Many congrats!! I know it's been a labor to churn out such an intricate and difficult story, and I hope you can look on it as the accomplishment it is.
I love the 3 endings idea - something for everyone. I enjoyed each of them, in their own way. Thanks again for battling through to the end(s)!
Reviewer: Jane Q. Doe Anonymous [Report This]Date: 03/10/10 05:05 am
Author's Response:
Wow, thank you, I'm glad you liked it and I love your wonderful summaries of the different endings.
Abstract, written in five minutes, was my gift to the die hard shippers who put up with my attempts at writing, the ones who only want happiness and love and ..well, I find it all rather unrealistic, but I mentioned dreams and nightmares quite a bit, and because of that, this ending was sort of possible..and there it is.
Irreconcilable, well you said it better than I can..she's repeating that cycle. This was actually the only ending I was initially going to post. I'm so glad I didn't.
Oh my, Perdition is... well it's something else but it almost didn't happen. I didn't want take the story back to that insanity but we've really seen Jarod (in the series) push the limits and I couldn't help but explore the "what if's?" If absolutely power corrupts absolutely, what happens if and when a Pretender is corrupted absolutely by the all powerful Centre? And my answer is Perdition.
I'm so glad you like it, really thought I'd be stoned for that one but it just seemed to work so well and was so similar to Jarod in my mind, he's out there on the fringe, really.
Well, thank you so much, M. Rose, for reading and reviewing. It's been a pleasure to read every single review.
Reviewer: M Rose Signed
[Report This]Date: 30/09/10 11:53 pm
And thank you so much, that there are multiple endings:)!
Reviewer: Anna Anonymous [Report This]Date: 29/09/10 03:25 pm
Well, what can I say?! You write amazing! Really. I am again crying above your story, especially chapter 2! (which by the way isn't really finished, is it?! Poor Jarod - yeah, if you haven't noticed, I'm a Jarod-fan:)) All three were very intense. Although I have to admit, I only read so much from chapter 3 that I get the context. (hides) First time I let myself discourage from a warning:P. My favorite one is by far ending nr. 1! That said, thank you for this journey and I hope you have already planned the next MPJ story;)!
Author's Response:
Wow, I didn't want anyone to cry...I'm sorry? And no, it's not exactly the end of that one but I honestly, I can't foresee anyone in that situation forgiving or forgetting something so horrific, she may not blame Jarod, but that other guy looks just like him and it's quite difficult to overlook, I'm sure.
I am glad I decided on multiple endings, I didn't want to alienate too many readers, so glad that ending one works for you.
Thanks so much, Anna.
Reviewer: Anna Anonymous [Report This]Date: 29/09/10 03:22 pm
Just read all three alternate endings and I love this one as well as the next one where she ends it - the scene between Parker and Sydney is so beautiful but so sad and I can see it. And the way she tells Jarod he was good at leaving ohh, that is Miss Parker.
To be honest, a part of me liked perdition as well but while it's possible, it is terrifying to think of the Centre completely corrupting Jarod and it would probably play something like you've written it here. Extremely good but scary as hell in time for Halloween.
But this ending, it really leaves open the door of possibilities which sounds like something that the creators of the series would have done and like you said it undoes all the bad, it was all a dream. You've really done an amazing job weaving this story together, and even the other endings fit perfectly with the storyline. This will be forever be my favorite fic! Please continue to contribute to this fandom.
Author's Response: Thanks so much for that, for all of the encouragement. It is terrifying and I do feel absolutely evil for the Perdition ending but he's a pretender and he can be anything, good and bad but it's scary to think of this insane man erasing Parker's memories and giving her new ones, but I tried to balance that with the abstract, the "dream" sequence basically The middle ground was the ending with Syd, irreconcilable differences. I will continue with this fandom, it's the only one I'll ever write for. Thanks again. Reviewer: Miss Ice Queen Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 28/09/10 07:23 pm
Even if i don't like the ending i must admit that it fits with all the twists and turns;ups and downs in your story.Thank you for sharing your imaginary Pretender universe with us!!!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for all of the reviews, it's been very encouraging dimana. Of course, I'll continue to share and I hope you will too.
[Report This]Date: 28/09/10 04:28 pm
GREAT chapter! Can't wait for more!!!
Author's Response: Thanks so much KT.
Date: 15/09/10 09:57 pm
Oh no! Jarod didnt go bad again, did he?!
Author's Response: Hello Anna and thanks so much for reading and the review. Hmm, I don't know yet. The answer could be yes and no, depending on the ending. But again, there may be multiple endings and if I left my RL pal convince me, the answer will be yes, no and no. We shall see and soon, I hope. Thanks again.
Date: 12/09/10 12:25 pm
Yikes a jarod-frakenstine? You did a wonderful job in the story -your use of phrasing and elegancy in puttint it all together was quite remarkable.
I loved the way you worked it all together, another twist I didn't see coming. How will she ever trust him? What is it that he is looking for a Stepford wife? I'm sure you will clarify it all in the next chapter---which I'm so looking forward to.
Thanks for sharing and continuing this story
Author's Response:
I wouldn't say Frankenstein but...I don't know yet. *smacks head*
I'm speechless after that review, such a compliment coming from you, nightowl. He may very well be longing for a stepford wife but Parker would never bend to that way of life- unless, Jarod resorted to something radical. We know how important family is to Jarod- he's just crazy about family.
I will clarify..hopefully.
I have three endings in mind, have been encouraged by a RL person to go with all three BUT I don't know. Will have to see. Thanks so much nightowl. (I hope to see your story in the recently added very soon)
Reviewer: nightowl Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 11/09/10 10:58 pm
Please, please, please tell me that the syringe is for Jarod to inject himself! Oh, my. What an intense ride this story is - thank you for continuing it, when I know it can't be easy. I think I'll be one of those who clings to whatever alternate ending you have planned though! :)
I was trying to decide who to side with, since they both have a point. Jarod does love Parker, and she's quite good at just stuffing things down inside. And there's still the issue of other potential children out there, plus what her subconscious issues with Jarod will bleed over into his relationship to their son. However, (if my timeline's correct), they've all been at the hospital for days now, thinking Zach was going to die, then learning he's theirs, etc. These people need some sleep!! Or, maybe that's just me, and I'm totally off base.
Always happy to get an update of yours. And would it be too cliche to say I'm on pins and needles for the next installment?
Author's Response:
Hello Jane Q. Doe. Haha. Jarod inject himself? I like it. Seriously, the kindest thing J could do at this point is inject himself and drop dead.
You are not off base. Your time line is correct and yes, they probably are still pretty exhausted. Parker did sleep quite a while courtesy of Margaret spiking her drink. And then after the release, (prior to this dreaded chat with J) Parker and Zach both slept and had "fright"mares but poor franken-rat should be absolutely exhausted. Eh, must be a pretender thing.
Thanks for reading and reviewing, always appreciated.
Pins and needles indeed. :) Nothing says terror like J with a syringe...
Reviewer: Jane Q. Doe Anonymous [Report This]Date: 11/09/10 04:24 am
Big Bad Jarod is back again !!! Please don't leave us like this for too long!!!
Author's Response: Hello dimana. Ah, I don't know. Maybe's he's bad or maybe not. I'm really so torn at this point and it could go either way. I may need more than one alternative ending. (shudders at the thought) I took my hands off the wheel - and let this fic get away from me. What a monstrosity. Thanks for putting up with me. No. I won't leave you too long like this.
Date: 09/09/10 12:58 pm
What typos? There were none. GOD I hate this story, hate what Jarod became, I hate what the Centre made him, those drugs and all and how hard it has been for both Jarod and Parker and everyone and I love this story!!! You wrote even the darkest parts so professionally, you showed us what the center was capable of and you made it happen. I love it! I love him flawed and human and confused as hell and I have a feeling you are going to end it bad but I don't know what you are planning I just cant wait to read what happens next. Please update this and the other story and keep up the great writing thanks.
Author's Response:
Hi tpfan. Yes, I know. I hate this story too, I hate it more than even I can comprehend. I appreciate brutal honesty so thanks for that especially. This is what the Centre is capable of, you're right but that doesn't mean I had to explore all of the worst case scenarios and well, it's a good thing you like Jarod flawed, because he definitely is flawed and yes, I am going to end it badly but I don't think too many people will notice, not many folks reading anymore anyway...or they hate my writing. :) (probably the latter haha)
There are just so many ways to end it now but happily ever after is a lie, and even more so for these two. I will type up an alternate ending (no monstrosity is complete without multiple endings), it won't be happy ever after either and it probably has a serious drawback or two ("back" being the operative word) but a little more promising than what I've decided to run with. Thanks.
Reviewer: tpfan Anonymous [Report This]Date: 11/06/10 12:37 am
Woohoo! An update!! hahaha, love how fitting all your titles are. Such an exciting chapter, great that somebody finally pushed Parker too far and I'm glad it was Margaret, also glad that Jarod tried to civilly handle things, standing by his woman like that. I can see how Margaret would be protective of Jarod and her grandson, can also see how the past would drive her to say something like that, basically saying that Parker hadn't been through anything too traumatic. Of course our ice queen would react by jumping on her. Kudos.I don't want it to end but I know you want to move on and I know you want to do it your way, so do it. I wont hat you. Keep on the great writing.
Author's Response:
Hi Jade. I'm still creating tension. I know they are all adults but they have all been through hell and eventually something has to give. (And it will.) People readily forgive but they never forget and the negative vibes continue to simmer under the surface.
Jarod was kidnapped, and then misused and possessed for 30 plus years and Margaret finds it difficult to see beyond that- at times. For her, that is the worst thing that could possibly happen to anyone and she sometimes forgets Parker's imprisonment by Jarod (more of pyshcological terror, threat of and anticpication of worse things to come, than actual physical abuse but the line did get a little blurry there, I admit) and Margaret hasn't really processed the disgusting Raines aspect of little Zach's conception. Eww.
Indeed, I want to move on from this fic and hopefully never go there (or beyond there) again. Thanks.
Reviewer: Jade Anonymous [Report This]Date: 05/06/10 04:15 am
Wow ,after this chapter i can't imagine what will happens when the storm begin! You just shake me with this! :(
Author's Response: Hi dimana. It' seems a long way from here to there and at this point, deleting this monstrosity would be in my best interest, so easy to do. Ah, I know. I don't mean to shake you and I will give you the ending you want (alternate ending will be added) but I have to go with my initial thoughts with this and give myself the original ending that I wanted. You have been so kind to me. I hope to read something from you. Thanks.
Date: 03/06/10 02:41 pm
I just read this entire fic in one sitting. This is such a great story, wonderful, and its been a hell of a ride. Please, do update this soon!!
Author's Response: Hi & thanks! No, it's not wonderful but thanks...I will update ...oh , some day. Maybe.
[Report This]Date: 22/04/10 04:06 am
Thank you for saving Zach! Great chapter as always!!!
Author's Response: Hi dimana and thank you so much. You're so kind and it's so encouraging and I can't say it enough. You're wonderful! Reviewer: dimana Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 13/04/10 07:23 pm
Its evident that you are an adept & imaginative writer by the way you have entwined the characters and used each one of them as a focal point in one chapter or another. Bravo!!!
The way you have weaved the Jarod/ Parker relationship is just delicious...so complicated yet we the readers want them together, free to love & trust each other...Therefore I am definitely rooting for a happy ending.
The only unresolved issue so far, for me, is the Texas storyline. Although Jarod has apologised and has received forgiveness from Parker, she has never openly spoken to him about their time there and blamed the situation on Raines's drugs or herself. I know Jarod was not himself but he still took advantage of her trust and gave her no choice regarding sex...she thought he was going to kill her. Such dark feelings dont go away until brought out in the open and only then will she know if she truly loves him or not... Just my point of view...
I have read this story numerous times & it pulls me in each and every time...And Typos...what Typos
ABSOLUTELY AMAZING JOB...GOOD LUCK!!!
Author's Response:
Hi Mich & thanks for reading & reviewing. I feel so undeserving & I'm overwhelmed by the encouragement, the criticisms, blunt honesty...all of it, it's very much appreciated.
These characters are so complex & ...argh, you want a happy ending? Wow, I know what the reviewers want which will make it even more difficult to resolve this monstrosity... (what to do, what to do)
Your point of view is spot on! Guity as charged on the Texas storyline. Once she was convinced he was a murderer - (Beginning with Hot Water) the "sexual acts" were basically coerced -even though she never actually voiced an objection. There was no intercourse afterwards- but there were ...oh other things and a loss of control is still a loss of control.
I'm creating tension within each relationship - and as some of you may have guess, I've left Texas unresolved thus far intentionally... (My thick skin will come in very handy..)
Thanks so much and YES there are typos but how kind of you to overlook them.. and thank you for the luck. I'll be needing that!
Reviewer: Mich Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 13/04/10 03:34 am
Great Job! You did an excellent job constructing this entire fic , not a monstrosity for pete's sake, it's wonderful and I love it! Dialouge, characters, that killer plot and such a vivid detail in telling a story as well as great descriptions. If you don't want the fairy tale ending, it's okay. I will completely understand! Just write, I will keep reading.
Author's Response: Well thank you PA. It's a monstrosity and...aah thanks for that last bit especially because it will far from a fairy tale ending. I'm trying to find a middle ground but I don't know...we'll see. Thanks so much.
[Report This]Date: 12/04/10 11:52 pm
I have to tell you, this is the most addicting thing I have ever read. I could have stood far more of the hot water/ what lies beneath writing as I have always seen thee J/P relationship that extremly unfunctional and twisted but that's my only complaint. The story is great, plot was amazing and you built it all so nicely. I haven't seen any typos but a story this good, the typos can be overlooked. This isn't the final chapter is it? That would be another complaint as the story is unfinished. Please tell me there is more.
Author's Response:
Hi James & thanks, oh god no more hot water terror insanity, I can't even read those chapters, so damn awful, I want to kill Jarod out of the fic- and I'm the person that WROTE IT. Shameful...AND NO, no, I hope my muse or whatever wrote those horrible things will never show its ugly face again..I think either the bourbon or the Captain's private stock rum wrote that actually. I drink only red wine now. There is another chapter...but feel free to complain, I was born thick skinned.
Reviewer: James Anonymous [Report This]Date: 12/04/10 07:16 pm
This is great and I was more than relieved to see Zach is okay. With all the drama going on, I was worried. And I knew he was theirs, not nly because that is teh most popular theory regarding Baby Parker, but the way you wrote her attachment to him... he was family, on way or another.
Thanks for posting!! more? :D
Author's Response:
Hello bloodymary2, thank you so much for the review and the rating..wow. I'm sympathic to children, and just couldn't allow him to die.
Yes, there is more to come, I just don't know when exactly.
Thanks again!
Reviewer: bloodymary2 Signed [Report This]Date: 12/04/10 03:21 am
OMG! love, love love it! please update soon!
Author's Response: Hi juilia, I don't know when I can update again.. RL is just...well it sucks - I hate that damned word but it applies. Thanks for reviewing and that rating..wow.
[Report This]Date: 11/04/10 06:49 am
Another fantastic chapter. It read well, was well written of course, dialouge and characters all perfect. I read it twice and didn't find a single typo.
I love the way you threaded together each "awakening" in this chatper, the lab being slammed, Jarod's hunch, the pistachio allergy. Very cleverly written. Your mazes and puzzles are rather captivating.
I actually cried when Jarod was trying to pull Parker from Zachary's bed side. I can easily see her reacting so strongly as I recall Wake Up when she was listening to the drug dealer's interrogation.
Thank you for not completely destroying Parker AND Jarod. Zachary's death surely would have done so and though it's your fic, I would have been so upset. Please update soon.
Author's Response: Thank you so much Miss Ice Queen! I'm glad it all works you, was hoping and I'm sorry I made you cry but hey, it's all better now. Thanks. Reviewer: Miss Ice Queen Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 10/04/10 01:11 am
Brilliant! great emotionallly written chapter! you hit the characters right on the number as I would have expected them to react to such a circumstance.
I also came to notice that every family has it's relatives you pretty much would like not to be related. So far it's been Jarod's mother and sister. In both your stories. Makes you wonder about outlaws-- I mean in-laws. Well you know what they say.. "you can pick your friends but you can't pick your relatives--- the centre does it for you!! haha.
This truly was an extremely well written chapter, but then I have said that about all your chapters in all your stories. You have a great talent as a story teller, especially when you are into the characters as you are with the Pretender.
Keep em coming, I'll keep reading. Thank you for writing and sharing.
and NO I didn't see ONE tiny little typo!
Author's Response:
Hi Nightowl, wow, you leave me speechless every time. Give me a moment...
I hope the characters aren't too bad...the circumstances are difficult, unprecedented, so it's not easy..I hope the chapter wasn't too bad, there are moments I'd like to delete all of my fics, seriously.
Of course I'll never be as adept as you & many other "true" authors here are but I strive to be better, I do and hopefully one day, I'll feel more comfortable writing..it just still seems new and foreign..and I feel so inept.
Out-laws - yeah, exactly, haha..the Centre chose a strange bunch and quite dysfunctional..
Your encouragement (from you, the author of The Human Condition...wow!) is amazing. (still looking for that update... ;-) )
Thanks again!
Reviewer: nightowl Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 09/04/10 11:05 pm
I don't think I can properly express into words what I felt while reading this story. Trepidation during the cabin days - I wanted to stop reading, fearing the very worst, but unable to (like MP and the car wreck analogy) -, sadness at the endless lines depicting the fall of MP - even though I knew she had long been on the edge - and constant anticipation. I cringed with every new twist and turn you presented and like MP, I knew something had to give, that something would go wrong, and it did.
I fear she didn't hear something important in Jarod explanation about Zach and I fear Jarod is right, though I don't want him to be. There is only so much one can take and I don't believe Parker can bounce back, not after this... the final straw, I believe.
Beautiful parting phrase about Jarod and hope and him being her anchor; if he doesn't believe, all is really lost.
Please continue, however long it takes to complete this mammoth of a story (as you mentioned). The Pretender is far too complicated to be easily resolved in a two parter, anyway. :D
Author's Response: I will continue bloodymary2 and thank you so much for taking the time to read this thing and to review it and that rating- wow. Reviewer: bloodymary2 Signed
[Report This]Date: 31/03/10 11:48 pm
Thank you for dismissing the inner sense crap and for giving us a more logical 'intuition or gut feeling' sort of thing. I love this fic, love the respect you've shown to the characters, to keeping them in character and for an amazing, twisted, original fic. You should really be a writer! Please update soon.
Author's Response: You are very welcome jade. I hate the inner sense thing but I have to address it so I can dismiss it so bear with me. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing- and the rating..
[Report This]Date: 20/03/10 01:36 am
