This is interesting. I would have thought Sydney would have been supported, but the otherside of me cheers because of it.
I am glad you didn't make it all perfect by just having Sydney say that he was happy for Jarod, but that you made him sort of against it and see it realistically.
Although that doesn't mean I don't want to see Miss Parker and Jarod together, it just makes it interesting. :) Great job! I can't wait to read more:)
Author's Response: How kind of you to take the time to give me some constructive feedback. I cannot tell you how much it is appreciated! I really love the characters of Sydney, Jarod, Miss P and Lyle. Realistically, the relationships WILL be difficult outside the Centre but I'm hoping for a happy ending! Chapter 4 is coming very soon and ..... things start to hot up! Thank you again. Reviewer: anamchara Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 11/11/08 05:15 pm
Hey Phoebe!
Jarod and Sydney together, huh? very promising start as they have never really been alone together... Never away from the Centre cameras, that is, which forced their officially non-existent relationship to lie undercover, hidden beneath unfinished sentences, pregnant pauses, meaningful looks and double-entendres... Can't wait to see how they will adjust to the possibility of openness and honesty, to the intimacy of being on the run together...
Looking forward to chapter 3!
Author's Response: Thank you! You are right, their relationship has always had to be undercover otherwise the Centre would have used it against them. Chapter 3 gives Sydney more to think about than just Jarod - chapter 3 is coming soon. Thanks for staying with it.
Date: 30/10/08 10:40 pm
Interesting story. I wonder who has Miss Parker?
Only another chapter will tell.:)
Author's Response: Thank you for taking the time to read my first chapter - this story is turning into an epic but the second chapter is coming very soon. Again, many thanks. Reviewer: anamchara Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 29/10/08 07:56 pm
Good beginning. I really liked the first part, when Jarod reflects upon his ties to the centre. And I loved the fact that in your world Jarod has found -all- his family at last and has had some quality time with them all. Which makes his decision to walk away from the centre (ie sydney and miss parker) even more heart-wrenching. It's one family for another, really, no?
Looking forward to see Jarod and Sydney working together!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for taking the time to review - I have always been fascinated by the relationship between Jarod and Sydney - as you so rightly say, one family for another ? They are such great characters with a unique relationship. Second chapter is coming very soon. Thank you again.
Date: 27/10/08 11:12 pm
