Title: Chapter 1: Déjà Vu

Hello Miss Parker,

 

Thank you for your review. This is my first serious writing so I still have a lot to learn, especially how to make it easy to read.  I hope you enjoy the rest.

 

Kind regards, Annet

Reviewer: Annet Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 03/07/15 02:56 pm
Title: Chapter 1: Déjà Vu

This is good. There are some errors but not so many that it interfered with the story. The previous reviewer meant that the errors made your story too hard to read. The reader shouldn't have to struggle. I didn't struggle that much. Some authors are so bad I had to abandone their stories. I like this. It took a while to read and the paragraphs are still in large chunks but your story is good. Congratulations!!!

Reviewer: The Miss Parker Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/07/15 02:39 am
Title: Chapter 1: Déjà Vu

Hi,

 

Sorry, i don´t really check this site any more. What (acoording to you) facts don't add up? I've read the transcripts of the series episodes and the two films and used that in the chapters. And I really don't mind any remarks (positive or not) but keep in mind (as posted) that english isn't my first language so words like cumbersome or dwindles don't mean much to me.

 

Best regards, Annet

Reviewer: Annet Signed [Report This]
Date: 27/03/12 11:06 am
Title: Chapter 1: Déjà Vu

A lot of the 'facts' from the series are really way off. Maybe recapping some of this information is just a little to cumbersome to the story. The effort to read it through just dwindles with too much inaccuracy. A good effort though to the author.

Reviewer: electricq Anonymous half-star [Report This]
Date: 05/01/10 03:08 am
Title: Chapter 1: Déjà Vu

The first chapter was good and it seems to be like it's going to be a good story. There is one thing though. You have to break up the paragraphs from the dialogue because it's really hard to read when it's all togehter. Next day in the woods and Meanwhile in the woods are both examples how it's harder to read because it's so cramped together.

Author's Response:

Hello Anonymous,

Thank you for the constructive critism. This was my first serious writting so I can do with a few pointers. I'll try to review everything and see if I can make some changes so it reads easier. Thank you for the compliment that you think it has potential.

Reviewer: Ann Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 05/11/08 01:31 am


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