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Title: Chapter 16

I will bribe your muse for more of this young lady. Please write more and share with us.

Reviewer: Shay Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02/10/21 01:52 am
Title: Chapter 16

Ooh yahy! They have feelings for each other anyway after all this time. Will be seeing more from Lyle? He's got a long way to go to start getting better. He's not someone you'd think of as being suicidal and that's what makes this all the more intriguing. Some criminals do want death by cop when they know they can't get away with their crimes. I can't wait to see what you and these characters do next. More please? I feel so much gratitude to you for still being here and hope you will be here to usher in the 100th anniversary of TP too!



Author's Response:

Hi, Renee, yes, we're going to be seeing more Lyle, Sydney, & gang. I don't know if I can agree that Lyle seems less inclined to be suicidal. I apologize for not feeling up to expounding at the moment and cutting this response short.. Perhaps another time. I intend to complete this and all of my scribblings. Thank you for reading and reviewing, Renee.

Reviewer: Renee Collins Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 24/09/21 11:13 pm
Title: Chapter 16

I'm on the edge of my seat and so excited to read more. You know these characters. You know where to put them. Impressive work as always. Thank you for sharing your talents with us.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading, Melinda, and for the rather generous review.

Reviewer: Melinda Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 24/09/21 04:39 am
Title: Chapter 16

Top notch mate!

Post more soon please.

Cheers!



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading and reviewing, Jeremy.

Reviewer: Jeremy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 24/09/21 01:48 am
Title: Chapter 16

Bravo!

You really know how to keep the pages turning. All of your strengths as an author and story teller are on masterful display here, and you don't waste a single word. It's gutwrenching, intricately woven, poignant and there's a certain savagery and crispness as well that demands to be heard. You write these characters as I remember them and create your own believable characters, you plot briliantly, transition seamlessly, and the dialogue is exquisite. I patiently await the next update.

Until next time.

Ciao!



Author's Response:

Dude, are you sure it was my scribbling that you read? If it was: thank you for reading and for the entirely-too-generous review.

 

Reviewer: Michael Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 24/09/21 01:25 am
Title: Chapter 16

Oooooohhh. My heart.

Ohh Mirage. Mirage Mirage Mirage!

You're twisting the knife.

Not to mention I have to wait for the update. I was so enjoying bingereading.

You stay healthy too! Keep wearing your mask. Get the vaccine if you haven't already. Get a flu shot too. Social distance. Update this story. Update all of your stories please.



Author's Response:

That's me. The knife twister.

I intend to update them all.

Thank you for reading and reviewing-- and for the stay-well wishes.

Reviewer: Angela Penn Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23/09/21 04:50 am
Title: Chapter 15

Oooh so you went there and you went all the way.

I love you for that.

Reviewer: Angela Penn Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23/09/21 04:46 am
Title: Chapter 14

Oooh. That took a turn that I didn't see coming at all.

It explains everything too. 

I think I just heard like 20 missing pieces fall in place. We don't know anything about Lyle's childhood between being taken from Catherine just after birth and framing his fake dad for murder when he was in high school. This makes sense, really terrible sense but it does.

Your writing is addictive. Anyone ever tell you that before?

Reviewer: Angela Penn Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23/09/21 04:42 am
Title: Chapter 13

Ok, so much to break apart and examine. The hospital opening scenes. Gold. Mirage my God how do you do this? Then you transition to the stairs. Parker seems not to want to go up at all. Maybe it's just my interpretation. *jumps up and down* The weekend. Wow the weekend.  So they have only had oral sex with each other? Uhhmm. I've got so many thoughts. Then you transition us again to waiting area and Michele. I love that Parker has a family like thing going on there. Michele loves her. Nicholas loves her.

I think Jarod loves her.

I'll click next now.

Reviewer: Angela Penn Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23/09/21 04:37 am
Title: Chapter 12

Tight story all the way. This chapter is really tight. You start revealing everything and let it unfold naturally. That requires some talent and you seem to filled with talent.

Reviewer: Angela Penn Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23/09/21 04:32 am
Title: Chapter 11

Finally. I knew it had to happen. Just like on the show the tension lessens and they work together. For a little while at least. They had a weekend though. I want to know more.

Reviewer: Angela Penn Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23/09/21 04:26 am
Title: Chapter 10

Tehehee. Jarod ruined all of Lyle's fun. I love their rivalry. Brilliant brilliant writing Mirage.

Reviewer: Angela Penn Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23/09/21 04:21 am
Title: Chapter 9

Mirage Mirage Mirage. I think you've created the most disturbed character in the history of characters. I'm completely intrigued.

Reviewer: Angela Penn Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23/09/21 04:17 am
Title: Chapter 8

I don't know how you do it at all. You somehow put the right amounts of humor, darkness, adventure, tension, action, all the elements you little chemist you.  Too much of any of those could spoil the story you're telling. You always blow me away.  Case in point. Lyle hitting Jarod and then cheering is hilarious. He's never bested Jarod this way. Lyle is a child sometimes, like the Jarod, Parker, Angelo. They are children who didn't properly grow up. You demonstrate that exquisitely.

Reviewer: Angela Penn Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 23/09/21 04:15 am
Title: Chapter 7

Oh dear god not leaches. 

Leaches?

I've never read anything like this before. You go all-in with your torture. Remind me to never piss you off.

Reviewer: Angela Penn Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23/09/21 04:10 am
Title: Chapter 6

Sydney and Parker both warned the Centre about severing the emotional umbilical. This is exactly what I'd expect Jarod to do. He's always been crazy. He's good crazy part of the time and a hellion the rest of the time. I so enjoy reading you Mirage. I've missed this.

Reviewer: Angela Penn Signed [Report This]
Date: 23/09/21 04:07 am
Title: Chapter 5

*picking my jaw off the floor*

Your writing is.. I don't know how to describe it, only that I feel like I'm watching instead of reading. You paint with words and you can paint some really horrific things. You rule!

Reviewer: Angela Penn Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23/09/21 04:04 am
Title: Chapter 4

Oo. OMG. Jarod just put a gun in Lyle's throat? That is AWESOME!

Reviewer: Angela Penn Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23/09/21 03:56 am
Title: Chapter 3

Holy wows. *APPLAUSE*

The tension is real and you nail it perfectly.

These two are absolute bad asses with each other.

Hold up, a weekend? A weekend?

I got to read faster.

 

Reviewer: Angela Penn Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23/09/21 03:48 am
Title: Chapter 2

Oo. ? It wasn't Jarod? I'm glad it wasn't. Now I'm even more afraid for Sydney though. The way you write mental illness is for real though.

Reviewer: Angela Penn Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23/09/21 02:57 am
Title: Chapter 1

I have been away too long. This is frightening and wonderful. I'm hooked.

Reviewer: Angela Penn Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23/09/21 02:47 am
Title: Chapter 16

This is exquisite Mirage as always. You always leave me wanting more. Will they give it more try now? Parker could confront the past and have a life with Jarod. I think the training and aversion nottherapy can be overcome with some time and understanding. Even without an possible romance for the two I love this story for what is and I'm forever grateful that you keep the series alive for us.



Author's Response:

Oh, we'll see if they give it another go. Thanks for reading and reviewing, Contessa.

Reviewer: Contessa Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 22/09/21 04:13 am
Title: Chapter 16

This is beatiful and intelligently written and I hope you will continue. I hope Jarod and Miss Parker will tell each other how they feel and try one more time. Either way this is brilliant. Thank you for sharing with us.



Author's Response:

We shall see. Thanks for reading and reviewing, Xena.

Reviewer: Xena Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 21/09/21 04:49 am
Title: Chapter 16

Your writing style is still the best, it's so perfect. Steve and Craig should hire you and I know you don't like it when people say that, but... nevermind this way you can write what you want and have complete creative control. This is better. You keep The Pretender alive for me and just always blow my freaking mind. I need more!! Comeon!

Reviewer: Monica_Bitch Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 21/09/21 03:52 am
Title: Chapter 16

Mind=Blown.

More, please?

Reviewer: Kelli Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 21/09/21 01:56 am
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