing for me. But I still do love it and can't wait to read more!
Still am so eager to find out what happened to Lyle and what during that time when Parker was Lyle's prisoner....and why the hell she has such hardcore trust issues regarding Jarod (although her 'father' Syd calls him thewhite knight. ;-) )
Oh and thanks for that Parker emerging out of a bathroom amid hot steam scene. ;-)
Author's Response:
I didn't want her to be there either but investigations sometimes lead to unattractive places. Oh yes, I had to do something to cause a reaction in J - enter Tempest and Parker, don't know why I did it, but it's done now.
They went to the strip club because J received emails from his contact informing him that Janeane
(A.K.A. Agent Janeane Burke A.K.A. goth girl A.K.A. Wednesday -Wednesday of adam's family fame for those who aren't familiar and probably don't get it, A.K.A. rookie)
was spotted first outside Parker's old lair where agents were killed and was later seen at the club. Jarod feared that she was a part of the corruption and wanted to track her down and question her.
The Parker/Lyle imprisonment history is coming up in the next several chapters. As for the trust issues, well, they've always existed, the guy couldn't even walk into the room without her pulling that gun- and that can't be resolved overnight but in addition to the existing distrust that the creators of the show cursed her with, she was given another reason to distrust him in this fic- will address that as well in the coming chapters but the latest update brought a breakthrough. She trusts him and he's aware of it.
Ah, you are very welcome for the steam scene. Thanks for reading and reviewing, as always.
Reviewer: IceAngel Signed [Report This]Date: 05/09/10 06:01 am
