Hello!! I enjoyed reading this chapter. The discovery of the clone being their son was a nice touch. I am liking this version of Donoterase much more that the real one. I hope that you will write more soon. I think you're doing a great job!

Twingirl

Thank you for working on such a suspenful and interesting story. This chapter may not have had the comedic moments of the previous chapt. but it continue with the humerous barbs  and character interactions.

I think you did a good job with the characters and although, the subjects covered may not have been totally unique the way you handled them was.

good work. looking for more of the suspense and adventure with the humor in the next chapter. 

I came this close to going to be an hour ago, but thought I'd check for a bit of pretender action before shutting down. I'm glad I did, although I was surprised at how long this turned out to be.

Well done.  I like the intereactions, the action and suspense. You know how I like my Miss Parker- well done.

 I like too that you have relationships evolve slowly not just MP and J but also Jem's with the family.

 What cost is  this Berby going to want for their refuge?  Interesting turn of  events. Not only do they have to deal with the  Centre but now  this  spy guy.

Please keep it going. 

Hi! I'm really enjoying your story. I agree with others, the jellyfish part was quite amusing. LOL! I can't wait until you post more. Good job.

Twingirl :)

I had to laugh with the whole jellyfish sting

very funny, well written and I am looking forward to more 

Welcome back Nightowl, we have missed you!  Great episode! 

I'm not sure where this story is going but that is half the enjoyment - not knowing where we are going to land.  I particularly like the way you are developing the relationship between Jarod and Miss Parker - it's not all plain sailing by any means.  They are both working hard to undo years of distrust and it is obvious that the relationship is still fragile.  I also like the way you have included Jem - standing just on the outside of their circle and observing the inter-play between them.  A lovely twist that you have Jem offering advice to Jarod !!

I'm really looking forward to the next episode - make it soon!

I've enjoyed this story more than I have enjoyed a fanfic in a long time. Enjoyed the mix of humor and adventure and romance. 

As far as I'm concerned you couldn't get the next chapter done soon enough. 

nice long chapters to get the wide range of action and romance.

Gotta love the leg shaving, but the mystery that lies ahead is even more captivating. Can you do introduce us to something new there too.

Author's Response: Thank you for taking the time to review, I must have got the leg shaving part right! or just surprised everyone with it. Don't know if I can top that one with anything else I write.

I think I'm going to hate to see this end. The shaving part is one of my all time favorite parts. I think I'd like to give that one a shot.

I can't imagine Bridgette as the queen. It just doesn't work. Curiouser an curiouser how will you work it out! I can't wait to see it.

Author's Response: Interesting that the shaving bit is going over so well with you ;-PrnI am pleased you are enjoying the story. Thank you for your comments!

HI! I am enjoying the story and hope that you will continue. It seems that the only time Miss Parker feels she can let her guard down is when she a world away from the Centre. Please write more when you have a chance! Thanks!

Twingirl10

Hey!!

It was great seeeing an update so soon. Loved the chapter!! And yes, Rabbit Island seems too fitting (so good that it's surprising it was not made up.)...

Thank you for explaining the difference between Jem and Gem (I really loved it; MP gave the name a certain unique twist to it). Also, I loved the name you picked for MP. It was really original and I am almost certain that you are the first one to use it.

Loved, above all else, because I am a shameless shipper who is not afraid to own up to it, the way you are slowly but surely evolving the relationship between Jarod and MP. I loved that they are meeting halfway, both having to give a little (compromise is the key here!!).

Now... How long will this peace remain? Is a storm lingering in the distance? Your cliffhanger, perhaps? Will you follow the original storyline and have Mr. Parker use his child with Brigitte to reasert his position? What is the truth with that kid anyway? They never explained it and I always found his 'importance' to be highly suspicious (didn't you?), especially since he 'disappeared' later on.

Anyway, sorry if I babbled a little. Loved the chap and hope to see more whenever is possible.

Mary

PS:I didn't find any typos, so cudos to your beta (if you make them as much as you say you do)

I have to say you surprised me with this chapter. In some ways you seem to be tying up the loose pieces but on the other hand there is still a lot to be settled. Nice cliffhanger of an ending.

I think you are enjoying this more than you thought you would, I hope so. I'm enjoying it, that way I'd get more! ;-P

Lost us... I would think not.

I have just arrived to this story and am finding it extremely well written. I love the premise you have established and the way you are choosing to carry this out. Loved also the interaction between Jem (or is it Gem... You confused me there) and MP. Will you reveal her name? The way you wrote it leads me to understand you have already decided on what it could be... (greatest mystery of all PRETENDER mysteries if you ask me).

 I am not pressuring you to update soon, but I hope you know that I will continue here, waiting for the next chap, whenever that might be.

Happy new year!!