The throne lol. I know I would make alott of typos if I tried to write. The story is good. Jarod grabbing her.. .that had to hurt. I'm in bed reading on a saturday and enjoying myself more than when I go out. ;)
Reviewer: Lacy Signed [Report This]Date: 25/02/18 01:07 am
What do you mean if you can keep our interest? Are you nuts? We want more! And no, nothing weird at all here.
You wrote that so well that I felt as if I was there with them on the beach and ow! That had to have hurt. Jarod doesn't always think, obviously, haha and it's refreshing to see him make a mistake now and again (ouch) even if he's making the mistake at Parker's expense. Ouch! And the whispering into her hair- again, I could see that entire scene playing out.
You do amazingly well with the details and painting us a visual picture. Oh, and the jelly sting was very funny, nightowl. "You weren't going to urinate me.." Haha!
And yes, you most definitely do justice to the show.
Reviewer: Mirage Signed
[Report This]Date: 01/06/11 05:18 am
I just started this fandom and your story was recommended. I found it has a bit of everything from the series, humor, suspense a touch of romance (although I see more than a touch here) and science fiction. Your plot is excellent, it seems you do have a problem with getting it down in writing, but not so much that I can't follow it and understand what or where you are going.
I like the touch of mystery from the message and hope to see something very unique in it's meaning.
Author's Response: wow. not a lot of pressure there. I hope I can improve as I write, and hopefully the next chapter will be unique.... although if you read a lot of fan fiction sometimes you find ideas from ideas. I am trying to pull this off as being unique. Reviewer: shakespeered Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 25/03/08 12:07 pm
I had to laugh with the whole jellyfish sting
very funny, well written and I am looking forward to more
Author's Response:
I'm glad you enjoyed the jellyfish scene, it was a lot of fun to write. The next chapter I think will be more serious more emotional. But I'm still working on it so it's hard to tell what I'll end up with.
Thank you so much for staying with it and I'm honored by your review.
Reviewer: Tash Signed [Report This]Date: 25/03/08 07:05 am
great chapter...
the humor, the slow progression of the suspense, the unravelling of the plot we can only especulate so far and the great interactions between MP, Jarod and Jem. A real family in the works, my friend.
I'm really glad to see an update at this point, but I am still hoping for more... soon.
Hail the queen!!!!
Author's Response:
LOL yes. as I reread the chapter AFTER I posted it , you are right the queen still lives! yikes. I read that chapter so often prior to posting I was sure I had it cleaned up.
I'm glad you enjoyed it though, and I truly appreciate the kind thoughts you expressed in your review. Thank you for taking the time to read and review.
Reviewer: bloodymary2 Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 24/03/08 03:09 pm
Welcome back Nightowl, we have missed you! Great episode!
I'm not sure where this story is going but that is half the enjoyment - not knowing where we are going to land. I particularly like the way you are developing the relationship between Jarod and Miss Parker - it's not all plain sailing by any means. They are both working hard to undo years of distrust and it is obvious that the relationship is still fragile. I also like the way you have included Jem - standing just on the outside of their circle and observing the inter-play between them. A lovely twist that you have Jem offering advice to Jarod !!
I'm really looking forward to the next episode - make it soon!
Author's Response: I hope to have the next chapter up much sooner than it took for the last one. To see the kind reviews is so nice and humbling when I see all my mistakes. Thank you for taking the time to read and to review. I'm delighted that you are enjoying this. Reviewer: Phoebe Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 22/03/08 02:58 am
Good work with the humor. I laughed at the jellyfish scene. You did a good job with character interaction. I can't wait to see where you go next with the Angelo's message. I hate to see this story end. I never know what you are going to do next!
Author's Response: Bucky, I actually did the speedo scene just for you! But the thought that you enjoyed the story so far is great. Thank you for reading and reviewing it means a lot. Reviewer: Bucky Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 21/03/08 08:24 pm
I've enjoyed this story more than I have enjoyed a fanfic in a long time. Enjoyed the mix of humor and adventure and romance.
As far as I'm concerned you couldn't get the next chapter done soon enough.
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review. I am working on the next chapter. I'm hoping to pull of a bit of a twist so in attempting to get it right it may take awhile. Please keep watching for it.
Reviewer: mrbig Anonymous [Report This]Date: 21/03/08 02:30 pm
