This has been an interesting story. I'm pleased that you are updating on a regular basis. i come home each night to check on it. Please continue!
Author's Response: Aw that is just so sweet. :)
[Report This]Date: 26/10/05 01:38 am
I'm enjoying this story and the regular updates. I hope you continue to update as quickly as possible!!
Author's Response: I'm doing my best to keep up. I'm glad people are reviewing because it does remind me to check back and post a new chapter. Thank you and I'm glad you're enjoying it.
[Report This]Date: 24/10/05 11:16 pm
You said you were going to post one chapter a day...Well I'm not so sure that you actually kept your bargain. LOL !!! Your readers are becoming hungry, you really should give them some more chapters to chew on, or soon they will try to devor their computers instead.
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Author's Response: I'm quite sorry. I would hate for anyone to die of computer ingestion! I forget sometimes (busy with life haha), but I'm glad you guys review because it reminds me! I'm posting right now.
[Report This]Date: 24/10/05 09:27 pm
Please continue.
Question: Did Brigette's comment about Cox et al helping her your way of saying she didn't die, or have I just lost sight of the timeline of the story?
Author's Response: It was definitely a way to write her back into the story. She's a nice juicy character and I couldn't let her die without it being on my own terms!
[Report This]Date: 18/10/05 03:36 am
hey! happy to see that you have have joned us. loved yur story back then and overjoied that you are going to finish it!
Author's Response: Hah I do hope to finish it.
[Report This]Date: 16/10/05 08:17 am
still in set-up mode and its getting more and more interesting where you will lead us.----Cox for one.....
Daddy keeps on playing her that much is for sure. But as we can see, slowly she kicks to get away
Author's Response: Yup still set-up mode. She is kicking to get away. Slowly, she'll grow more passionate about it.
[Report This]Date: 13/10/05 06:18 pm
Wow, your story is fantastic and is has so much suspence. The only thing I do don't like, waiting for the next chapters...
Great work, can't wait to read more.
Author's Response: You're too sweet. Well, atleast they're consistently coming up once a day. ;)
[Report This]Date: 13/10/05 01:26 am
Love it ,want more!!!!
Author's Response: Of course!
[Report This]Date: 12/10/05 09:38 pm
As part 1, a great set-up. Another recap of the show from his POV. ----
Jarod using the line ‚life goes on’ is quite interesting....from a certain point of view. ;)
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And what a great dialogue! Just as it would have been on screen! (‘Lady who?’ ….those parts just.cracked me up)
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One note: "She believes that she still loves him, even after what he's done to her. " - actually I do think she does REALLY love him. She deceives herself, and lets him deceive her, yes, but…..she loves him. .--- but never mind me… cuz on the other hand, its quite in the cannon for Jarod to think that way…he wants to believe it. He has no love lost for Daddy P. and that’s what he wants to believe for her too, after all. (if I make sense *g *)
Author's Response: Absolutely makes sense. First rule of a first person story is to never trust the narration of the character. Very nice critique there.
[Report This]Date: 12/10/05 07:08 pm
Your story is good !!! Where are the 32 remaining chapters ??? I'd really like to read them.
Author's Response: Thanks. :) I'm posting one chapter a day for the rest of the chapters. Check back daily!
[Report This]Date: 11/10/05 07:23 pm
ok now a few words on part one (for now):
Very convincing how you draw her! Trying to tell herself how strong and – as the running theme shows - invincible she is!
*maybe I just don’t want to suffer alone*……….yess that’s a reasonable reason! For leaving her behind alone in that hell he has now her on his heels. Like you point out in one of the last sentences. ‘he deserves it for leaving the centre’ (aka ‘me’ uh?)
great first chapter that made a sort of whole recap of the series for me now after quite some long time of absence of watching or reading!
Author's Response: Thank you. I know how you feel since it's been a while since I've read or seen anything about Pretender. I'm rereading my story with you all so that it can all come back and I can commence writing. ;)
[Report This]Date: 11/10/05 06:47 pm
i remember your story! i remember that i loved it back then, now i get into gear to read again........back then i think i didnt get an ending........maybe now??? *blink*
i will read again with joy, that one is for sure
Author's Response: That thrills me to know you remembered me! I don't have an ending written yet, but I'm much closer to it. You never know. I just may be inspired again. ;)
[Report This]Date: 08/10/05 08:43 pm
Keep posting.
Author's Response: I'm trying to post a chapter a day. So keep checking back!
[Report This]Date: 08/10/05 01:53 am
I liked Miss Parkers inner war. If it's okay to trade jarods liberty for hers...and I liked what she was thinking about her childhood and her friends...so I'm waiting for the next part! =)
Author's Response: Thank you. The next part is up now.
[Report This]Date: 07/10/05 08:06 pm
