I read this in its entirely before reviewing and now skimming over this chapter again I'm going "ooohhhh." The flashdrive. Parker's absorption in the storm drain gutter. You had all the outlines in place and just needed to add color and shadowing... the art metaphor again if you don't mind. Brilliant. This is some elevated fiction writing.
Reviewer: Kyle McLane Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 11/06/19 01:40 am
'limo hand crushing scene? lol. I'm sure Jarod didn't hurt her but I totally pulled up IOTH to watch that part and he's totally feeling it lol. So she slipped him a flash drive and I like that plausible and totally cool idea! Rachel is kind of a bitch in this chapter. Grrrah! Jarod is giving Miss Parker hell probably he's falling for her. lol. Guys are weird like that sometimes.
Reviewer: Lacy Signed [Report This]Date: 02/05/19 04:44 am
Excellent update Mirage. AS always! You are the reason I still call myself a fan of TP, you are the reason I still read anything Pretender..your fanfic is more like fiction than fanfic. Woman you are the best. I'm glad you're still here but I know you could be on the best seller's list...and maybe you are and just haven't told us??? The way you wrote Tess is incredible Mirage. Just amazing. What a vivid picture you painted of that family's life and the glum atmosphere Tess is now in without the door open. :( Brilliant insights. It's just like being there. I'm so in love with your writing, your voice. You are a genius. You're the only one who writes Jarod and Miss Parker the way they are on the show. Keep going please.
Reviewer: Con-O Signed [Report This]Date: 06/04/16 06:51 pm
RE your author's notes, and I quote "hand-crushing scene" ?? Mirage I'm sure that Jarod wasn't crushing Miss Parker's hand.... But I guess I could see how you'd reach the conclusion. But I guess he was pleading with her and maybe was pressing her hand hard in his. I guess that's the same thing as crushing. It sounds so much worse the way you say it. Brutal truth teller that you are, your way with words is aweispiring. I still believe that you REALLY don't like Jarod. It's amazing how much you don't like Jarod. It's kind of disturbing how much you don't like him. Most women love him. I'm just putting this out there. Over all this is a completely solid chapter, well rounded. Damn but Jarod is mean sometimes. He has been cruel to her in the past and so again I can see how you'd write him in any specific way. You are one of the few fearless authors. You aren't afraid to round him out and flesh him out, showing the darkness and the light, letting the evil out to play as you've said in the past. You do have a tendency to lean towards the darker side of Jarod. Your most riveting work shows Jarod as his absolute worst, the bottom of the spectrum really. I read your other responses to other reviews and see that you haven't met him, and I guess I'm relieved. I was wondering if you'd had a bad experience with either him or just actors in general and especially when you do things like this "famous" people, as if "famous" is a bad thing. But then again you've had some acting experience and you are empathetic, or you say you are anyway. Oh, I don't know. Maybe you're just misunderstood and I'm overanalyzing. You're fantastic and mysterious. It's intriguing. I wait impatiently for more from you. I wish you would write a honest, serious bio, maybe post a memoir. You're hard to figure out. Know that this means I get more and more curious each day.
Reviewer: Michael Anonymous [Report This]Date: 05/04/16 07:19 pm
Sorry for not longing in. I just consumed this fic and I love it. Your writing style is amazing and in short you are everything I've heard you are on twitter. Magic. In a word. Just please please keep doing what you're doing. You've raised the bar so high Mirage. This isn't fanfic. This is fiction. Amazingly well written fiction that blows me away.
Reviewer: Miss Parker Anonymous [Report This]Date: 02/04/16 07:18 pm
Mirage, Mirage, Mirage. I love this. "The banners and ribbons, however, had already been replaced—as a matter of course. Small town priorities."
The way you introduce us to new places and people. Genius. Always original and that can't be easy in a fandom as old as this one. More, please.
[Report This]Date: 01/04/16 12:20 am
Oh, Mirage. So much goodness here. I have a watched tons of The Profiler and I can hear Rachel saying that about Miss Parker. Funguses living in shit and dark is like something Rachel would say. I love how you show Parker cares for Jarod even if she is angry with him. She's going to watch his back. I like that. He can be mean. You remind me of that and then I watch the show again and I'm like 'yep Mirage is right. Jarod CAN be an asshole' lmao. I hate hate hate that Jarod and Rachel are having sex and within Parker's listening range. That is cold. That is LIFE. So touching the way Parker connects with Tess and shares that one thing in common. Keep keeping it real. You do it perfectly. More soon please?
Reviewer: Contessa Signed [Report This]Date: 31/03/16 12:29 am
Merci! Want more. Please. Soon.
Reviewer: Mlle Parker Anonymous [Report This]Date: 30/03/16 01:40 am
Fact check lol. I'm laughing through my tears. You don't have to worry about facts but that is so cool. But what's more. The way you describe people..Tess, her dad. He's disturbed and just in despair and I can tell by his worrsome, almost defeated it seems "please don't let her out" and Tess. Just crazy amazing Mirage. You bring people alive, to life. They stand up on the page and in Tess's case toddle around and whack the windows and look cute and eager. Her reasoning is the reasoing of child. But her realiazation that people go away and don't come back sometimes no matter how hard we cry for them...that broke my heart wide open. I am still crying.
I sobbed Mirage!! SOBBED! Where does that kind of pain come from that you feel so deeply that you turn around and translate it so vividly to me? Or is that too personal? You've had loss and I think it pours out of you when you're least expecting. I think it makes you write. I don't know what I'm writing. I'm not even sure you realize what you've done to me. Keep doing it. The laughter and tears you bring me are wonderful. I've been saying it for five years. Magic. What you do is magic. Can't give it anything but an all star rating hon.
Reviewer: Chloe Signed [Report This]Date: 30/03/16 01:20 am
Brilliant Mirage. Like a crime show inside my favorite show. Jarod is so cop py with his mirrored glasses and the way he goads Parker is just too damn funny but totally in keeping with his personality. Matured but still a pain in the ass. I love your writing voice and style. You are the reason I read anything that has anything to do with the Pretender. You and you alone. Stay brilliant! Give us more soon.
Reviewer: Lorraina Signed [Report This]Date: 29/03/16 09:53 pm
"At least it's free" you must be kidding! I would pay to read you! I've never said that about a fanfic author before. Your work isn't like fanfic. This is perfect Mirage! LOVE love love that Parker gave Jarod a flash drive and I know you are going to tell us what's on it right? Soon I hope. Lot of things going on here with the communication and implied language between Jarod and Parker. He's got some issues and you know them well and have them outlined concisely. He really can't be alone. WOW. I love Tess, your characters and descriptive work. Just blows me away every time I read you. I really love that Parker is sticking around only to watch Jarod's back. Wonderful. I love your writing style. You really know these characters. I'm kinda glad you aren't writing with Craig and Steve. I like your writing so much more.
Author's Response:
You are being kind. This chapter, like its writer, is far from perfect. You know I will eventually tell you what Jarod discovered from the drive. The dysfunctional duo seem to communicate even when they aren't speaking. Thank you for the generous review. It's okay if you want to be honest, however. Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Reviewer: Gunner Signed [Report This]Date: 28/03/16 05:42 am
More please? This is so fantastic! You have complete command of language and these characters...you are an amazing author and storyteller.
Author's Response:
The remainder is coming along quite nicely. I hope to post it soon. Thanks for reading and reviewing, Anna.
Reviewer: Anna Anonymous [Report This]Date: 27/03/16 07:08 pm
