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Title: An Irregular Gait

Wait! It's not true. I am reading it too! And I love it. Actually I have important work to do, but now I am reading and reviewing. It's all about priorities.

I am very grateful that people still write Pretender Fan-Fictions. And yours is great. It is well written and has a very good rhythm. The start of the story catched me immediately. There is a lot of blood, which I like. 

I love that Jarod, who in distress, doesn't react as "all-in-control-another-funny-comment" but shows some decent fear finally (something I missed in the original show, he was a little too perfect). 

You also manage to put some humor in, as Sydney and Broots  appear but yet you keep them in line with their character in the show. 

I also like your summing up comment in the end of the chapter or the paragraph like: "The soup looks good" or „There was so much blood“. So if you don’t mind, I am going to use the link you gave Lise to read on. 

 

It’s true what they say: Never stop looking. (you might find some treasures.) 

Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 25/10/21 08:32 am
Title: A Bigger Picture

Thank you so much for the update & continuing the story.I am enjoying it immensely!

I too enjoyed whenever J & Miss P were forced together for whatever reason so am very happy to be along for your self indulgent ride.

Another brilliant chapter, you really do capture J & Miss P incredibly well. Look forward to more 🙂

Reviewer: Lise Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/10/21 06:05 am
Title: One Stupid Mistake

Hi,

So happy to see something new for this legendary show & look forward to more from you.

Love the premise & feel you have captured the characters really well. Hooked & can't wait for more.

Well done



Author's Response:

Hi Lise, thanks so much! I've decided not to continue uploading to this site, since you seem to be the only one reading and enjoying lol. If you would like to read the rest, check out chapters 4 & 5 over on ao3: https://archiveofourown.org/works/33571864/chapters/84460450 I'm working on part 3 of the series now! :)

Reviewer: Lise Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 06/10/21 05:56 am
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