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Title: The Leak

Oh oh wohhhoo! I'm typing with one hand and holding my mouth with the other. Mercy woman. It's hot in here ..... Clever of you to have a leak and a leak. Doctor Jarod OMG...so I'm totally freaking out now.

Reviewer: Lorraina Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 22/11/14 02:17 am
Title: Falling

OMG Broots is so funny! Time of death... lol. The interrogatee and interrogator scene is terrific. I mean seriously who even bothers trying to write so well anymore. Agent Burke is hilarious! So was the tattoo shop guy. You create the best original characters I've ever read Mirage. This already is better than the Rebith and Saving Luke so if you're wondering what I think now you know. Nick is her brother. Oh man!

Reviewer: Lorraina Signed [Report This]
Date: 22/11/14 02:08 am
Title: Bait

Ooh ooh I love Jarod's rage and MP's 'just can't miss Letterman". It's like reading a crime thriller with our Jarod as the main character in places. Brilliant Mirage.

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Date: 22/11/14 02:04 am
Title: And Then One Day

lol. You were typing up one thing and then you were typing this because you didn't fight the muse! I can see Jarod's disgust, and hear the fear in his voice when Sydney tells him that MP was injured. My God! Girl! You were born to be an author honey and now you are MY all time favorite author. Woohee! Agent Jarod Spence. You were thinking of deleting this? How many more stories have you deleted that we never saw? Don't delete anything. We Pretender fans are tough. We already waited 12 years for a 3rd movie. Bring. IT. ON Mirage.



Author's Response:

Um, great. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing, Lorraina. I'm glad you're liking this. There are many unread stories, many I almost posted. I can change the names and places and basically submit them anywhere so it's not a complete waste of typing (it is, however, a misuse of the Muse, but what she doesn't know..)

Reviewer: Lorraina Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 22/11/14 01:50 am
Title: And Then One Day

This made me cry with joy!! Mirage you've written it beautifully. This for me is the ending of The Pretender saga. It satisifed me so much! Thank you for the asnwers, the insights and the closure I longed for over a decade. I see you have other stories and I will read them too. Thank you!!



Author's Response:

Thank you, Jane, for reading and reviewing. I'm sorry? This wasn't supposed to make anyone cry. My writing isn't that good? Or is it that bad? Haha. A few of the others are fit to be read, but I'd skip Circles of Hell and Forces of Nature if I were you. And Sweet Dreams. On second thought, you might want to stop with this fic. Thanks again.

Reviewer: Jane Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 24/07/14 09:31 pm
Title: Reckoning

Hi I just got done reading your story it was very very good.



Author's Response:

Thank you so much, Katescats.

Reviewer: Katescats Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 20/12/13 03:43 am
Title: Alibis

I get tingly ...if that is the word when Jarod is the doctor and Mlle Parker is the injured..you do awesome at keeping the suspence up and the reader intrigued



Author's Response:

Thanks, MlleParker.

 

Reviewer: MlleParker Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 14/08/13 11:24 pm
Title: And Then One Day

4 is great too. Parker is so kick@ss and tough..and she has to be now. This twist in the chase is so fresh of a plot and you do write it so well Mirage. The characters have evolved but are still the same only better somehow as the other reviewer said this could be the third movie!

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Date: 14/08/13 11:12 pm
Title: Falling

Your writing style has always been so good. I love that Miss Parker dates the wealthy men and angers Jarod and Jarod would pretend to let Nick knock him out. and Nick is Miss Parker's brother in this..I love that he tries to take care of her.

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Date: 14/08/13 11:06 pm
Title: Bait

Your chapters were longer when you wrote this..=) that's a good thing! I have this downloaded and I read it all the last three days and made some notes I will be sharing. I will have to It's soooo wonderful to see Jarod put through the same ordeal as Miss Parker had to go through when she chased him. Lots of cleverness here. It was so nice to see Parker deliever a baby and I could fee the tension in Jarod. Oh Mirage.. I love the way you write.

Reviewer: MlleParker Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 14/08/13 11:03 pm
Title: And Then One Day

I'm just reading this and already am addicted. What happened to Parker? I hope she'll come through.

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Date: 06/07/13 09:17 pm
Title: Reckoning

I just reread the whole thing and I once again enjoyed it! I got very frustrated with Jarod at times, but I think that'a part of the charme of your stories! At first I thought she might have had a child with this Patrick guy, but the marriage to Lyle was a real twist! Even though you gave us that scene were she had to sign the licsense. Overall great, thank you!



Author's Response:

Thank you so much, Leonie1988. I'm really glad you liked it. You've very kind.

Reviewer: Leonie1988 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 26/12/12 12:05 pm
Title: And Then One Day

Mirage, first chapter is amazing. Parker on the run and Jarod chasing and Jarod is actually good and I hope he will stay so. I can't wait to see Parker and see how this story will go.

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Date: 06/11/12 06:43 am
Title: Apprehension

A bit angsty and drawn out in some of the earlier chapters but once the story got going it improved a great deal.  Enjoyed this.



Author's Response:

*Nods* Mhm, angst indeed, and that's precisely why it's (appropriately) labeled as such. *winks* Admittedly, I'm not persnickety about fanfic; I only skim for typos, etc. (things that are not a matter of opinion, unlike "drawn out", which happens often in fanfic) and then I toss the fic into a wok and stir until al dente, haha. It's fantastic that you enjoyed it.

In response to your earlier review: I've had some requests for a sequel; however, the story told itself and ended.

Reviewer: BlueRose Signed [Report This]
Date: 24/07/11 01:39 pm
Title: Reckoning

You write Miss P so strong, she's hurting but she overcomes the past and pain but what can she do but live? Her dream and the way he woke her was beautiful and the theme that life goes on is a wonderful way to bring all the loose ends together and move forward. Jarod and Miss P remain a part of each other, they are playful and have some hope and as long as their is hope, their is life for them. This is good as it gets...I enjoyed every word. Keep sharing as I look forward reading your stories.



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading and for the lovely reviews, Jules. It's great that you enjoyed every word and I will absolutely share if I ever have time to write.

Reviewer: jules Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 19/07/11 09:36 pm
Title: Parameters

My computer is giving me headaches but lol, this was great. Like that Nick found his sister in much the same way she found him with Olivia. I think it was wise of Jarod to set parameters for Miss P concerning the investigation but like that she went up angrily and they had sex anyway but I agree with Miss P about Alex and it turns out that she was right about his MO. So glad that Michael didn't rape Miss P and it looks like she might end up with Jarod.

Reviewer: jules Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 19/07/11 09:22 pm
Title: And Then One Day

I liked it, would be interested in more if you ever write it

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Date: 17/07/11 05:35 am
Title: Reckoning

How the hell did I miss the update? Well Mirage what can I say that hasn't already been said? The way she was lying there trying not to cry was so sad..I could see that in my mind as I read and I could imagine her actually doing that. Dark Jarod became sweeter but still dark-ish and very deceptive so I am pleased that he didn't get tototally soft, lol. So I've watched too many MTW movies, lol, whatever but he's better when he's darker. I'm pleased that he killed Tanaka and made Michael the patsy. Great ending too that he'd answer to anything she calls him after all the times he corrected her in story to not call him Spence or Agent but Jarod, lol. I love what you did there. Not many stories can keep up the pace and intrigue throughout but yours did in every chapter. Sad that it's over but Devil's Advocate is shaping up to be dark so I have that, lol. Keep sharing! waves.



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading and all of the lovely reviews, Dark one. Jarod will always have some amount of darkness and deception, the guy has kept Catherine's diary how many years? Oh, MW movies are so dark & it's always a "Larry" isn't it? I can't say he's better but MW is much more convincing as bad arse than he is as "good" guy. Oh, absolutely I will continue sharing (when it's not beach weather, haha).

Reviewer: The Dark Angel Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 16/07/11 02:40 am
Title: Apprehension

Darn comp is still crashing. Great details and characterizations..but it's you and you always do those things pretender perfect. I like how you write the relationship inperfect with them arguing but real..and ebil...guns, cuffs and point pumps indeed lol.. Rarely does my attention remain glued for an entire story but you are talented. there are never typos in YOUR story!!!



Author's Response:

Ooh, Jules, thanks for that. I do so like being ebil and face it: Most relationships are imperfect to some extent. Wrong. There ARE typos in all of my fics, but no one's perfect. *winks* Thanks again for all of the awesome reviews, and good luck with your PC.

Reviewer: Jules Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 10/07/11 04:49 am
Title: Lucidity

had to read this one twice wow Mirage! "Torn between desire and duty, Jarod once again stood on a line that once crossed would be forever crossed" and then some epic sex, my friend! DOn't you want to change your mind about coauthoring a fic? First, I like how Sydney was with Parker, gentle and so Sydneyish, second, the Jarod - Parker fight, you like them figthing, and third the way she swallowed and nearly choked on her pride and Jarod's warning and he was right in front of her! Very good.

Reviewer: jules Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 08/07/11 10:52 am
Title: Hope on the Horizon

A coming to terms with himself is what Jarod needed and you nailed his behavior, the way he tries to help others but never sees his own flaws. I hope he'll correct things and they can move forward. Soo happy to see that Parker is still herself, strong, willed, capable, I think you are gradually steering them where I hope they will go. Great chapter ending.

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Date: 08/07/11 10:45 am
Title: And The Truth Shall Set You Free

Paroxyms? Had to look that one up lol. You do well moving the story along, something I, as a writer, have difficulty doing and shut up, your characters are fine. I know you say you struggle with them but it doesn't show in your writing. The real struggle is the hooking up of Jarod and Parker...it doesn't happen soon enough for me but after years of hurting each other, I guess it wouldn't be easy if I were to think realisticly about it. Nice of you to point out how Jarod used Catherine to advance his arguments with Parker so true. I like what Jarod told her about love being unconditional and not contigent and her thank you was not syrupy at all.

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Date: 08/07/11 10:40 am
Title: Body of Evidence

Lyle is like a cat that plays with it's meal, a mouse, for hours on end. Sometimes he eats it, sometimes leaves it to die but it's like years of torture for the mouse. Olivia is wonderful, you create some brilliant original characters in your equally original stories. I can't tell you enough how I like the idea that Jaord's voice was there with Parker and kept her alive and fighting. And too, I liked when Parker impersonated an Agent and bribed the fat cop with donus lol, are all cops are fat in your stories? Want to know the secret she has!

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Date: 08/07/11 10:32 am
Title: Captive Hearts

Janeane is a trip with her weird sexual lifestyle, lol, funny phone conversation too. It was a nice comedy relief where needed and before the darkness that came during Jarod's watching of some horrible treatment that Parker survived. Very vivid detail, amazing writing. So Parker is aware of her feelings for Jarod and of Jarod's feelings for her so that's a good sign but will they ever stop bickering?

Reviewer: jules Anonymous starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 08/07/11 10:24 am
Title: Constraints

My comp has been acting up but now have it hopefully fixed. I have much reading to do. THat was a hell of a kiss! Jarod takes a stand and leaves Parker standing there! Evil cliffy, my friend. Yuk, I hope Michael Patrick didn't rape her. Lovely phrasing and what typos lol?

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Date: 08/07/11 10:14 am
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