I was afraid I wasn't going to like this. I feared you were going in a darker Jarod direction so I'm relieved. For him to have sex with her now when she's there with in the first place because he abducted her would be wrong wrong wrong of him even if she offers herself naked to him on a silver platter. I like your darker evil Jarod novels when that's a part of the plot but right now he's his usual darkness and still good and I like it.
I need to say that I love how Jarod had planned to have one conversation with Ethan and then for him to lose control of the conversation. It shows Jarod's humanity and that he isn't always perfect. Makes him more relatable. I love how you show that Ethan has grown and come a long way and he took control of the conversation and held Jarod accountable. When it came down between allying with Jarod against his sister, Ethan chose to ally with his sister. Can't blame that. She never shot or took Jarod to the Centre but Jarod did abduct her.
LOVE Parker's thoughts about Jarod's own fears that he's chin-deep in. It just shows that he keeps trying to help others when he needs help and easily he could become an enabler even accidentally. Needing help, needing to help others and needing her because he loves her and he could let things slide to please her. They could bring each other down if they aren't careful, drown together. You keep it real and I've always loved that about your writing. Cate adds difficulties as children do. Bringing Catherine into this is a stroke of genius too. I can't wait to see what happens next. I never want this to end.
Author's Response:
I know what you mean. On one hand, they are consenting adults. That said, it's complicated for hosts of reasons. If it were any man, I think it would have happened many chapters ago. I'm relieved that you don't want it to end. The conclusion is still quite a ways off. Thanks for reading and reviewing, Leslie.
Reviewer: Leslie Signed




Date: 18/02/18 10:55 pm
Oh man they haven't had sex YET! I can't help it. You write sex too realistically so it's your fault. I want them to have sex now!! Ooooh but did love Jarod's 'it's stonger and deeper not willing to sacrifice it' and he's right because they've spent most of their lives not having sex so I get it. But I don't have to like it. He did abduct her in the first place and is in a position of power. I can get that he would want her to be able to come and go as she pleases. She does need to face the past. They did both just break off long term relationships. I get it. I still want them to have sex now. Other than that I love the story, I really love your ability to turn a phrase. You're an awesome storyteller and the words flow so easily. Congrats. More please?
Author's Response:
Haha. True. They've lived their entire lives not having sex with each other and I'm in no hurry for that to change. It will change, of course, because the Muses are extremely naughty and try daily to corrupt me- they and this "Family Television Show" (complete with sex toys and public pool intercourse). I'm glad you're liking this. Thank you for reading and reviewing.
Reviewer: Pretenderoxx Anonymous




Date: 17/02/18 07:42 pm
Bless you. Mirage your update is the best news I've seen all year. I feel like I'm sometime living through a hurricane every waking minute... it's been a bad year and so much bad and darkness in the world but this update is a lighthouse for me. I'm grateful.
Author's Response:
Oh Chloe. I'm sorry. I know it's been a painful and emotionally fatiguing year for many people. Please know that good still exists. You seem like a good person after all (you are the lighthouse and you don't even realize it). We have to try to breed kindness and look for the positive (you do that each time you review me-- all these typos that you didn't point out): books, music (avoid television and the internet when possible). Try to surround yourself with likeminded people (bookstore, art club, book club, museum, Science shows/fairs). We must persevere, persist and resist. If you're depressed or feeling too overwhelmed please talk to someone. I know it seems like a lost battle, but we don't lose until we stop fighting. ;
Reviewer: Chloe Signed




Date: 17/02/18 04:31 am
I'm still here lol. I try to go away and be pissed about the no ending that was promised by Mitchell and Sickle and no hope at all of a third movie !!!!!! Arghhhh! Not your fault I know I'm ranting. I can never stay away from the fan fic. I swear Pretender fan fic is superior to the official published novels and that's why I don't say the novels are official. Fan fic is official. I love it all every word and can't get enough. I'm printing this out now to keep forever because I noticed you deleted a couple of stories I think you did? One for sure is definitely not here anymore. I have it forever if you ever want to repost it. Youre still the reason I come here YOU, Michael T. Weiss, Andrea, Jon & GANG are probably the only reasons I still think of myself as a Pretender fan. Keep keeping it alive. Keep them alive for me. I beg you.
Reviewer: JarodandMissParker4ever Anonymous




Date: 16/02/18 09:20 pm
There you are! Don't scare me like that again and disappear for so long. I really missed you. But oh, this was worth the wait. I love the struggle Jarod's dealing with here. The dilemma was always more black and white before he realized the woman was the mother of his child and had been victimized at some point in her life. Seeing him go from one extreme with her to the other has been fascinating and the time passage too and how they've transformed to reach this place. In the beginning chapters he's phsyically trying to subdue her to get info and then losing control and kissing her and now he's all the way on the other side of that spectrum with those memories haunting him in light of what he's discovered. You're a genius Mirage. It's true even in RL out here than some men have to become fathers to see the error of their own ways. I don't think Jarod's exactly in that group but I think it's more a fear of losing control again? Maybe? Or guilt? Whatever the case I love it. So much is open to interpretation but it's so poignant and every line ... I love dissecting and anaylsing. Human nature and you never fail to explore it so deeply, even the ugliness. It's real. It's so real. You're amazing. Please update again soon. I'll be patient.
Author's Response:
I didn't mean to frighten anyone. Life is--- life. I do have a tendency to explore the ugliness of human nature. I suppose there's so much of it and so much I'll never understand and so much I don't want to understand. Thank you for your patience and for reading and reviewing.
Reviewer: Gunner Signed




Date: 16/02/18 05:54 am
Welcome back! Try not to stay away so long next time ok? This chapter like all of your chapters is Pretender perfect. Magic Mirage. Keep going please. I need more of this in my life. Especially now with all the mess going on. MY country is the same as Jarod and Miss Parker's and it's a ..to quote the 'pussygrabber' a real "shithole." Every distraction you can provide me is appreciated. Congrats on another exhilarating chapter.
Author's Response:
I'll try not to, Needlepoint. Oh, I'm so incredibly sorry for the carnage, the loss of life, and particularly when life was just beginning and so full of promise. There are no words. It's all--- devastating, stressful. Incomprehensible. I can assure you that Miss Parker and Jarod will pull through. The jury's still out on the rest of us, however. Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Reviewer: needlepoint Signed




Date: 16/02/18 01:07 am
Oh Godesses! "It was a shame, opined Parker, that she loved him so and therefore couldn't simply avoid him or petition the Centre to conveniently disappear him." lol That is SO Miss Parker. But then things go really serious "Damn it, Jarod," she began quietly with a brief headshake and a strained smile, staring into her glass, "when you look at me like that—" "What," He stammered when she fell silent. Advancing, he softly pleaded, "Tell me." That was powerful, profound . I want more now. Right now so go and werite and hurry.
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading and reviewing, Monica_Bitch.
Reviewer: Monica_Bitch Signed




Date: 15/02/18 11:13 pm
"Parker smiled, yawned, observed him through a veil of eyelashes. "Mm, I haven't seen that expression on a man's face in ages. I'm legal," she reminded with a chuckle. "You don't have to look so worried." "I don't?" "You do realize that I've had sex before?" "Not with me you haven't," he reminded softly- as if she needed to be reminded" And then this ""my technique is guaranteed to melt the tension. If you'll just disrobe and lie on the bed-" "Your technique is guaranteed to get you laid. I'm twice as persuasive when I'm naked." "I'm a professional." "Aren't we all," she quipped. "Trust me," he said. "I've done this before." "Mm, not with me you haven't."
LOVE! I love this series.
Can you let Miss Parker kill the bad asshole. I hate people like Whitman.
Reviewer: Monica_Bitch Signed




Date: 15/02/18 11:02 pm
"No one is going to break anything" Jarod said to his mother ... I read the new chapter first and then went back and saw that. Foreshadowing. He's afraid he'll break Miss P. Ahhhh Mirage I love this.
Reviewer: Monica_Bitch Signed [Report This]Date: 15/02/18 10:53 pm
My only complaint is that I had to go back to chapter 1 of part V. I wanted 2 tho so it's cool and I won't hold it against you. Tell you what girlfriend I appreciate you for showing Jarod's parents still having sex at their age. NOt many stories where the older folks get to have sex and this is so freaking cool. I love Emily for calling it like that. it's such a pleasure to read fresh ideas.
Reviewer: Monica_Bitch Signed




Date: 15/02/18 10:48 pm
Impressive as always Mirage. I've got chills. These characters are real enough to touch, the sotry is amazing and the writing is ... what are you doing in fanfic? You could be making money. Don't you know that?
Reviewer: Sandy Anonymous




Date: 15/02/18 10:29 pm
Oh, my God Mirage! Where on earth have you been? Big hugs and welcomes back!!! I'm so relieved that you're ok!!! It's like Christmas when I see your updates... first I see the pressies and then I get closer and then I open them up and it's even more than I could have ever hoped for. I love the way they are with each other and that it's real and it's hard. Thank you. This...damn girl you perfectly wrote my favorite characters. Let me just say now that you never have to end this. I'm glad you didn't rewrite. Sometimes RL imitates real life... "On a bender" real life is drunk for sure. You wrote about a freak blizzard in Texas once and then there was totally a freak blizzard in Texas. Just keep going. Please never stop writing. Update your other stories too please. I love them. Thank you so so much for coming back to us.
Reviewer: Christoph Signed




Date: 15/02/18 08:42 pm
Woot. You've been missed but I'm in a forgiving mood as long as you keep updating. I love a Mirage update. Give me more of this! As much as I love some dark Jarod this is brilliant. The way they muse about their feelings for each other without voicing them but still not being afraid of them. That was a tense moment when she said, "when you look at me like that" and I want to know more about that young lady. Hurry and type. Please for the love of GOD don't stop now Mirage.
Reviewer: TheDarkAngel Signed




Date: 15/02/18 06:49 pm
Bravo! You handled this topic well. Mirage you always handle this topic well in this and in Cirlces of Hell and Forces of Nature and Who will guard the guards. I don't know how you do it but you seem to understand beyond reason and seem to be so empathetic. Thanks for a job well done and story well written and I hope you won't forget abaout this.
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading and the lovely review, Needlepoint.
Reviewer: needlepoint Signed




Date: 15/11/17 03:46 am
Sqqqueeee! OMG! Girl, honey, lemme tell ya I've been missing you. I get that you aren't a Jarod fangirl and all that. What I don't get is how you still know exactly how Jarod is supposed to act and behave and frown. Girl have you been like studying Michael T Weiss or somethink? I mean... damnnnnnn it's like watching him when I read you. Did you get pointers when you met him? Or just watch him? I know you're naturally gifted and a wordsmith and all that but it's unnaturally wonderful the way you write him. You do that with all the characters.. fill them in and breathe life into him. I used to miss the tv show but now I just read you and it's just like watching. Millions of thanks and hugs honey. Post more soon?
Author's Response:
Well.
That was sudden.
I've never met Jarod's player. Paths crossed, yes, but it didn't occur to me to say anything to him or do anything. No, I don't watch or study people. I do appreciate the kind words, however. Thanks for reading and reviewing, Miss Parkere.





Date: 20/10/17 11:23 pm
Awesome. I love your writing and I hope you will continue. Honestly you should be writing novels. Your writing is so clear and so professional and so addicting. I need more. Thanks for sharing. It means so much.
Author's Response:
Thank you for reading and reviewing.
Reviewer: Gunner Signed




Date: 20/10/17 08:17 pm
Didn't log in this time but I remain blown away by your ability to bring the characters to life. This was, as everything you write is, amazing. You need to publish in novel format. I'd be the first to pre-order. More, please?
Reviewer: Chloe Anonymous




Date: 19/10/17 07:58 pm
Hello again Mirage. You continue to surprise me. While you're not a fan of Jarod's, you never seem to allow that to interfere with his characterization. I've noticed that many authors will write him according to how they feel about him. If someone hates him, he's always be either entirely evil or completely unintelligent and when an author loves him and wants to have sex with him, they always write him with unrealistic anatomy and I'll spare you the specifics ;) and he's always perfect. You definitely DON'T want to have sex with him. That's rare.
Despite your pessimism and wit you still write the characters realistically, as they are remembered from the series. Tantric sex? My my. I'm looking forward to reading all about that in the coming :) no puns ;) chapters. You're doing a fantastic job advancing the story plausibly as you always do. Nothing feels forced or rushed and you explained everything exceptionally well. I find Cate pleasant. You develop characters like no other author and it was a stroke of genius to have her reject the baby doll and embrace her childhood fully, casting off gender roles. I'm still hoping Jarod will help Parker manage the past pain and trauma, but please don't let that prevent you from continuing. If you're that opposed to Jarod helping her with the past trauma and you seem to be it's your work and that's your choice. I just remembered that the last time I mentioned Jarod helping her with the past pain you didn't update this story for a year. I have appreciated his involvement thus far and she did reveal much to him. If you're not comfortable with more I understand. I'm enjoying your fiction immensely and I trust you will continue.
Reviewer: Michael Anonymous




Date: 19/10/17 07:56 am
I'm eternally impressed with your talents Mirage. Will Jarod be sex coaching Parker in future chapters? I do hope so. I don't expect it in the next chapter...so don't worry or anything that we're all hungry for the hot stuff. I'll just go back and read Circles Of Hell and Nemesis...the chapter titled Lucidity that is the hottest sex scene eva! The transition has been done well and they are moving forward. Parker is stubborn and would want to ignore the trauma. I like that Jarod knew she wanted stress sex and I can see his doubts because she says sex and he says make love. Plus in chapter 2 of part 5 she said wrong when talking about them. Thanks for not just having them together and ingoring the past and them going on like this wouldn't be complicated. They were mean to each other so many times on the tv show and just being chased by her and the lies her father told her...all of that...it's just so complicated. You write them beautifully, so naturally. Why aren't you writing the novels? Booey all that. You are writing the official story as far as I'm concerned. Just please keep writing.
Author's Response:
Ah, that's odd. I don't exactly agree with the Muses (I rarely do). I appreciate the kind words. Thanks for reading and reviewing, Christoph.
Reviewer: Christoph Signed




Date: 19/10/17 05:18 am
I‘m so happy you‘re still writing! And that goes for all of your stories currently in progress:-)
This one though has me especially hooked...can’t wait for the next part.
please keep it up and thank you:-)
Reviewer: Sandra Anonymous [Report This]Date: 18/10/17 03:14 pm
This story is akin to riding a rollercoaster. Miss Parker and Jarod have so many repressed emotions. Both in regards to each other as well as others. I really applaud how you bring them to life!
It's not at all hard to believe that Jarod wouldn't consider himself an adult. He barely has a childhood much less an adolescence. I'm not sure MP did either. As I said they are two emotionalbasket cases.
Mirage, I cannot thank you enough for writing and updating. This as well as your other stories on this site. You keep 'The Pretender' alive for me. You breathe new life into Miss Parker and Jarod. I'm very grateful for that.
Author's Response:
Thank you for reading and for the lovely reviews, Twisted. I fear that I'm undeserving and that I will never meet the expectations.
Reviewer: twisted Anonymous [Report This]Date: 17/10/17 10:49 pm
I love where they are right now, that in-between place that isn't quite just friends but isn't yet lovers or something more serious. I'm glad they haven't had sex yet. You do a brilliant job of capturing those complexities while keeping the characters in character. This is Jarod the guy who was a gigolo that didn't sleep with his clients so no, he would want to be careful. He is in love with Parker and probably doesn't want to have sex with his parents down the hall.
I was reminded of the acupuncture episode of The Pretender and the episode where the guy on the beach asked Jarod to give Sydney and Parker hugs and the free-love guy who wanted to sleep with Parker. This chapter easily fills in the blanks from those episodes. "the body is a temple. I want to worship yours. If you'll let me" and we all know he will worship but they can take their time. Thanks for also writing the senstive subject matter with care and realistically. You tackled that professionally and intelligently. Too many authors act like it was no big deal. Just like men now are saying rape is no big deal. I don't know what the next chapter will bring, but I plan to read it. Thanks for writing and sharing your talent with us.
Reviewer: Jillian Signed




Date: 17/10/17 10:43 pm
Ok so wow. I bet you didn't know all this #metoo stuff would be trendy when you began writing this months ago did you? Weinstein, Pussy Grabber - in -chief...the reality tv celebrity, and all the hollywood elite men and how they are all sexual predators... so here we are. And I see what you've done here. So many people who aren't #meToo are saying women should have come forward earlier...but some of them might not remember being sexual abused or assaulted and people disassociate and repress and are in denial or don't understand or won't admit that what happened to them is a violation. Mirage this is everything to me and #meToo and because she is Miss Parker she wants to be stronger and already said she didn't like the way it made her feel in a previous chapter to have remembered being so frightened. Just...god... thank you. The writing is amazing and thought provoking and she is out of her depth here and I the way you wrote Jarod...oh my GOD! The entire time I'm visualizing Michael T Weiss in all his sweet Jarod-tabulous glory and really, with someone like Parker a man would need to be a sex coach , sex therapist, shrink, and body master lol they are perfectly in character and I love Cate..
Reviewer: TheDarkAngel Signed




Date: 17/10/17 07:21 pm
OK so Parker and Jarod are going to bed in this and have gone to bed in your latest update of who will guard the guards story... and they aren't going to have sex in either fic right away are they? due to circumstance? Right? That's just cruel. But I want more. Please update this. These two in bed 'just sleeping' in two different universes is too much for me. And Sydney is abducted in another fic and Parker is abducted in another. Please update all your fics to save my sanity.
Reviewer: TheDarkAngel Signed




Date: 05/08/17 07:46 pm
Wow. Consider me blown away. Thank you for this. Keep going please!
Reviewer: Julie Hughes Anonymous




Date: 04/04/17 03:41 pm