Your plot seems jumbled, and thrown together. You're rushing things along, and half the time, it's hard to figure what's happening, or why character's are acting the way they are. On top of which, your characterizations are OC.
It's a great idea, but your execution needs lots of work.
Yeah, not one of my best.Reviewer: AcaciaJules Signed [Report This]
Date: 10/01/10 08:18 pm