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Title: Chapter 28

I cannot even right now. I'm laughing.  I'm crying... I'm craughing Mirage!! You ...just gave them a happy ending damn you and it's the best I've ever read. You really write the soul, heart, and mind if The Pretender. This time you even included the keepers of the flame.. Catherine, Margaret, and also Thomas. I think that Jarod and Miss Parker's unfinished business is the business of these ghosts, they are invested parties. You even included Parker's home that we know so well and that place has character.

You also had Jarod say he's already home while gazing into Parker's eyes...a nid to Jarod telling her that Thomas said it was her eyes..that her eyes felt like home. 

LOVE Jarod's teary confession..so good to see him cry with love for her. I love how Parker is so true to character intimately going over and getting close to thank Jarod ..and that she was really thanking him for giving her for Debbie.

I love the way Jarid cautions her and pulls open his coat, how he says she isn't going to want him bleeding all over the diary, and the entire scene. I love that when she is distraught he averts his eyes out of respect..a d maybe because he can't go to her ... because he thinks it's about him, that she hates him, so he tries not to stare cos he knows that staring will make her angry.

Jarod calls it right in Parker's reluctance to hold on. and reach out...but this time she confesses too and ...omfg I can't even.. she never wanted him to be collateral damage in wars she fought with herself...she apologies without saying the word in ways that only Miss Parker can convey and is so sincere and...omg. 😭 They hug!!! They hug too!! and she clasps him tight and savors his scent....

You are all about the scent aren't you??! wrong tho.

.."laughter filtered in from outside filling lonely rooms with infinite possibilities" ...that is gold, it's fire, it's everything. How are you not writing the Pretender novels ??? and actually .. you know what? This is better. I love every part of this ..omg I'm so weepy. Thank you thank you thank you thank you thank you thank you πŸ™β˜ΊοΈβ˜ΊοΈ This is my new favorite ending πŸ˜ŠπŸ’•...as far as lighter fics go. Forces of nature will always be my favorite dark fic. Congrats Mirage. Thank you again for continuing to share your gifts with me.

Reviewer: The Miss Parker Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 01/06/23 04:57 pm
Title: Chapter 28

Hey hey, 🀗 Oh, you ended this in a way I couldn't have imagined, and it is more of a continuation of their relationship and lives than any ending. Firstly tho, the ghosts. I wouldn't have ever imagined that either and the comedic touches were perfect, too. You gave us romance which wasn't expected and tears, and oh God I loved Jarods tearful confession of love, that he rejects existing in a world without her. You gave us loads of action as well as supernatural scifi. Oh, and Thomas's reaction to Parker's comment had me laughing so hard. For a sec I thought Parker could hear the trio and I'm glad she didn't. I love her reluctance to let Jarod inside, that final internal conflict before the war ends, and that he averts his eyes for her comfort. You really have a handle on the characters and again I'm so impressed by your talent. This has been a pleasure to absorb and watch as much to read, as your writing always places me there with the characters. Congratulations too on another completed story, and thank you for not letting the dream die. Please never stop writing and sharing.

Reviewer: Melinda Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 01/06/23 07:10 am
Title: Chapter 1

Pssss i have a little whisper reminder for you 

UPDATE THIS!!

Please?



Author's Response:

Done. Thanks, Monica_Bitch.

Reviewer: Monica_Bitch Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18/05/23 02:47 pm
Title: Chapter 27

I'd love to read more!

Reviewer: Leslie Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 04/02/23 04:47 pm
Title: Chapter 1

I hope you'll update this soon.



Author's Response:

Done. Thanks, Melinda.



Author's Response:

Done. Thanks, Melinda.

Reviewer: Melinda Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 03/07/22 05:26 pm
Title: Chapter 1

Oh, by god! Please write faster. This is amazing.You have a steely grasp of the characters that makes the reader feel a part of the scene, and the dialogue never disappoints.



Author's Response:

Thanks, Miss Shannon, for reading and reviewing.

Reviewer: Miss Shannon Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 12/03/22 02:46 am
Title: Chapter 27

Love the writing and the art. Can u make art of Jared and Parker in each other's arms and in bed together?! It's ok to manipulative the images. u should. keep writing. I live it. love it

Reviewer: jaime Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 10/03/22 11:52 pm
Title: Chapter 27

I hope you're doing ok? How are you? I'm not just using you for your fanfic. I care about you. You're fandomly as you always say. I like to check in, see that you're all good.

I love how you make Jarod collide with the consequences of his actions. He thinks Parker believes she's beyond reproach. He's the one with the god complex. I forget he's an asshole sometimes. You never fail to remind me. Lol. I love it. More, please?

Reviewer: Lacy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 10/03/22 03:28 am
Title: Chapter 27

Hey. Fan art! Awesome work. I don't remember seeing Jarod looking like that during the bar encounter in Wake Up. Was it in the beginning or near the middle or the end of their encounter? I'm looking at my video now. Found it. You had to stop the player quickly to catch that one expression. He was just about to stand up and leave. Excellent catching that look on his face. And excellent writing skills too. Parker just told him a few chapters ago not to drink again. He should have listened to her. I eagerly wait for more.

Reviewer: Kyle McLane Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 10/03/22 12:26 am
Title: Chapter 26

This is a hell of a chapter. So much revealed. So much resolved. Still some strings to pull together. You do this brilliantly.

Reviewer: Kyle McLane Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 10/03/22 12:20 am
Title: Chapter 25

Nail meet head. Parker is dead right about Alex's need for validating leading him to murder his family. Many truths were told but some were told by Alex too. Nothing is more uncomfortable than finding yourself agreeing with the homicidal sociopath. Parker wanted her father's validation and was willing to imprison Jarod for it. Jarod has kept secrets and still has Catherine's diary doesn't he? You're revealing the human side of them all. I love it.

Reviewer: Kyle McLane Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 10/03/22 12:16 am
Title: Chapter 24

I met one fan who can't watch or read anything with Jarod being a dentist or in any medical field so this is a good practice. Empathy is in short supply so it's nice to see it here. Jarod in full surgeon mode is difficult to read. You do it well.

Reviewer: Kyle McLane Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 10/03/22 12:05 am
Title: Chapter 23

Broots wanting to know where Parker has been and her reply

"You wouldn't believe me if I told you." Tehehee. Pretender perfect.

So Jarod was going to pull a Ricky Ricardo but got cut short.

Action packed and powerful.

Reviewer: Kyle McLane Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 09/03/22 11:54 pm
Title: Chapter 22

Thank you for that clarification. There's a reason you must clarify. I understand. This is another beautiful chapter, a power struggle. I think Jarod understands better now why she almost propositioned him for sex. This drives home the earlier points. Magnificentally done.

Reviewer: Kyle McLane Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 09/03/22 11:49 pm
Title: Chapter 21

This chapter definitely contains sexual content. This fandom enjoys details but some of us are faint hearted Mirage so I appreciate how you use anatomically correct professional terminology and not all the slang I've seen some people use. The slang some people use doesn't really make sense anyway especially for the male genitals. A farm animal? A private detective? A football? Baseball? Golf ball? Tennis ball? And the female genitals? A cat? A bird? And for bottoms there is donkey? I don't understand. Or the way that shades of gray lady wrote down there. Down where? Down in Florida? Australia? The feet? The big toe? Knees? A lot of the body is down below the waist. It's nice to have specifics. I couldn't tell if she was talking about anal sex or vaginal or toe fetishes. Thank you for the classy specifics. Life is already confusing enough.

Reviewer: Kyle McLane Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 09/03/22 11:46 pm
Title: Chapter 20

The tension builds again. I think they need to dissolve it. I think it's too hard to work together with that tension lingering there.

Reviewer: Kyle McLane Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 09/03/22 11:38 pm
Title: Chapter 19

Rope placement. Only Jarod would do that. I agree. This chapter thrusts us into the dark again. It's the Centre. It's expected. It's still horrific and dark. I think Parker identifies with the child and I think she's really scared and tormented. I've never seen writing like this, the darkness you reveal, the word choice. You don't take prisoners. Nor should you. It's really bold and powerful. Tense. It's really tense and uncomfortable, and that's what people should feel because that's what victims feel and how else do you make them understand without making them feel that way in this time of no empathy where people care more about affording to fuel up gas guzzling SUVS than chidlren being blown to bits? You have to make people feel what victims feel. I think Jarod would agree. Parker calls him a prick because she's afraid. The rest of this is all so stunning Mirage.

 

"Charming," he purred. "I may very well be a prick, but I have worked in hospitals and prisons; I'm familiar with standards of care and protocol. You have absolutely no experience whatsoever with manic or aggressive patients or violent-"

"My mother was manic-depressive," Parker brusquely interrupted, effectively silencing Jarod. It was entirely possible that she'd logged more hours with a manic individual than he had and she'd gained the experience prior to her twelfth birthday."

You nailed it. Nailed it.

"And you've blamed yourself for that, all of your life, haven't you," he said, impassioned and grim, his dark eyes moist and piercing. "Just as you blame yourself for this, but it's not your fault now and it wasn't your fault when you were a child. It's not your fault. Stop torturing yourself," he pleaded.

"Don't ever talk that way to me again," hissed an incensed Parker. "

That is fear. She is terrified. I think she can't help but to sometimes conflate him with bad men. Most of the men in her life are bad men. She's really defensive and reacts exactly the way we expect her to.

"You're not touching this girl, Jarod. I don't give a damn about the CIA's deadlines- they're the ones who funded the Pretender project in the first place and now they're scrambling like little bitches to cover their asses."

The truthbomb Mirage. I bow to you.

"And I don't care about the deals you've made with your friends Brandt and Malone either. You are not going to restrain and further traumatize this child to accommodate the government's god damned timeline. She, apparently, doesn't like men, and right now, Jarod, I'm not finding it difficult at all to understand why."

There it is again.  We know Parker will defend a child. Debbie. Davy. She doesn't like kids I don't think but she won't stand by and let anyone hurt them either. She'll fight to the death, fight even Jarod. 

I wasn't expecting you to dissolve the tension the way you did. Parker had been distracting Jarod that entire time to allow the girl to prove whether or not she was dangerous. She could have been putting herself in danger. That girl could have began strangling Parker. Parker was willing to take the chance that Jarod might have to save her just to prove a point. You know these characters well. Thank you for writing. I can't say it enough.

 

Reviewer: Kyle McLane Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 09/03/22 11:33 pm
Title: Chapter 18

"The Triumvirate has jumped out of bed with us."

"Oh," said Sydney lightly.

"Mhm and they took our pensions with them."

Teheheee.

We know that Angelo is more capable than Sydney said, so I love that inside joke for the fans. None of them suspected Jarod. He's suppose to be grieving but we know that he's already all grieved out. The banter begins, and the tension. You capture it perfectly.

Reviewer: Kyle McLane Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 09/03/22 11:19 pm
Title: Chapter 17

I'm glad your arm is better. Any definitive dianosis? Nothing serious I hope. I'm trying to think who else said "life goes on" besides mr. parker.

It's another solid chapter and I'm still excited about reading.

Reviewer: Kyle McLane Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 09/03/22 11:13 pm
Title: Chapter 16

I love the varied tastes in music inside that car. Etta James. Merle Haggard. Nice. You flesh them out with personal tastes. It's really humanizing. You've said in other places on this webiste that music is a uniter, healer, and liberator. I'm glad you believe that. I think it's really great. Luck does run out. The pages keep flying.

Reviewer: Kyle McLane Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 09/03/22 11:10 pm
Title: Chapter 15

This one is all heart Mirage. You tell on yourself with the softer side. Parker does exactly what Sydney did for her. Jarod thought she was gone. But she didn't leave. She closed the door. She quietly took Jarod's hand and held it. It's what Sydney did. That gesture of comfort is what she always remembered. This is beautiful. Moving. I'm a little emotional. Thank you for writing.

Reviewer: Kyle McLane Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 09/03/22 11:06 pm
Title: Chapter 14

I felt the breath leave from my lungs for a minute at that chapter ending knowing that Jarod knows his mom is dead. 

Brandt is an admirable man. In a world where so few cops are good and too many are corrupt you have to create your own. You did an oustanding job. Hat is off to you.

Reviewer: Kyle McLane Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 09/03/22 10:56 pm
Title: Chapter 13

Jarod having to come to terms with mistakes he's made is really refreshing and different. He usually doesn't make a mistake. If he does it's usually mended quickly. Now he sees that Parker is wounded in ways he had never imagined  and that's the only reason she had another moment of weakness and almost invited him to bed. It's plausible. The timeline matches up. It would make all of this all the more tragic. You're an amazing talent.

Reviewer: Kyle McLane Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 09/03/22 10:45 pm
Title: Chapter 12

Something strange happens to me when I read you. I forget I'm reading and believe I'm watching an episode. I've seen many portrayals of Sydney but yours is the most Sydney-like. Did you spend hours studying the characers? Do you spend days writing each little scene? Did you sell your soul? This is amazing work.

Love the end notes too. Did you get some hate mail from conservatives? You know you're a good human when you offend conservatives. Keep it up.

Reviewer: Kyle McLane Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 09/03/22 10:10 pm
Title: Chapter 11

Jarod's "I'm not old" tehehee. Men only say that when they know they're old. I like to see Ethan coming to his sister's defense. Jarod's terrified and that's why he's being so ugly right now. You did an excellent job of conveying reasons and justifications. You made it to chapter 11 without gettting bogged down in the details and without losing my interest. You're one of the few authors who can do that.

Reviewer: Kyle McLane Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 09/03/22 10:05 pm
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