Wow. I started (and finished ;p ) this fic last night and all i can say is wow! Big kudos on such an amazing piece of work. Not many stories tackle the 'J' side of things and the way you did it... Wow! It was dark and twisted but it was executed perfectly and certainly gave me a lot to think about at 3am this morning-but definently well woth it!

I. . .I. . .wow, just. . .wow.

I devoured this story and Soul Splinters One in less time than I could have imagined possible.  The way you toy with the audience, never quite letting us know who's doing what or what's going on until the stage is completely set, kept me reading as did the deeply emotional plot line.

If you're going to do that to us at the end, though, you need to include a character death warning, though.  Syd is my favorite character in the entire Pretender universe, and I kept reading mostly to see what would happen to him.  Killing him off at the very end after everyone else is safe just killed me, though the way in which you did it was beautiful.

All in all, this fanfic touched deeper than I thought any fanfic could.  Kudos to you, your muse, and your committment to the story line.

Thanks for this fic!!

It was so exciting to read, so stressful, it was so well-done that I felt like I was with them!

It's a great end even if Sydney died.

I hope you will finish the otehr fics. Please!

Tough story to read (and I imagine to write) with all the ups and downs.  Enjoyed it except for the end.  Didn't like Sydney dying.  He deserves a chance to live a Centre-free life too.

Wow what an ending! You kept the suspense up right until the last paragraph. Very well executed.

I don't think I have ever read a story more focused on what is usually "fade to black" because it becomes to violent for the series, but you pull it off remarkably well. It isn't blood gushing everywhere that's the focus, it's the emotional trauma, which gives it many more layers than your average action fic.

Every once in a while it can be a little hard to follow what's actually happening, but I think that's mostly due to the fact that you don't rely on the classic clishe's when describing something. You use a much more vibrant and creative language, so you actually have to pay attention to every word, you can't just skim it. So it's really a good thing.

I think you did a great job describing what kind of pain, both emotional and physical, Lyle can inflict if he is truly given free range. And also how hard it is to recover from such deep trauma. You can't just go home and expect everything to be fine, there are consequences to abuse. You pictured that wonderfully both in Jarod and the clone.

Thank you for an amazing thrill ride down the path of psychological thrillers. An epic is complete.

- Sarah