no way!!!! you haven't lost anyone yet :o)
the story is great and even progressing. can't wait to read more of this one :o)
peace!
Reviewer: Jazzy Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 13/01/08 07:57 am
Oh my God!! I really like this piece of work! That's really and you really respect the characters' feelings and actions. It could have been a part of the show... I'm impressed and waiting for more!!!!
Reviewer: Faith Parker Anonymous [Report This]Date: 13/01/08 05:32 am
I love seeing you run with this story! This chapter was much different than I expected, but I was happily surprised.
The name game was right on. And best of all you know how I like my Miss Parker written, well done. ;-)
Cute line about the big boys too.
More soon. Please. I am thinking of a short story myself, just from reading yours! See that's why you should write to motivate some of us that don't write!
[Report This]Date: 03/01/08 05:38 pm
Terrific, I didn't expect to get to a computer for another week, but they have these cafe's all over the resort, and I'm just getting ready to hit the slopes thought I'd read and review in case I hit a tree!
I really loved the back and forth between MP/J. You did a good job with what they argued about and how they argued. I can just see Jarod being guilty after forgetting Parker in bed. By the way - that woman can really hold her water! ;-)
I was happy to see this, and hope that you may surprise me by the next chapter real soon. Providing I don't meet up with any trees before that.
[Report This]Date: 29/12/07 09:02 am
I loved the arguement, because that is how I see those two sparing. I think that is also how Jarod would react when he did something and tried to cover it, first with not revealing all to her, and the second time by enjoying himself and forgetting her.
I think this chapter is the best in that you took a moment and really dug into it with your insights of the two main characters.
Now of course I'm very interested in seeing what happens next. Is Parker softening will she become part of the unit? OR you will throw the first punch!
Nicely done, looking forward to more of course.
[Report This]Date: 29/12/07 08:56 am
Keep up with the good work! i have a feeleing this is going to be great story.
Peace!
Reviewer: Jazzy Anonymous [Report This]Date: 26/12/07 01:48 am
Hi there! Really good start. I can't wait to read more, so keep it up. :o)
Reviewer: Twingirl10 Anonymous [Report This]Date: 23/12/07 11:55 pm
First: THANK YOU for getting the next chapter up!
I enjoyed the dialog, you keep Parker's spirit alive with it. I have to say it will be nice to get Parker out of the sick bed and back up and fighting.
You are doing a good job with this. You know I'll be asking for more.
Date: 23/12/07 08:51 pm
Nice addition to the first chapter. It's an interesting story, I really think I prefer it (so far) to the episode that aired on TV.
Keep going I think you can pull this off! I'm betting on it. ;o)
Date: 23/12/07 08:46 pm
I loved this idea. That episode always bothered me. My question is--now what happens?
I will be watching for the answer. Good idea, good writing.
[Report This]Date: 22/12/07 12:54 pm
Very interesting twist to Donoterase, will be interesting to see where you take this *waits for next chapter to magically appear :P *
Reviewer: Manoline Signed [Report This]Date: 21/12/07 10:52 am
the writing is GREAT! the story is very interesting and seems really promising. keep up with the good work :o)
can't wait to read more of this one :o)
peace!
Reviewer: Jazzy Anonymous [Report This]Date: 19/12/07 02:05 am
AT LAST! Terrific finally seeing this coming together. Hopefully the next chapter will be along soon--this is a great idea, and well done.
Reviewer: Bucky Anonymous [Report This]Date: 18/12/07 10:23 pm
