The chapter notes tehehee. A lot of minds go there in this fandom. It's so funny. Ok a woman that knows about welding, the uses, the products involved, the dangers. I think I'm in love. I can confirm a smoldering lawn as a consequence of arc cutting. My wife can too. You threw in another twist. Jarod assuring someone he will save someone and then narrating that contrarily Jarod's not doing anything because Jarod is dying. I would pay to read this. I think you need to know how good you are. I've read some of your review responses and chapter notes and you don't seem to get that you are a brilliant author. You are brilliant.

Your notes. So funny. Little Miss Parker torments so well. I like how the child scolds him for considering violence towards Rachel. Jarod arguing with his delusion is the most Jarod thing ever, calling her Nancy Drew. She returns his jabs calling him Einstein. I was happy to see Jarod take an iniative and handcuff Rachel to the bed so he could leave. Even though I know how this goes it's still able to cause me anxiety that Miss Parker is out there. That's because you write and you write possibly too well if that's possible.

Jarod getting down to the philosophy of salad on Miss Parker's behalf. Her words to the waitress tehehee. Crude but I can hear Miss Parker say that. They grow closer here, go back to the beginning again in a way and her calling him a drama queen is spot on. Miss Parker is imparting some wisdom based on experience am I right? The choice to leave the Centre or work with Jarod was never obvious so she awards that same understanding and mercy to others. Your ability to develop the characters into something that looks more functional is amazing.

The talk of possible conspiracy is always exciting. Immediately I like Kirkland. I like his saving Miss Parker from the office coffee. I like that he worries because he recognizes something in her, probably the hero in her after that fight with the abusive mother. He knows it pose problems. He's right in hindsight. You don't stray from the original series and the characters we know and love and what makes them them and the proof is in this chapter too and this conversation::

"It wasn't your decision to make Jarod."

"You're right.. it was your mother's."

I think Miss Parker reacted appropriately to Jarod's love declaration.

I read this in its entirely before reviewing and now skimming over this chapter again I'm going "ooohhhh." The flashdrive. Parker's absorption in the storm drain gutter. You had all the outlines in place and just needed to add color and shadowing... the art metaphor again if you don't mind. Brilliant. This is some elevated fiction writing.

I have to say it. I didn't foresee this twist Mirage. But it works. Jarod's brother and Miss Parker are uniquely and similarly broken.

Well written. Please tell me you aren't a young kid. Those songs are so youthful. You write intimate scenes brilliantly. I don't go in for that kind of thing but this is tastefully done.

Tehehee your mind woke you up with petuary? It's so funny that Jarod was inspired by Miss Parker's threats to up to terrorizing game with the baddie of the week. That's an episode I would like to see.

Unfinished business. I hope you will finish this. You're on a roll.

The comedic strokes emphasize the gravity sometimes as well as lend some much needed humor. The process seems like an art. If that's true you are Michelangelo.

Jarod is badly hurt. Miss Parker is confused. That is so far a constant picking up where the series left off. I appreciate your respect for the original series. It is the best.

Jarod and Miss Parker are so Jarod and Miss Parker when you write them. I love the following. So telling in their storyline and history.

"She asked. "What am I missing?" "Missing." Jarod repeated with a hearty chuckle. "Miss Parker," He laughed- laughed at her, the bastard, "you are not missing anything." He explained and then smugly clarified: "You know exactly what I want you to know."

"Nothing." She murmured.

"Very good." He nodded. Bastard. How dare he patronize me!

"Good?" She hissed. "How is that good?"

"Come, now, Miss Parker," Jarod admonished gently, "Nothing was enough for you back when it was all your father ever gave you. Nothing was more than enough, in fact. I've watched you cling to nothing, to absolutely nothing, for years. By now, you should be accustomed to it, accustomed to nothing." He fell silent for several moments, and then added, wistfully: "I suppose we should both be."

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The hi-tech elements and the explanation of the ruse were all brilliant as was Broots's communication with Jarod. The ending though, again... masterfully executed Mirage.

Jarod's nonsexual physical contact with Miss Parker was unexpectedly erotic.

Stunning chapter. Your chapter notes are hilarious by the way. It's refreshing and heartwarming to see Jarod carefully explain his disappearance and when his words failed the actions succeeded. It's telling. Again the closing words at the scene's ending are masterful. So profound. You leave me wanting more.

Whoa. This was an epic ride! I've completed this and am current with your updates and didn't know if I should review each chapter on its own merits or as a whole. I'm going to review each chapter. The read count won't hurt you and it seems to be the way it's done around here. Straight away I owe you an apology. When I first heard about a fanfic I had low expectations but you blew my mind with the stylistic features and descriptive work and a rawness that is sharp enough to cut bone. I read this and knew immediately you were revisiting the woman who arrested Jarod and was stoked. What a stroke of genius to show us how these people who had their lives changed forever by Jarod and Parker. I love that you love this show enough and that you know this show well enough to pay this homage to the minor characters and not just the major ones. This could easily be an episode of The Pretender. For me it IS an episode of The Pretender and that's the highest compliment I can give. I love this series! That final sentence cements your epiceness: "He hoped—and feared—it was."

More please. I love this and your writing style. They are so in character. Yes!!!