Finally someone addresses what everyone wants to ignore. Sydney is hella freaking culpable and there weren't enough episodes about it either and someone from the past SHOULD eventually show up to do something. I like that this guy thinks Sydney is Jacob but Sydney still knows he has it coming to him even if he wasn't as bad Jacob who kidnapped Jarod in the first place. They were twins so you get to explore that as well and the guy wouldn't know the difference. And Sydney's ability to understand and admit his own guilt is a redeeming quality. You did this before. You addressed Sydney's evilness in Forces of Nature too. That's when I first noticed you on here and I was just lurking then but yeah, you nailed it. You nailed this. I want more. Written amazingly well too. Your prose is crazy professional.
Reviewer: Miss Salty Bitch Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 07/09/19 02:18 am
Every now and then I read an author's stories and I'm wowed and blown away and speechless. It happens every time I read your work. This is plausible and should be expected in a place like the Centre. We saw Einnad/Dannie come back but he didn't finish Raines and Sydney is somehow always viewed as not complicit. But he is. He was the adult, the medical professional, and he had a responsibility to do no harm and that includes not letting others do harm. I remember Jarod telling Miss Parker she could stop Raines when he was in her home after she untied him but he never put that burden on Sydney. It pisses me off a little bit that Sydney comes out smelling clean every time. I hope the search for Sydney will bring Jarod and Parker closer to at least be friends again. I want to hear more about the weekened they shared. Did they have sex? Details please! More of this. You are a paragon of literary excellence. Why are you still here and not on some best seller's list? Thank you for staying here though... really. You keep this crazy series alive for me.
Reviewer: Jen Signed [Report This]Date: 06/09/19 09:52 pm
I want more. So dark and so fitting for a dark show. Beautifully written and executed too Mirage and always in character. More please?
Reviewer: xebra Anonymous [Report This]Date: 06/09/19 05:42 pm
You astound me. How you're able to write so many different stories at once is a mystery. Perhaps you're a genius? Oblivion and Lucanae are both excellent pieces, the substance and quality in each one isn't dimished by the quantity. Some might say Jarod went too far with Lyle but they'd be wrong. Jarod loves Sydney like a son loves a father or grandfather and would go to any length I believe to protect him. It's a violent scene, a masculine scene where Jarod pushes the gun into Lyle's mouth. It's because Jarod is afraid. The first line where Lyle scolds the driver is masculine too. You are brilliant at writing the genders. Mirage you're brilliant. There's not much else to say. Until next time...
Reviewer: Michael Anonymous [Report This]Date: 11/09/18 02:57 am
Will never be able to get the image of Jarod shoving a gun into Lyle's mouth and down this throat from my mind. You've done it again precious author. I have one complaint. The chapter was too damn short. lol. I'm stupid. More, please?
Reviewer: Monica_Bitch Signed [Report This]Date: 09/09/18 12:08 am
Oohhh deliciousness. "drives like my sister" That car does rock will be rocking after Miss Parker gets out sometimes lol. This was dark and nice. This side of Jarod, trembling and enraged tryng to control himself and not kill Lyle. THis is what Jarod would do if Sydney were missing. He's got the wrong guy this time though. The realization that Lyle was telling the truth ... Jarod's thoughts. Love this all so much. But ooh so short Mirage. More please.
Reviewer: TheDarkAngel Signed [Report This]Date: 08/09/18 08:53 pm
OMG. I need more of this in my life. Brilliant. As freaking always. More please?
Reviewer: Jen Signed [Report This]Date: 08/09/18 04:51 am
Please continue. Don't stop now.
Author's Response:
I'm not. Thanks for reading and reviewing, Monica_Bitch.
Reviewer: Monica_Bitch Signed [Report This]Date: 29/03/17 03:03 am
Thank you!
You do my namesake a great justice and service Mirage.
and my toy wonderboy too.
More of this please?
Reviewer: The Miss Parker Signed [Report This]Date: 04/02/17 11:05 pm
Was I supposed to leave a review for each chapter? I will do that.
Reviewer: Macey Soles Anonymous [Report This]Date: 04/02/17 09:04 am
It's so freaking weird how twitter pays off sometimes. I clicked a link and read your work and I'm astounded. Mirage I think is appropriate. No one knows who the hell you are! It's so wild!!
Anyhow! I found this place and I seem to be addicted. So you really are like crack or meth or whatever. I didn't believe it. I want more of this story. I don't know how this works. I guess I leave nice words for you and you update for me? I don't know what fanfic is. I know that your writing is freaking awesome. I want to read the rest of this! I guess I will beg if I need to. Please.
Reviewer: Macey Soles Anonymous [Report This]Date: 04/02/17 09:01 am
Congratulations. This is a fantastic story! Few writers write Jarod and Miss Parker well. On top of a plausible plot and correct characterisations you use correct grammar. That's very rare these days. You are talented m'dear.
I'm finally out of the sticks and my internet connection is restored. I think last time I was here you were considering a continuation of Combustion. I hope you'll update us on that eventually. Either way thank you for this well written story. It's a real treat Mirage.
Thank you.
Reviewer: Jeremy Signed [Report This]Date: 03/02/17 11:51 pm
I don't usually say WOW aloud while reading. Or Oh MY GOD or anything. I'm not so moved by writing. I like stories but they don't usually make me feel anything. Finding you changed all of that.
"My call history," she said archly, "doesn't lie."
"Even if its owner does," came Jarod's lofty retort.
"All you have to do is tell me where-" Jarod words were clipped, his attention arrested by a heavy engine approaching rapidly. He estimated one, possibly two, Centre sedans. Sweepers. The squeal of tires acted as arbiter; they called the battle in Parker's favor. Or so she believed. Cold steel caressed her temple and prompted her to believe otherwise. "Not a sound," commanded Jarod.
Wow. Brilliant. You're a wordsmith. You're talented. I'm shocked you haven't left us for a big writing deal. I guess you could do both. I'm glad you stay for whatever reason you stay. I can't get over this one.. I keep seeing the words and I love them....
"Cold steel caressed her temple and prompted her to believe otherwise."
How the heck do you write like that? Wanna teach me?
Eternally impressed by your out of this world writing.
More please? I'll do anything for more.
Reviewer: Allie Anonymous [Report This]Date: 03/02/17 06:24 am
It never gets old.
I love it.
Keep going please.
Reviewer: Jules Anonymous [Report This]Date: 02/02/17 06:31 pm
I spent 6 hours reading today on this page. I'm new to fanfic but not all that new to the Pretender. I haven't seen the shows in some long while but this is so familiar to me. In my mind I would think Jarod would be the most difficult character to write. Somehow you bring that man to life too as you do with the other characters. Michael will always be the only Jarod for me. What a beautiful man. You go deeper than skin and flesh him out properly. It's true what they say about you. All I know is that I am enjoying your writing more than I enjoy most novels today and that you aren't fond of the attention. You're talented and intelligent Mirage. You should get used to the attention because more is coming. I will go back and review what I've read but I do hope you will finish the story. I searched around and I see you have complete stories. That's important. It's hard to keep my interest. I think it will be very hard for me lose interest in your stories. Please update this soon.
Reviewer: Renee Collins Anonymous [Report This]Date: 02/02/17 05:40 am
Ooh oh! Oh my God! Mirage. So ok I know you are good but MY GOD sometimes you still blow me way away. Jarod vanished just like always. A weekened in Carthis. More about that soon I hope.
Very professional as always. Everyone was in character. YOU KNOW THESE CHARACTERS. It's amazing. I lol at Broots like always in the tv series and your work.
Did Jarod just make a mistake and go after Lyle thinking he had Sydney? If so that would keep him human and I'd like that. You always reveal humanity in them, imperfections.
I love the police element in this and Parker's competence in being a sweeper and collecting evidence.
Bravo!
More please?
Reviewer: Miss Parkere Signed [Report This]Date: 01/02/17 11:58 pm
Without twitter I wouldn't have known you had updated. I know how you feel about social media but I'm just saying.
Your writing is vivid and the characters... wow. I've never seen Sydney written so accurately. Reading your work is like watching the series. I see the story unfold, the characters faces. I feel like I'm there with them. Uhh Magical. I'm seriously terrified for Sydney.
Reviewer: Miss Parkere Signed [Report This]Date: 01/02/17 11:34 pm
You are full of surprises. Such an amazing surprise. I'm glad your muse gave you a break from Jarod. ;) You are always good about including other characters to give us a full view of The Pretender. That's one of the many things I love about your writing.
I saw no errors...despite your warnings. I don't know where this is going but I'm ready.
Reviewer: Miss Parkere Signed [Report This]Date: 01/02/17 11:29 pm
So love all the forensics stuff. Great chapter! I want more and more. You rule this fandom. Keep going. Please. And update your other stories too. I need more!
Reviewer: Con-O Signed [Report This]Date: 01/02/17 09:42 pm
I know how much you love Sydney. You do still love Sydney? I'm surprised this hasn't happened to him. Plausible as always. And very short.
Reviewer: Con-O Signed [Report This]Date: 01/02/17 09:18 pm
YES! I lurked around after being offline for a while and hoped you'd still be around. You are! It's so wonderful too. This was a very short chapter but quality is better than quality. You always give us quality. I don't think I'll be offline again anytime soon so please I beg you update your stories.
Reviewer: Con-O Signed [Report This]Date: 01/02/17 09:13 pm
You always impress me. The tension in the room was wild. Mirage you have this ability to transport the reader into the story and that can be enjoyable and it can be terrifying.
Jarod and Miss Parker spent a weekend together after Carthis, but before Sydney's abduction? Well well well. I need a second to wrap my mind around that one.
I won't ask but only because I don't want to make you uncomfortable. I would like to know what occurred and where the weekend was spent and how they wound up there. If they were an item or were intimate they apparently had some trouble and didn't stick it out together. I am curious.
Intriguing. So much tension but that tension is in keeping with what you saw on your Pretender dvds.
I look forward to reading more from you.
Until next time..
Reviewer: Michael Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 27/01/17 10:00 pm
Ok got it. She had come in through the back door which leads into the kitchen and the stain was on the other side so she only saw as she was leaving through that same back/kitchen door. Make sense. That's the door Jarod would choose because the front might be monitored. Sydney is so gardeny and you mentioned gardens and the back door would be obscured by the gardens and trees so yeah. I have to get this straight. You write so clear that it's easy to understand.
Hell of an entrance Jarod made. My favorite part was probably the "abort button for Jarod" part. Parker and her snark. lol.
So Jarod is following the wrong lead?
Wow. Very tense.
I can't wait to see where you, Sydney, Jarod and Parker go next but I definitely want to tag along.
Reviewer: Chloe Signed [Report This]Date: 26/01/17 10:35 pm
Oh my wows! Girl! I know how much you love and enjoy Patrick Bauchau's work so this must have hurt you alot to write. But you finally got your reprieve from Jarod so are you relieved and hurt by this at the same time? Keep going and big hugs from me for what you must be feeling now. Amazing.
Reviewer: Chloe Signed [Report This]Date: 26/01/17 10:21 pm
Mirage! Wow!
I am so incoherent.
Reviewer: Chloe Signed [Report This]Date: 26/01/17 10:18 pm
