Wow Jem is their child... the thought never entered my mind because I always thought he was a clone but this...if Miss Parker can look just like her mother then yes it's ok for Jem to look just like his dad Jarod. :)
Reviewer: Lacy Signed [Report This]Date: 25/02/18 01:13 am
You've struck a perfect balance with dialogue, details, descriptions, romance, adventure, family life and that little boy- oh, nightowl, that was so sweet, so sad that he feared he'd be rejected. And I thought Parker's reaction was fantastic, quite reminiscent of little Miss Parker.
Also, I love that you spent some time on the personal conflicts brewing within these characters and their personal struggles and attempts to come to terms with all that's transpired and speaking of the characters, they're all spot on.
And I'm sure that Miss Parker would be pleased that she pronounces Brigitte "Bridgette", haha. Very nice touch there.
You haven't let us down and I'm quite certain that you never will. *winks*
Reviewer: Mirage Signed
[Report This]Date: 01/06/11 05:56 am
Hello!! I enjoyed reading this chapter. The discovery of the clone being their son was a nice touch. I am liking this version of Donoterase much more that the real one. I hope that you will write more soon. I think you're doing a great job!
Twingirl
Author's Response:
Thank you for the review. I never thought Donoterase ended well, I just couldn't picture Jarod being the genius that he was staying behind when he had to know the Centre would never allow him to take care of Parker and would throw him into one of their little cells. Jarod always seemed to know the how Lyle and the bunch would react, so that ending always seemed out of character.
I'm not sure I'm doing the idea justice, but I will see the story through to its end. I'm glad some of you feel the same and are kind enough to let me know with your very thoughtful responses. Thank you! they are indeed encouraging.
Reviewer: Twingirl10 Anonymous [Report This]Date: 15/04/08 07:23 am
Very well done. For the typo queen, you are doing fairly well. :) I can't wait to read the next chapter *smiles* I love a good Miss Parker/Jarod story. I also like how you explained how Jem is NOT Jarod's clone. That never really settled well with me. I like the idea of him being their son a lot better.
Author's Response:
Thank you for the kind review.. as the typo queen I appreciate the compliment! I'm still on the throne, if it hadn't been for the letters "I" and "C" you would have ditched the story!
I rather like Jem as the son, it plays out well and I think a bit more believable than the clone, well for me. I'm glad you agree!! If it weren't for the responses I would still be guessing if anyone is following along or just looking to see if I'm out there swinging on a vine.
Thank you again for taking the time to let me know.
Nightowl
[Report This]Date: 13/04/08 10:29 pm
Thank you for working on such a suspenful and interesting story. This chapter may not have had the comedic moments of the previous chapt. but it continue with the humerous barbs and character interactions.
I think you did a good job with the characters and although, the subjects covered may not have been totally unique the way you handled them was.
good work. looking for more of the suspense and adventure with the humor in the next chapter.
Author's Response:
Thank you for your thougths on the chapter and the story. I try to keep Parker's wit going, because even in the darkest moments she seemed able to use her sarcastic wit.
The next chapter is proving difficult for me, there are fewer humorous moments but more emotion and hopefully adventure. Even I don't know for sure yet(!) how it will turn out. But hopefully you'll be there to read it and let me know what you think
Thank you for taking the time to share your thoughts
Nightowl
Reviewer: and then there was none Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 08/04/08 10:42 am
I love it i love it i love it!!! keep writing more chapters. im still not over the speedo! ha
Author's Response:
The speedo thing will probably be hard to top! but I'll keep looking for opportunities. I'm glad you are enjoying the story. Keep reading we have a few more chapters to go. Although, this was only going to be two or three chapters long period. I guess it grew legs and is off on its own!
Thank you for taking the time to let me know you are reading and so far enjoying it.
Nightowl
Reviewer: dark angel Anonymous [Report This]Date: 08/04/08 12:26 am
I came this close to going to be an hour ago, but thought I'd check for a bit of pretender action before shutting down. I'm glad I did, although I was surprised at how long this turned out to be.
Well done. I like the intereactions, the action and suspense. You know how I like my Miss Parker- well done.
I like too that you have relationships evolve slowly not just MP and J but also Jem's with the family.
What cost is this Berby going to want for their refuge? Interesting turn of events. Not only do they have to deal with the Centre but now this spy guy.
Please keep it going.
Author's Response:
See, it's always good to check in here before you close down for the night! you never know what you'll find. ;-)
I'm happy you are enjoying this, and I do look forward to your reviews to make sure you continue to enjoy it.
Hold on tight for the next chapter. I hope you'll enjoy it too, it's proving to be the hardest to write so far.
Thanks Bucky for always commenting. How else would a writer know if the story was enjoyed if no one bothered to review or respond.
nightowl
Reviewer: Bucky Anonymous [Report This]Date: 07/04/08 06:11 am
