Characters: Jarod, Miss Parker
Classifications: Genres: Romance
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 3 Table of Contents
Completed:Yes
Word count: 3483
Read Count: 9753
Penname: Manoline [Contact]
Real name: Sarah
Real name: Sarah
Member Since: 22/09/06
Membership status: Administrator
Bio:
Membership status: Administrator
Bio:
Author: I write a little bit of everything really. Some angst, some comedy, some neither. Basically what I'm in the mood for. I haven't written all that much lately, but I do have a couple of stories planned...
Beta: I also do a bit of beta work and find it thoroughly enjoyable. So if you need a beta, just give me a poke and I'll see what I can do. (Strong points: characterization, plotting, rewording etc. Weaker points: grammar and other rule bound things. )
Reviewer: I try to review everything I read, because I really do believe communication is what makes this fandom not just shrivel up and die. Feedback is especially important in a fandom as small as ours. Not only is it important to encourage the authors, and one review really makes a lot of difference. As an extra boost for all you budding reviewers here, since it is such a small fandom you have a real chance of influencing the future plot of the story by making suggestions of what you'd like see happen (or if it's an already completed story: The writer's next story).
But it is a two way street. Like a reader has a responsibility to write a review, the author has a responsibility to reply.) If you don't, how is the reviewer supposed to know someone appreciate it, or even read it?
Reader: I will read (and enjoy) pretty much everything. From angst to comedy to all that is in between. I don't care who (or what, this is the Pretender after all...) you ship, if you're a fan of happy endings or not. If it's Pretender, I would probably love to read it, if I haven't already.
And no, I'm never brief .
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Summary: Some times the holidays we cherish the most as a child are the bleakest time of the year as a adult.
Categories: Post IOTH
Characters: Jarod, Miss Parker
Classifications: Genres: Romance
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 3 Table of Contents
Completed:Yes
Word count: 3483
Read Count: 9753
Characters: Jarod, Miss Parker
Classifications: Genres: Romance
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 3 Table of Contents
Completed:Yes
Word count: 3483
Read Count: 9753
[Report This] Published: 25/12/06 Updated: 07/01/07
Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2, Jarod's version
Date: 26/12/06
I like this story, it appeals to the shipper in me (she usually comes out around Christmas, so you're right on time). continue please
Author's Response: Being a shipper I just couldn\'t pass this one up. And I love your Christmas too.
Date: 26/12/06
Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 The Writers' Version
Author's Response: Thanks Manoline. I'm glad you liked it and I really appreiciate you letting me use you in the story. As for another Pretender Payback...well I don't know. But it would be fun. :) Reviewer: Manoline Signed
Date: 09/01/07
I might be a just a tiny bit bias, but I really liked the chapter. It's a long time since I've seen a tPfic about us writers. Though it's about time! (it's a nice way to keep 'em active) And I think you kept the writers pretty well ic. And that is difficult ;)
I can't help wondering...do we have the makings of another "Pretender Payback" on our hands?
Nice job, and I will be waiting for your next fic
Author's Response: Thanks Manoline. I'm glad you liked it and I really appreiciate you letting me use you in the story. As for another Pretender Payback...well I don't know. But it would be fun. :) Reviewer: Manoline Signed
Date: 09/01/07
Summary: Corporate Takeover gets a new meaning. The Centre is under attack by a rival corporation. What does this mean for Jarod and the others?
Categories: Post IOTH
Characters: All the characters
Classifications: Genres: Drama
Warnings: Warning: Character Death, Warning: Language
Series: None
Chapters: 19 Table of Contents
Completed:Yes
Word count: 58081
Read Count: 115064
Characters: All the characters
Classifications: Genres: Drama
Warnings: Warning: Character Death, Warning: Language
Series: None
Chapters: 19 Table of Contents
Completed:Yes
Word count: 58081
Read Count: 115064
[Report This] Published: 05/01/07 Updated: 06/01/07
Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19 - A New Beginning
Author's Response: Sequel is a WIP! Hopefully i will enough soon to warrant a quality first posting. Thank you so much about your feedback, I really wanted to accurately portray the characters as I felt they had been developed throughout the series. It means a lot to hear I was at least on the right path to accomplishing that! Thanks for reading and for the feedback! Reviewer: Manoline Signed
Date: 09/01/07
Wow! this was...wow.
First I would like to say that it was an incredibly thrilling story. I can see how much work you put into this and it certainly pays off. You have a very nice flow and I love how the characters reactions are so...human.
I would love a sequel ^^
Author's Response: Sequel is a WIP! Hopefully i will enough soon to warrant a quality first posting. Thank you so much about your feedback, I really wanted to accurately portray the characters as I felt they had been developed throughout the series. It means a lot to hear I was at least on the right path to accomplishing that! Thanks for reading and for the feedback! Reviewer: Manoline Signed
Date: 09/01/07
Summary:
Categories: World
Characters: Jarod, Miss Parker
Classifications: Genres: General
Warnings: None
Challenges: Drabble #61 World
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed:Yes
Word count: 303
Read Count: 2071
The world according to Jarod and Miss Parker.
Characters: Jarod, Miss Parker
Classifications: Genres: General
Warnings: None
Challenges: Drabble #61 World
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed:Yes
Word count: 303
Read Count: 2071
[Report This] Published: 09/01/07 Updated: 09/01/07
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Author's Response: Thank you for the kind words. Reviewer: Manoline Signed
Date: 10/01/07
Really well written, and in character. Overall loved it :)
Author's Response: Thank you for the kind words. Reviewer: Manoline Signed
Date: 10/01/07
Summary: jsut testing to see if it works...
Categories: Poetry
Characters: All the characters
Classifications: Genres: None
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 28 Table of Contents
Completed:No
Word count: 364
Read Count: 179295
Characters: All the characters
Classifications: Genres: None
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 28 Table of Contents
Completed:No
Word count: 364
Read Count: 179295
[Report This] Published: 19/01/07 Updated: 03/07/08
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Author's Response: Such insight, am so glad you picked up on the subtle nuances of the story. I strove long and hard to pick that quoted, trying to find the words to express all those things so succinctly.
The metaphor for Parker is correct, but I am afraid when i quoted it, i wasnt thinking about that legend U2 song,(shame on me)
Thanks soooo much for your words of encouragment, this has been a difficult fic to write (as i am sure you can imagine) and with such strong support, i will struggle thru to the next chapter.
Reviewer: Manoline Signed
Date: 21/01/07
I just love your intro; Just want to see if this works. It's such a good way to sum up the Pretender. Because, when you think about it, does anything ever really work?
Can't wait for the next update!
PS, the "hey, hey"-part in chapter two, that's from U2's "who's gonna ride your wild horses", and really a metaphor for miss Parker, right?
Author's Response: Such insight, am so glad you picked up on the subtle nuances of the story. I strove long and hard to pick that quoted, trying to find the words to express all those things so succinctly.
The metaphor for Parker is correct, but I am afraid when i quoted it, i wasnt thinking about that legend U2 song,(shame on me)
Thanks soooo much for your words of encouragment, this has been a difficult fic to write (as i am sure you can imagine) and with such strong support, i will struggle thru to the next chapter.
Reviewer: Manoline Signed
Date: 21/01/07
Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4
Author's Response: Manoline, i strive hard to reveal the truth, writing is a crucible after all and that you have reached that turning point and are reaxaminign things in your own life humbles me and I am deeply touched an honoured.
As for what 'it' is, I am unsure of that just yet, time might reveal the true nature of 'it' to me if I hold my course and remain faithful to the truth of the words.
Reviewer: Manoline Signed
Date: 23/01/07
Oh Jacs, you have truly outdone yourself with this one! I cannot see how my humble self can write a review worthy of such genius, but I shall do my best.
The genius is in the simplicity. By stating the obvious you have forced me to re-examine my life and my choices. It is not easy, it truly is not.
And I love how you have combined "is" and "not" into the popular abbreviation "isn't". Such a casual way of saying life is hard. Showing that the POV-character, while might be struggling, is hiding his true feelings from the world, doing his best to get by. I have interpreted this as Jarod’s point of view, though it could fit just about any character. My reasoning is that it perfectly shows Jarod's appreciation for pop culture and desire to fit in, abbreviating “is” and “not”.
And ending with a punctuation, indicating that there is indeed no happy ending. "It" simply (to use your words)"isn't" easy.
And what is “it”? A curiosity is awakened deep within my soul.
I will be left in deep contemplation until the next update which I am sure will be just as soul-tearing and beatiful.
Author's Response: Manoline, i strive hard to reveal the truth, writing is a crucible after all and that you have reached that turning point and are reaxaminign things in your own life humbles me and I am deeply touched an honoured.
As for what 'it' is, I am unsure of that just yet, time might reveal the true nature of 'it' to me if I hold my course and remain faithful to the truth of the words.
Reviewer: Manoline Signed
Date: 23/01/07
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Author's Response: Thanks so much for that. I just felt the need to reach out from my Ivory Tower, touch the real world, you know?
I am so glad you liked my blending of style, I am hoping it will elevate the fandom even more.
Reviewer: Manoline Signed
Date: 28/01/07
I'm intrigued, is this more of a performance piece now? Mixing with your fans and continuing the story as reviews?
(ps. Yay you, for fixing the author respond-thingie ^^ )
Author's Response: Thanks so much for that. I just felt the need to reach out from my Ivory Tower, touch the real world, you know?
I am so glad you liked my blending of style, I am hoping it will elevate the fandom even more.
Reviewer: Manoline Signed
Date: 28/01/07
Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6
Author's Response: Thanks Manolie. I fear you where prophetic with your prediction. Indeed it has all turned to you-know-what again as I am struggling with yet another update and more chapters soon to reveal that plot twist. Reviewer: Manoline Signed
Date: 03/02/07
Oh, Jacci! you're really taking this story to a whole new level. Now even your chapter notes are closely tied in with the plotline. " - symbol - "how bold of you to confess to the abnormaly high amount of metaphores in your work.
Author's Response: Thanks Manolie. I fear you where prophetic with your prediction. Indeed it has all turned to you-know-what again as I am struggling with yet another update and more chapters soon to reveal that plot twist. Reviewer: Manoline Signed
Date: 03/02/07
Title: Chapter 18: Puts ad in newspaper for all of eastern seaboard to see
Author's Response:
Date: 17/06/07
I feel this piece is really taking a turn for the contemporary. Including the "*" mostly known from IM'ing and chatting, while still spelling your words out sort of signefes Jarod to me. Taking the best of popular culture and then mix it with his own personal style, which is so often viewed as being his genius, his intelligence.
And the lack of period at the end...pure genious! It leaves an opening, a sort of "yes my children, there is more to come".
Author's Response:
I am so glad you like my mix of styles, keeps it fresh and vibrant
hee hee
Reviewer: Manoline Signed Date: 17/06/07
Title: Chapter 20: Time To Choose
Date: 23/06/07
When you say 'rethink her life' do you mean in terms of sexuality? 'Cause I am getting a definitve slash read between Miss Parker and this unknown girl
Reviewer: Manoline SignedDate: 23/06/07
Summary:
Categories: Post IOTH
Characters: Broots, Jarod, Jarod's Family, Lyle, Miss Parker, Mr Raines, Original Character, Other Centre Character, Sam, Sydney, The Clone
Classifications: Genres: Drama
Warnings: Warning: Violence
Series: None
Chapters: 15 Table of Contents
Completed:No
Word count: 68396
Read Count: 85983
Jarod's a prisoner of The Triumvirate. This is the sequel to Conflict Zero.
Characters: Broots, Jarod, Jarod's Family, Lyle, Miss Parker, Mr Raines, Original Character, Other Centre Character, Sam, Sydney, The Clone
Classifications: Genres: Drama
Warnings: Warning: Violence
Series: None
Chapters: 15 Table of Contents
Completed:No
Word count: 68396
Read Count: 85983
[Report This] Published: 24/01/07 Updated: 16/09/08
Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 4 - And So It Begins
Author's Response:
Date: 15/02/07
I know I'm not supposed to because he's the guy who tortures Jarod, and basically a sosiopath. But I really like the mean PTB-guy. It will be interesting to see where you take it from here...as it always is.
Author's Response:
Hey!
Glad you are enjoying him, although he is relatively ambigious at this stage in the game. I think he get's a name in the next chapter. Thanks again for the feedback! Always appreciated =)
Reviewer: Manoline SignedDate: 15/02/07
Title: Chapter 1: Prologue
Date: 24/01/07
loving it so far :)
Author's Response: thanks for the positive feedback.. i hope you'll enjoy what's coming!! it's going to be a LONG ride.. hehehe
Date: 24/01/07
Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 1: Gone But Not Forgotten
Author's Response: Nice to hear from you as always =). Thanks for the feedback on the characterization, it is the one thing I really do try to keep accurate. I'm also glad you liked the flashback, there will be more to come. Reviewer: Manoline Signed
Date: 27/01/07
Well, I'm hooked.
I really like this story so far. You are really good at portraying what is likely for people to say, think, feel and do in pressured situations, while staying completely in character.
And I loved how you explained the reason Jarod "moved", so to say, and how both he and Sydney reacted to that.
*bows at your pwness*
Author's Response: Nice to hear from you as always =). Thanks for the feedback on the characterization, it is the one thing I really do try to keep accurate. I'm also glad you liked the flashback, there will be more to come. Reviewer: Manoline Signed
Date: 27/01/07
Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 2 - Even in My Memories
Author's Response: I'm glad you thought that Parker was 'true to her character!".. i rewrote that part more times than i will admit to.. also glad to hear you are enjoying the flashback.. there are more to come!! Thanks for the feedback as always! Reviewer: Manoline Signed
Date: 29/01/07
I really like Lys' thoughts as she wakes up, everything is fine as long as she doesn't open her eyes. The way you describes Parker's reasoning for helping Jarod a very plausible one. And as you can imagine I really liked the "flashback", a very good way to explain why he seemingly didn't defy the Centre earlier.
Author's Response: I'm glad you thought that Parker was 'true to her character!".. i rewrote that part more times than i will admit to.. also glad to hear you are enjoying the flashback.. there are more to come!! Thanks for the feedback as always! Reviewer: Manoline Signed
Date: 29/01/07
Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 3 - My Brother
Date: 03/02/07
I really like your take on Emily, knocking some sense into the guys sounds like her thing to do. And I can't wait for the next chapter. (Let the torture begin! muhaha)
Author's Response: I'm glad you liked Em! She's the big sis i wish I was.. hehehe.. little bros are too damn annoying for that. Jarod's plight will soon be up. Hope you enjoy thank. Thanks as always!! :D
Date: 03/02/07
Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 6 - Worse than Isolation
Date: 03/03/07
That cell really creeps me out. Which is a huge compliment, means your writing is working. Can't wait to be further creeped out
Author's Response: hahahaha.. yay!! i creeped someone out!! My work is done here. Thanks so much for the fb Manoline. Next one will be up and out ASAP.
Date: 03/03/07
Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 7 - Nightmares
Author's Response:
Date: 11/03/07
Oh it just keeps getting worse doesn't it? Well I'm definitely beginning to understand why the Triumvirate is so feared. poor, poor Jarod *shudder*.
And like I told you last time, this is a compliment so...*shudder* Please continue
Author's Response:
hahaha.. worse and worse and worse! Thanks for the feedback, especially now I can respond without the help of my secretary.. not that Jacci will ever read this... lol.
Stick with it.. it can't be bad forever... or can it? ;)
Date: 11/03/07
Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 9 - Unlikely Allies
Author's Response:
Date: 13/04/07
Like that you're involving the Miss Parker & co story more again. And as always I really liked the flashback scene, one of the more plausible explanations as to why/how Miss Parker and Jarod were separated. And interesting twist with the old guy.
Can't wait for more :)
Author's Response:
I do apologizing for neglecting MP&Co.. they are going to become a more dominant force as time proceeds. Thanks for the review :P
and yes.. more 'old' guy to come.. we have big plans for him.. *hint*
Reviewer: Manoline SignedDate: 13/04/07
Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 10 - Of What to Come
Author's Response:
Date: 12/05/07
Well, aren't you a cleaver little writer? I would have never thought of the "people he helped"-thing. It's a great twist.
But I'm getting old-guy-in-the-cage-redraws. You're gonna write more about him, right?
Author's Response:
ooh much much much more... but that's all i am saying.
thanks, i'm glad you enjoyed the 'blackmail' thing! I was a tad worried it was maybe lacking in originality a tad.
more to come soon, promise =)
Reviewer: Manoline SignedDate: 12/05/07
Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 12 - A Deal with the Devil
Author's Response: Thanks Sarah.. i promise all shall be answered.. :) Reviewer: Manoline Signed
Date: 31/07/07
Oh intriguing
So many new questions added to the mix, will be looking forward to the answers
Author's Response: Thanks Sarah.. i promise all shall be answered.. :) Reviewer: Manoline Signed
Date: 31/07/07
Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 13 - Transitions
Author's Response:
Date: 16/02/08
Awesome new chapter
Oh creepy little old man, what are you up to? Wonder how many steps down the hallway they'll get before they're apprehended.
Good luck with your thesis!
Author's Response:
Thanks! I really really need it the way things are going. I will graduate in August.. i will graduate in August.. I will...
Time shall tell what is what with Visser, but in the mean time, thanks for el review!
Reviewer: Manoline Signed Date: 16/02/08
Summary:
Categories: Challenges
Characters: None
Classifications: Genres: Action/Adventure
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 8 Table of Contents
Completed:No
Word count: 31918
Read Count: 31257
Jarod is captured and returned to the Centre. Part of the Guess Who/Guess What Challenge
Characters: None
Classifications: Genres: Action/Adventure
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 8 Table of Contents
Completed:No
Word count: 31918
Read Count: 31257
[Report This] Published: 26/01/07 Updated: 07/08/07
Title: Chapter 1: Capture
Author's Response: You are such a superstar reviewer! Thanks so much as always, and will have the next chapter up ASAP!
Reviewer: Manoline Signed
Date: 27/01/07
Very intriguing. Can't wait for more :)
Author's Response: You are such a superstar reviewer! Thanks so much as always, and will have the next chapter up ASAP!
Reviewer: Manoline Signed
Date: 27/01/07
Title: Chapter 2: Homecoming
Author's Response: i always like to hear theories!! Although I think it's been talking about a little bit on the sim.. do share :D
Reviewer: Manoline Signed
Date: 08/02/07
Will be interesting to see why Jarod is acting so compliant, although I have an idea...
I have a feeling this will only get better and better :)
Author's Response: i always like to hear theories!! Although I think it's been talking about a little bit on the sim.. do share :D
Reviewer: Manoline Signed
Date: 08/02/07
Title: Chapter 3: Not as it Appears
Author's Response:
Date: 01/03/07
I like sort of say that how Timmy is still in there, Angelo just doesn't know how to get him out.
Keep up the good work :)
Author's Response:
Oh i'm glad you liked the Angelo bit, I wasn't quite sure if it was working or not. I'll try to post ASAP! Promise!! :D
Reviewer: Manoline Signed
Date: 01/03/07
Title: Chapter 4: Faltering
Author's Response:
Date: 11/03/07
What is wrong with Jarod? and why did it make him turn himself in? (or at least I have a feeling he turned himself in)
Me like :)
Author's Response:
Have to coherce me more than that to reveal all....
glad you are enjoying :D
- K
Reviewer: Manoline SignedDate: 11/03/07