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That is a first. We usually all want the sex!

I love this. It wasn't a 🧀 🧀 touch feely. It was perfect. Pretender perfect.

As always.

No disappointments here at all.

I need more!

"You were such a dick" lives in my head now in miss parker's voice.

Mwauahhh chef's 💋 

The second and third re read is as amazing as the first. 

Oomph. 

I love it. I don't know all the words to say how I feel it. do not ever stop writing i beg

Yes Yes yes we always want sex not touchy freely but I love this, seeing them come closer and I wish there was more to read of this. Please write more!! 

Ahhhh I love the deeper exploration into the Jarod-Sydney dynamic.

It is the perfect amount of touchy feely.

I love this story so much.

Please continue. 

I read the touchy feely disclaimer and thought oh no 🙂‍↔ï¸� BUT this is amazing, not cheesey not syrupy. It's perfect. Helluva tight chapter and thank you for spacing it out for my autistic brain! There is no cure.I don't need a cure. I need more people to try to understand . You seem to understand. 

So much was resolved here, finally, a straight up deep feel from Parker. 

It was a lot more than just feelings.

They were so incredibly in love with each other but it still wasn't enough. 

I hope now they can work together to be happy.

Jarod's "let's never miss each other again.....FOR THE REST OF OUR LIVES" 

OMFG! 

Thank you!

Man  i love this.

Jarod has been feeling ill since that meeting with Lyle, was "trying to outrun the nasueau or atbleast meet it civilly" in the  bathroom ...and I'm typing that from memory ..I loved that line.

Guess it finally caught up with him.

It's like he knew there were worse things going on with Parker.

There had to have been, right? she went from being his bestie and first love and first kiss to chasing him with a gun!  Something bad had to have happened in between. The indoctrination had to be severe to last that long. 

Jarod didn't eat yet so the vomit was more just saliva.

I understand totally. This was rough for him and her.

Jarod bought all of that ginger ale for Parker because he knew even before Sydney was released from the hospital that Parker was feeling ill . And now she's bringing him a bottle because she knows he's feeling ill.

ahhhh I love them.

I love how they much they love each other.

I suspected that the touchy feely wouldn't be a challenge for you, and you write it in way that conveys the emotions and the intimacy. You don't get tangled up in a web of stretchy taffy or lose the known characteristics of your subjects.

I love that it always takes about 23 chapters for Parker to finally make a compelling declaration of love.

She talked about regrets on earlier chapters.

She admitted there were still feelings in earlier chapters.

It's in character for her to not show her hand, or not the entire hand too early in the game.

This chapter takes place almost entirely in a car, and I was thinking of them in Scotland IOTH and in the Keys episode.

Things get so emotionally intense for them in a car sometimes, and I love that you resolve a lot of that baggage here in this chapter, in a car, and reveal to us that they there are actually finally getting somewhere, not just driving in circles and always ending up where they began.

The car has been a perfect metaphor. They travel closer and close during the tv series but end up with an obstacle on the road or a crash and burn.

Here they finally seem to be going places, maybe into the sunset happily together. I hope. 

They deserve it.

We deserve it.

This was beautiful and emotional and perfect.

More please ?

Until next time Mirage,

Ciao!

This might be my favorite as you continue to outdo yourself!

I 😘 love your strong command of the characters and language.

You must update this and everything you're writing.

I hope you will also share more stories here yours are so wonderful.

Did you know that the Michael is a shrink now?!!

Isn't that wild!

What did you think about that ...or did you even know this fact?!

How do you feel about this mirage????!!!

He is practicing in the southern US!!!

Aren't you there sometimes in the south of the US or it did I hear wrong?!

I want your thoughts!!

I love your writing.

Don't stop ever!

I need more! So hot!

Bravo! I'll never get enough!

Sydney, Sydney, Sydney. He's always so tormented, always forced into painful situations.

I have to wonder if Jarod can ever forgive this.

I look forward to finding out soon. 😉😎

Bravo! Impressive as always. I didn't expect this. I was certain they would do genetic testing to be sure before sleeping together, and I'm glad they didn't. Jarod was right. Whatever the results they are in love and results won't change that, and shouldn't prevent the relatiionship from evolving.

I would have loved to have read more of the conversation I know they must have had between chapter 21 and chapter 22, the conversation they talked about having, and of course as always it would have been nice to have seen their lovemaking. I know you don't like writing those parts. You've voiced your disdain for it in the past, You think you don't write smut well. You write everything brilliantly. You bring a visual to the sex aspect of writing. I think your use of anatomically correct terminology and how you make the act of consenting so hot makes the smut and sex scenes you write so much more oomph-ful and powerful.

NOthing against other authors' uses of slang but it doesn't have the same impact. I appreciate that you don't use slang when you're writing the sex. I once read a BOOK where the famous author used a word that refers to a rooseter, and I couldn't stop laughing. I was visualizing a rooster, a cat, and a donkey somewhere along my reading of that novel because that author used so much slang.

But if you want to use slang I won't mind. I just miss reading your hot sex scenes. It's been a while since you've written any.

Please continue writing either way.  I can always go back and read your other stories and enjoy those sex scenes.

More please?

Until next time, Mirage,

Ciao!