Solid first chapter. Again, your work is so refreshing.

Congrats on the new chapter. You yank me in with the first line and don't let go. You're one of the few authors I show up for and as an editor and publisher if I'm reading something it has to be intriguing. I don't read just anyone! Please continue. You know what you're doing and you are comfortable with language, dialogue, character and placement and the works.

Exquisite, Mirage. You've outdone yourself again. I always enjoy the underlying camaraderie Jarod and Parker share, even when their relationship is broken and they are at their worst they still have that spark of being in it together. You capture the complexities and dynamics brilliantly. I'm already looking forward to your next instalment.

Top shelf here as always Mirage. You like continuity too I see. I remember little Jarod screaming the antcipation of pain is worse than the pain and yeah seems the theory holds still. I love the word choices and placement, the way you talk about Parker being hard, incisive, angry, all snarling but how gentle she is with Jarod... beautiful moment. She's more kind than he is sometimes. His comes out of him because he's bitter and afraid sometimes and he doesn't mean it. I think she loves him and always has. This is really beautiful, gritty, raw, noir-ish, fast paced. Please update soon.

Oooh. Oh! Jarod said what??!! Holy wows Mirage. He showed his hand immediately. So it was a rebound thing with Miuna but god... wow... she was so sweet. I know you're going to tell us how young she was and all the juicy deets? Arent you? Please. Cherries on top! 

Can I say how in character they all are? Broots. Sam. Parker. Jarod. And my god LYLE!! Lyle! Wow. "not my flavor" holy amazeballs! "Too soon?"

"GI no" lol! some cops and militias be like that, playing wannabe soldier but not in shape or disciplined enough to be in the actual military ...including those who committed treason on Jan 6 at the capitol. They just cosplaying soldier bunch of sad bitches. I love this. Was that

a motorhead tune? God was never on your side? right? I googled it. You're too young to know that tune. How the hell do you know all of the good old tunes? Everything from Perry Como and Rosemary Clooney to the 80s and 90s? I understand how you know all the kids these days and LP . You actually turned me on to LP . I love all of their songs.. I don't want to misgender LP so I'm being careful. How do you know all of these songs?!  Tell me!! Write more stories and please update all of the existing ones. I love it. It's like coming home from school and watching on NBC again. I love this series and your contribuations. You totally picked up the gauntlet here. MORE!!

Please update this soon. It's so freaking intriguing and I want to know more about the woman Jarod met.  I have a question for you. I'm thinking about how it is to meet the actors from this series. Are they nice? Friendly? Were you scared to meet any of them? Is Michael scary or nice? I really want to meet him. I'm really nervous about meeting him. Is he scary or anything?! Tell me what to do please....and please please update your work.

I love how much this feels like I'm watching an episode of the pretender and how all of your stories are. like continuations that are plausible and brillianly written. A new piece from you is wonderful and always welcome.

Oh woot you've been busy. Yay!!! I don't know if Jarod can get out of this one. He's not guilty, is he? I know he can snap, but dammmn. Georgia. He seems so screwed. Hell of a job with this. You really set the scene and it's like being there.

This. Oh no Jarod is in trouble now. The way the agencies all communicate now he can't hide from this.

Miss Parker shines here. I wasn't expecting two chapters in addition to all of the other stories you are writing at the moment, not to mention the short short you recently gave us that I will be reviewing next. Brilliant!

Ooooh. Powerful. You know how to yank the reader in immediately. The first sentence makes me want to read more. Another thing is you have a really great mind's eye for illustrating the words with words. What I mean is that I read you and the scene plays out like a movie in my head for me. I don't see that much in fanfic. I don't see it much in books either. I was so absorbed in the story that I almost forgot to even notice how well the characters are fleshed out and recognizable. I don't know if you climbed inside Jarod and Parker's mind or if they climbed inside yours. I think the characters have decided to live with you. It's so wild. Some of your writing has scared me and I hope that doesn't offend you or anything. Having that sweet stage front  ticket can be a blessing but when things get dark in your stories it can get scary and uncomfortable, like when I went to see the Dangerous Liasions play and our very own Michael T. Weiss played that skeevy predator. I should have sat way in the back. I was so flushed in the face that I feared I was the one people were watching. I hope the actors don't read these reviews! I will die of embarassment. I'm grateful you are writing for the fandom, for this webpage, that The Pretender is still alive and well at least in one small space in the world. Please don't let it die. It's all some of us have.

Gripping first chapter. I'm impressed and can't wait to see where you're taking us.

I am blindsided by this. Wow! Amazing.