Mirage this is amazing writing. The plot and seeing Jarod manipulating and Parker secretive is hard for me. You thread it together so well. Please let Miss Parker and Jarod find some happiness.
Reviewer: MlleParker Signed
[Report This]Date: 08/02/13 12:18 am
Yay! You're back! I hope you feel better. I swear you are becoming more like Steveb and Craig every chapter. More questions than answers. But a very nice albeit LONG chapter and I am oh, so grateful that you are still writing. You are the only author of substance on this site.
I keep hoping that at some point it will get happier but that is not what the title promises us and so I am resigned to the sadness. Thank you for taking the time to update this and all your stories ['SweetDreams'!! please!!].
Reviewer: twisted Anonymous [Report This]Date: 02/02/13 10:21 pm
Intense! This is very well written. I can't wait to read the next chapter.
Reviewer: Joe Anonymous [Report This]Date: 02/02/13 09:00 pm
I love it! It seems there might be a chance for Parker and Jarod to work it out. They've grown as a couple and seem to be confronting the past. Oh Mirage and I love the love scene from when she was younger.. was so sweet and amazing. You have a great writing style and I saw no typos. Please update soon!
Reviewer: Miss Parker Anonymous [Report This]Date: 02/02/13 06:36 pm
Awesome. Loved the amazing writing...great interactions, dialogue and Jarod...he's bad. I was shocked you wrote them losing their virginity to each other!!! FINALLY! I gotta say it was the most realistic deflowering scene..very realistic and you can bet his "crimson stained fingers" on that..poor Mirage, I bet you cringed the entire time..proby typed with one hand over your eyes bahaha. More. Keep going. Hurry.
Reviewer: TheDarkAngel Signed
[Report This]Date: 02/02/13 05:38 am
That was an awesome update. Please finish this soon! I'm on the edge of my seat here . . .
Reviewer: KSPretenderFan Signed [Report This]Date: 01/02/13 03:47 pm
Thsnk you for your creativity and ability to take us into the emotional fencing between Parker and Jarod. Extremely well done. I look forward to your next chapter- with trepedation!
Reviewer: nightowl Anonymous [Report This]Date: 26/01/13 10:31 pm
there has to be more!
This was so unbelievably good, I could barely stand it!
Never have I been so completley on Parker's side as I am usually a Jarod-girl, all the way and think that he deserves better than Parker treats him, and now you have managed to turn that all on its head! Damn you! You are clearly evil!
Author's Response:
Thanks you for reading and for all the lovely reviews, Mitress Jacci. There will be more, though, I truly fear the remainder won't come close to meeting anyone's expectatations and if you think I'm evil now- mm, that doesn't bode well. Maybe it won't be too bad. Thanks again.
Reviewer: jacci Signed [Report This]Date: 10/12/12 05:58 am
That was an intense chapter and i am so glad someone has finally addressed some of the choices Catherine made. How could Parker not be pissed about it?
Reviewer: jacci Signed [Report This]Date: 10/12/12 01:02 am
This is just heartbreaking! I don't want to read any more (she says as she rushes thru this review to get to the next chapter).
I totally love the idea of Jarod self-destructing, as i have always believed that is ineveiatable given his past, and you do it so beautifully here.
Reviewer: jacci Signed [Report This]
Date: 10/12/12 12:36 am
Damn you Mirage, you have made me cry so hard now i can barely read the words!
This is such a wonderful find, I am just so glad i found it, and it has been so damn good!
Reviewer: jacci Signed [Report This]Date: 10/12/12 12:24 am
Just when i think it can't get any worse! OMG, my heart was in my mouth the whole time in this chapter. I want to shake Jarod for being such a bloody-minded fool, and part of me doesn't blame him at all. So much damage there that you can never truly get over.
Almost too scared to read the next chapter, yet am totally compelled at the same time.
This is masterful story telling!
Reviewer: jacci Signed [Report This]Date: 10/12/12 12:07 am
Christ on a cracker, this is just so good!
That chapter was just brutal, and i am balling my eyes out. I love how you have turned this around. Usually i am all sympathetic towards jarod, all he has lost and suffered, and now it is parker who i feel that way about. I love this unique and original take on the whole story and although this feels so 'real', i want it to all work out and half of me believes that it never can, never could!
Reviewer: jacci Signed [Report This]
Date: 09/12/12 11:59 pm
This just gets worse and worse, or is that better and better? I can't tell. Loving that it is worse, but want it to get better! I am so torn as to how i want this all to turn out, and almost afraid to push on, and eager at the same time. this is the most fascinating and compelling read i have had in ... forever!
Reviewer: jacci Signed [Report This]Date: 09/12/12 11:24 pm
This is so good that i can barely stand it! Work has been pushed back and now i want to finish this all in one gulp. Just when i think things are getting on track, you turn it all on its head. It is just so easy for me to see this playing out the way you have described it, so totally credible and as far from sappy as you can get .
Reviewer: jacci Signed [Report This]Date: 09/12/12 11:18 pm
I have to say this and i havent even finished this chapter yet!
OMG!!!! There are just no words to say how incredibly good this is. I totally love the left turn this took, so totally unexpected and just brilliant!. It has been a VERY long time since i have read anything, and now i cant believe i have denied myself this wonderful story for so long. Arghhh i have to leave for work and there is no more time!! Can't barely wait to read more.
It is SUCH a pleasure to see this side of 'happily ever after', and so beautifully written as well. Love the pace of it, all the details but without bogging down in narrative. Just perfect! Been a long time since i have been excited about the Pretender and this has just stoked up that interest again in the most amazing way. Going to quickly finish chappie now and be a few mins late for work!! You are evil LMAO!
Reviewer: jacci Signed [Report This]
Date: 09/12/12 10:55 pm
Best thing I've ever read. Good stories are so sparce these days sadly so I'm glad I found this! More please?
Reviewer: Jada Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 09/12/12 12:22 am
Mirage, Mirage, Mirage. Where do I start? The beginning. It's funny that you were so reluctant to write and have been your worst and cruelest critic. I've chuckled and worried while watching you belittle yourself and your muse and your writing. You can stop doing that now.
You succeeded in carving out a niche for yourself and it's a metaphor I think for the person behind the pen name. You do justice to the characters, their dialog and you have a real knack for setting the scene and "weaving the tangled web." It's safe to say you have mastered the art of 'telling the tale' with your twisted ingenuity and intense 'take no prisoners' approach. You're not afraid of the dark or pain or tears.
As for grammar, I saw no errors, nothing unrealistic, no inconsistencies or those outrageous leaps of logic Jarod makes during the series/telefilms. He's more human (I'm still bowled over by his joining the priesthood) and struggling to hold on to this perfect ideal of what family is supposed to be because he's never had that.
I felt Miss Parker was going to say yes but doubted you'd go there because of how opposed to the pairing you are. I'm proud that you let the muse lead. Over all, I think this story is brilliant! I find it entertaining, heartfelt, heart stopping, traumatic, tragic and extremly intense. It's drama. It's life, and you write it well.
In closing, I'd like to plead with you to continue the J/P incest fic, to go somewhere you haven't gone before. I know you're not comfortable with the genre...let that motivate you to write the story.
Thanks for sharing! <3
Author's Response:
Hi, Imogen, and thank you. Mm, I'm still appalled that Jarod is a priest (and a rapist, etc) and like you, I was certain Parker would say no; I thought she would almost get married to please Astra, come to her senses during the ceremony and then the past (that you will all learn more about soon) would unfold and Jarod would better understand her reasons for walking away but that didn't happen at all. I was going to take the easy exit, the well beaten path. I wish I had because now Jarod will drag the truth out of her while they are married; this fic is going to get a little darker.
Reviewer: Imogen Anonymous [Report This]Date: 08/12/12 07:17 pm
I don't see my review for this chapter but I want you to know it was splendid as all your fics are. It was rich on content and emotion and the writing was superb. Thanks for sharing.
Reviewer: Imogen Anonymous [Report This]Date: 08/12/12 04:57 pm
You were NOT kidding around when you said twisted tale of despair and hell. I love it, my dear. More than anything I've ever read (except Kiss of Death which IMHO is your best work). You've certainly lived up to expectations, delivered what you promised. I got no complaints, lady girl. This is exactly what I'd expect if Jarod and Parker coupled up.
Speaking of disaster, Astra is a pain in the everlovin' ass tehehe... guess it runs in the family (her dad, her granddad). I'm surprised Parker hasn't strangled the little hellion already.
Now about the wedding... Jarod deserved to be left at the altar IMHO and I was wondering if you were feeling ill (in the head) but then BOOM, the vasectomy, oh Mirage, that made it so worth it! Your way of getting me back for that comment about busting Jarod's balls I presume? Well played, luv.
I love the distraction and your wiriting is as alway exquisite. Do continue please; I'm waiting with 'bated breath' to see how it ends. Please tell me you're not going to attempt to happy up this thing, not after what Jarod did to her. I trust you won't disappoint, you haven't so far. Thanks for not forgetting us.
Author's Response:
Fear not, O, dark one: you've seen Jarod at his all time happiest. It's all going to go spiraling into a great bloody abyss of despair from here. I wish the rest of the readers wanted darkness; darkness I can do. Thanks of course for the r&r.
Reviewer: TheDarkAngel Signed [Report This]Date: 08/12/12 06:40 am
Well this might be the most depressing chapter. Lies, secrets, avoidance; great start to a marriage! I think it might have been better that she had left him at the alter. She clearly still has issues with his behavior. Although why more so with their White Cloud encounter than the one at her house I have no idea. I think it is very sad that she lied about not being able to have children. That is selfish! Kudos to Jarod for not leaving her then and there. Although in 'reality' going by your timeline it would be fairly impossible for her to have them (assuming she and Jarod were mid thirties on Carthis, 10 years on mid forties, Astra is 7ish which makes them in their fifties). Still it just seems like she picked the path of least resistance and both she, Jarod and Astra all deserve better! As always I appreciate that you continue with your stories! I really do love your writing style. PLEASE continue with the S&M one! :-)
Author's Response:
I know, twisted. It would have been better for me if she had left him but darn it, she didn't. No, I don't think she has more issues with one encounter any more than the other- well, that might not be entirely accurate considering what's coming. I think there is some guilt because she was married to Robert at White Cloud and said no but then sort of gave up and it was that guilt that has caused so much turmoil and confusion; things can get a bit twisted in a victim's mind and that is clearly what has happened. As for the fertility and timeline: I estimated Parker to be early twenties during the series; she looked young, still believed in "daddy" when the truth was right there in front of her and that strikes me as the post college years (20-24). So basically, what we have here in this story now are characters who are almost the same age as the actors are in real life and the muse may or may not be taking liberties; I find it all really weird but the muse wants she wants.
Reviewer: twisted Anonymous [Report This]Date: 08/12/12 05:29 am
Wow I'm blown away girl. You are a amazing writer...amazing. I'm glad that MP has people who love her and want to help her. What Jarod did isn't something she can forget about. I've read many stories where he raped her.. his actions were ignored... MP goes on as if nothing bad had happened when it was 100% rape, no "blurring lines" as you call it. I know those other stories are different plots but rape is still rape and no one deserves to be raped. You always emphasize that rape is rape and wrong is wrong and that real problems arise from that crime and I love you for it! You've shown us that she does have issues resulting from his actions and you make it believable, and that can't be easy for you. Thanks for sharing your talent with us, Mirage! LOL @ your response to my review. I did laugh about the Zoe thing. Sure you want to be like Zoe...sure....whatever you say, Miss Mirage.
Author's Response:
Hi, and thanks for reading and reviewing, Miss Parker. Right, well, I obviously am not going to ignore Jarod's actions and it's quite impossible for Parker to pretend forever that nothing happened; closets fill up eventually; it's safe to say the door on Parker's closet is very close to popping off its hinges. Yeah, she definitely does have some problems, any woman would have some problems. Um, no it's not fun at all to visit this topic actually and I didn't want to but the muse did and now that I'm here, I feel I should be true to the circumstances (keep it as realistic as possible) and not concern myself with my comfort zone (which I believed I sped through sixteen chapters ago). Cross your fingers for me.
Reviewer: Miss Parker Anonymous [Report This]Date: 08/12/12 04:58 am
Mirage Oh my god!!! <3 :) This is best story ever!! You made my day with the update and then I read the story and the day is even better. I'm shocked and happy. I love that everyone is in character, that you gave us some insights into all the character's minds, the dialouge is what I'd expect from the show. I was always into the drama and Mirage you delivered!! Your plots are always so full of character and content and very complex. Please don't ever stop writing or I'll have nothing to read. :(
Author's Response:
Thanks, Christoph.
Reviewer: Christoph Signed [Report This]Date: 08/12/12 03:02 am
You have me guessing! Will she or won't she? With Parker and these circumstanes I would think not - but you as the writer anything could happen. I enjoy the flow of the story and I'm so curious as to its ending. Please take your time and do it your way. You have great imagination and write the Pretender well. I hope not to wait so long before responding for now on, but real life has once again floored me.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing, nightowl. And thanks too for the reminder to do it my way (the muse's way, of course— she's rather temperamental) as I have defied the muse (and the ending I'd planned) to appease readers in the past (In Pieces. And I'm still not satisfied with that fic).
You're very kind, and you have the better imagination; I can only aspire to write as well as you (*hint).
Please don't apologize; it took me nearly a month to climb out from under real life to update this thing. I understand completely.
Reviewer: nightowl Anonymous [Report This]Date: 20/11/12 12:25 am
Splendid writing, Mirage. I realize you're not a Jarod and Parker shipper but I enjoy the dialogue and your writing style. Honestly, whatever facilitates your writing is fine by me. I'd like to add that the previous chapter was simply delicious. You must write more and soon as I'm going nuts waiting.
Author's Response:
Well, hello, Miss Bitch (nice.), and thank you for your forebearance and your bravery to read me despite my favoring Thomas to Jarod (it's Thomas' eyes and smile really). I'm glad you can appreciate some elements of the fic, even if you hate the plot or certain scenees (I don't particularly care for the actual story). No need to go nuts; I'll continue to write.
Reviewer: Miss Bitch Anonymous [Report This]Date: 13/11/12 05:26 am
