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Title: Chapter 1 - 01/10/1999

I'm always suspicious of the quality of a story that supports itself on some passages from an episode or two. I've seen some writers who think that transcribing a bit of dialogue here and there, and writing some extra scenes is enough. It isn't. And this story is a good example of how the original material can be used as a starting point and then developed.

Jarod and Thomas relationship was well explored. I appreciated the way that Thomas acted as a sort of involuntary anchor between Jarod and Miss Parker and Jarod forced himself into great lengths to turn away. It was a good story about friendship and sacrifice.

Another thing I enjoyed was the sequencing of the scenes and the dialogues (monologues included). If we didn't know, we could almost mistake the original stuff from the fake. In a manner of speaking.


The question of language was a moot issue, in my opinion. I'm not an English native either, but I've read fics written by some who are and their grammar and syntax, not to mention spelling, was apalling. Fortunately, that doesn't happen with most of them.



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for your kind words, Joel. When I wrote this ff I really wanted to think about what might have happened "behind the scenes". We don't know how J met Thomas, and we don't know what he saw in this great man that made him say: Ok, he's the one for MP. I wanted to explore that moment of their lives, focusing on Jarod and Tommy, by using their POVs. The only conversation we heard during the show let us understand they WERE friends, because Jarod called him 'buddy'. That's where I've started from. A nice relationship that you described so well in your comments. Thank you, really. You made my day!

Reviewer: Joel Gomes Signed [Report This]
Date: 17/09/13 09:50 pm
Title: Chapter 1 - 01/10/1999

Aww <3 Lurve you, too. :)

This is one of my favorite stories- so nice to see into Jarod and Tommy and Miss P and Tommy's relationships. :)

Although I still wish it was AU and he didn't die. :p



Author's Response:

Thanks Dani, you're sweet! I know you were wishing for a happy ending, but I'm afraid that my being a hopeless MPJ shipper got in the way. I love Tommy, but I could never give Parker a future not featuring Jarod, not even if it was AU ;) Luv ya, thanks for the edits!

Reviewer: Danielle SmileyFace Signed [Report This]
Date: 06/09/13 07:13 am
Title: Chapter 1 - 01/10/1999

Well done. I love the exploration into the friendship (something the creators denied us), you did a good job detailing the foundation, providing us with some history. This is definitely one way it could've gone down.

And I completely agree with you: Thomas IS a great guy; of all the things Jarod has ever done, his putting Tommy and Parker in each other's path was my favorite.

 



Author's Response:

Thank you so much Mirage! I must say I was really glad to read your review, it was such a pleasure! Yep, I love that little detail the creators put inside the show. Maybe they thought it would go unnoticed, I don't know. I just think it was the sweetest thing J ever did for Parker...And then all I had to do was to write down the idea I had... Thanks for reading! Hope my English was acceptable ;) 

Reviewer: Mirage Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 15/04/13 11:18 pm
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