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Title: Chapter 3

Oh, so sad. Poor Miss Parker. "You don't have what I need for pain." But Jarod's words were great. "You're not expendable"- oh, nightowl, you make him so-- so like-able. Why do you do that? haha.

I love how well they communicate and compromise even if she is still moody and snippy. And it's great to see her well taken care for a change.

This is how that episode should have played out (Instead of him leaving her there to the vultures). This is what really happened and in my mind, will always be what happened. You got it right, and the writers- well, they had it all wrong.

Reviewer: Mirage Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 01/06/11 03:54 am
Title: Survival

You have an exceptional grasp of these characters and the way you write Parker and Jarod is- just amazing. And the dialogue is brilliant. "Bear bating" and "removed the teeth" (taking away her weapon) were both incredible lines but my personal favorite thus far is: "damn it Jarod, did you take all my clothes?" hehe!

Reviewer: Mirage Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 01/06/11 03:37 am
Title: Chapter 1

There are many story lines/episodes that in my opinion would benefit from redaction but Donoterase stands out among them all (well that and The Inner Sense and definitely IOTH - I know you're working on those too, right? *smiles* And the ending to the show as well?)

I love the power struggle, albeit brief, between Jarod and old man Parker, that was well played, nightowl, and so Jarodesque "if you love her..." - but of course you nailed Jarod, you nailed them all! The flight, Jarod's thoughts, all of it, splendid.

 

Reviewer: Mirage Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 01/06/11 03:04 am
Title: The Hands of Time

Hi

I, like probably a lot of f.f. readers, would love to think that you still had this story locked away somewhere waiting to be finished.I loved the story and hoped maybe oneday you find the time and motivation to finish it.

Thanks

Deb Australia

 

 

Reviewer: Deb Australia Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 29/04/11 02:58 am
Title: The Hands of Time

I love the the story it is great.  You write a thrilling story I coudn't stop reading. I Can't wait to read the next part.

Reviewer: Megan Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 31/03/11 03:12 am
Title: Chapter 1

One of the best stories written for the pretender. Love where you went with the characters especially Miss Parker or can i say Cario.

Reviewer: SAN Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 03/11/10 05:25 pm
Title: The Hands of Time

 Dear Miss Typo Queen,

games are afoot and i am dying to see it all unfold. More, please!

Sincerely,

Mary

Reviewer: bloodymary2 Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 25/04/10 06:30 pm
Title: The Hands of Time

This is great so far! Can't wait for more on this storyline. The island would be something to see as one of the series storylines. This would be a very good addition to the series.

 

Reviewer: electricq Anonymous starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 23/04/10 02:21 am
Title: Chapter 1

So, as promised, I'm here to beg for an update. I just read the entire story (again) and it is begging for continuation. The plot is amazing and to be honest, it should have gone down exacly this way instead of J leaving her to die. *bad genius, bad!*

Your characterizations were spot on perfect, the dialogue was brilliant, it's amazingly well written. What typos? There are none. So please...What happens next? Does the Centre find out and interfere? Will Jarod just wait patiently for her? Will Jem and the gang try to break her out or take down the Centre? 

I know you can do it!



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for your encouragement and for your own stories. I do have the next chapter started but have had to put it aside for a bit due to real life stuff, I will finish it.

I absolutely want it finished. My big fear is that I will not be able to live up to all those wonderful reviews that I'll screw up the ending.  So I'm trying very hard to get it right!  As soon as I think I can tackle it again ..soon I hope... I want to try and finish it. Although I tend to write long chapters so it may take 2 or 3  more managable chapters to finish the story..

 Thank you, as you know it is always nice to know people out there are reading and care enough to let you know it. It's food for the fanfic writer, without it our muse dies! Mine has been faking it for a while so she could vacation, but I think I got her back.

Reviewer: Mirage Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 13/01/10 09:20 am
Title: The Hands of Time

I hope you still have this story in your head and intend to complete it at some stage. It is a great read.....

Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 14/10/09 09:17 am
Title: The Hands of Time

Well, what can I say, a friend told me about this story and it lived up to their opinion.  But I was so totally disappointed when it ended as it did. I looked at the date and realized it has been a while since you added. I hope you will be finishing it. It screams for an ending. I scream for an ending!

Please!

 

Reviewer: Mr Bill Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 04/07/09 05:41 am
Title: The Hands of Time

I am so glad you decided to update this fabulous story. Quite a page turner you've got here. I'm looking forward to the next chapter!

Update soon. 

 

 

 

Reviewer: Mirage Signed [Report This]
Date: 05/12/08 02:00 am
Title: The Hands of Time

you know every time I shave I keep thinking that Parker owes Jarod for the leg shaving, as much as I enjoyed that scene I'd like to  see the Parker return the gesture. I'd like to see if you can make that scene as sensuous as the leg shaving one.

 The story is very entertaining for so many different aspects that it is like an addiction to me.  Keep writing. I know you said the last chapters are the hardest but you must continue! 

Reviewer: Bucky Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 30/11/08 01:55 am
Title: The Hands of Time

This was so worth the wait !!!!!!  I loved this chapter and finished with a tear in my eye!!!  So much emotion !

I really like where you are taking this story - more soon, please!!!!

PS I'm really NOT bothered about the very small number of typo errors - and neither should you!!!!

I'm so, so, pleased you're back with this!!!!

 

Reviewer: Phoebe Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 26/11/08 01:33 pm
Title: Would I Lie To You

 

 I'm fairly new to the concept of fanfiction, so let me start by saying that I enjoyed the idea of starting the chapters with a song lyric that is threaded through out the chapter. The lyrics chosen are interesting and some of them are very thought provoking by themselves.

Your chapters seem to grow in length as the story progresses, which I like because you cover a lot of emotions and descriptive information that adds life to your story.  

You call yourself the typo queen - which I find funny because you do have a few, but I get so involved in the story I don't notice them as a rule, but because you refer yourself as such I tend to mentally note them, and chuckle.

The story is very interesting in the way you put it together. I always loved the show, so your vision of the characters comes across so familar to me.

Thank you for sharing your ideas and work. I have enjoyed the ride so far and hope you continue to write it. Plan B sounds like another fun ride.  

 

 

 

 

 

Reviewer: Adamsjoy Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18/07/08 02:09 am
Title: Would I Lie To You

What a superb chapter.  You are certainly keeping us guessing right to the end.  I love the fact that you are keeping Miss Parker's character true to form and she is still as "lively" as ever.

Congratulations on a well-written story so far.  As always, we are totally greedy for the next one!

Reviewer: Phoebe Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 14/07/08 08:51 pm
Title: Would I Lie To You

I enjoyed the varied emotions you delivered in the chapter, but Ihave to say the part where Jem and Jarod decided to allow one of the agents to talk to Miss Parker on the beach after their charade was well done.

I would have liked to have seen that on an episode, "ouch that had to hurt". That was truly a Miss Parker moment.Hope the next chapter is on the way.

 

 

Reviewer: Tess Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 13/07/08 11:21 pm
Title: Would I Lie To You

I had begun to think you weren't going to finish this epic story. I know you said it was never intended to go beyond 10,000 words--and lately that is just a chapter! 

 Good plotting, you have several pots boiling at the same time which keeps it interesting. I am surprised that you married them, after remembering a comment that <Jarod doesn't deserve her>-yes, I know that was because of the way he taunted her.  However with that being said- I think you handled it just as Parker would have wanted that scene, no big wedding but a small and informal one. I like the description of MP/J's return and all that ensued. 

You wrote with enough description and emotion that it was like watching one of the better episodes. And I liked them all---just some better than others.

Your mix of the Pretender world and the AU is interesting. I am never sure where you will go and when I'm fairly sure of direction you surprise me.

 I like the way the story fits in with the title, it is about what we need as Humans to exist with ourselves and each other. At least that is what I get out of it. And of course I love that Parker plays such a major role.

I look forward to more --hopefully sooner. I am curious as to Plan B, and the agency guys --yes they do seem to explain the state of the world don't they! Intentional or not.

Keep Writing. More soon?? 

 

 

Reviewer: Bucky Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 13/07/08 09:38 pm
Title: Learn to Fly

This is great! i loved it!

Reviewer: janeway Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 06/06/08 07:18 am
Title: Learn to Fly

This was amazing. I like that you took your time and let the story develop. The dynamics between the characters was detailed and interesting.

 My only thought is that the wedding itself seemed to be a little rushed. Perhaps you have that worked out in upcoming chapters?

So the adventure begins in the next chapter? Is Berby a straight shooter or a traitor to them? Looking forward to the answer 



Author's Response:

Thank you, for some reason this chapter demanded more time and thought, and I just wasn't happy with the end result. I think I was already trying to move ahead with the adventure in my mind so... that's my excuse.  The wonderful ladies that read for me are the reason the chapters turn out as well as they do!

Yes, I have planned to do some of the details of the wedding in flash backs. The chapter was already long and I was afraid of it getting out of hand.

and yes again, the adventure begins in the next chapter. Someone is not who or what they appear. ;-)

Thank you so much for being a regular reader and sharing your thoughts on the story! It is appreciated. 

 

 

Reviewer: mrbig Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 27/05/08 03:05 am
Title: Learn to Fly

What a great chapter this is ....as always, you continue to weave a wonderful story and I am still clinging to the edge of my seat! 

I am so glad this is turning into a great "epic" ....you write so professionally and with great feeling for the characters....what will we do when this story is finished ?  Simply look forward to the next one !!!

PLEASE, PLEASE CONTINUE !!!  I must know if Col Berby is on the level.  Thank you for a wonderful chapter and I am so looking forward to the next one.

You are up there with the best!

 



Author's Response:

I really don't think I can live up to your very kind review! Thank you! I'm flattered that you think so highly of the story, and again I have to say that the ladies that read and give me pointers are the reason the story turns out as well as it does. I can come up with story plots, but it's a whole other world to get it down into something other people will understand your vision and enjoy it.

As I reread the story AFTER I posted it I found stupid mistakes, like dangling words from a rewrite that I somehow?? didn't catch when rereading again. Your kind encouragement gives me the impetus to try harder and keep going. We are nearing the end.  Thank you again. 

 

Reviewer: Phoebe Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 26/05/08 08:21 pm
Title: Chapter 1

Hi Nightowl,

This was a really good chapter, and well worth the wait! I like the way the relationship between Jarod and Parker has developed over the chapters. Your writing is so descriptive, that it really makes me feel as though I am watching a Pretender episode. I hope we won't have to wait too long for the next chapter. I am so anxious to see what is going to happen next! Thanks for a such an intersting and intriguing story.

Twingirl



Author's Response:

Hello Twingirl10,

Thank you for the reviews. Yes there does seem to be a longer time between chapters as the chapters have been growing in length. It seems there is so much ground work to put in before the next chapter. We are nearing the end so if I can hold your attention just a little longer!  Thank you for staying with the story.

nightowl 

Reviewer: Twingirl10 Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 01/05/08 02:39 am
Title: Chapter 10 If Loving was enough

WOW !!!

Fantastic chapter ....what a superb mixture you have brewed up for us.  This is turning into a first rate epic masterpiece!!!  You just get better and better!!

Please, please keep going ....I am sure we are all on the edge of our seats .......what does Plan B hold for us ?? I am sure it will be every bit as exciting as the previous chapters. 

I love the fact that you are not rushing this but taking the time to develop the characters and allowing us to enjoy them.  So many writers are in such a hurry to tell the story and we arrive at the end before, we the reader, have had an opportunity to fully comprehend all the facets of the plot. 

Congratulations on a superb chapter!!!!!! 



Author's Response:

You have to be the sweetest person, I don't think I can ever live up to your kind words. At least I know by your reviews that you are indeed reading the story and following me through the maze.

thank you so much.  

Reviewer: Phoebe Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 28/04/08 08:33 pm
Title: Chapter 10 If Loving was enough

Great job. You have made built this into a story with mulitple diminsions, romance, suspense, action. adventure and now a touch of espionage.

 I enjoy your characters --the life you breath into them, they are life like and true to the series. Actually, in some ways better defined than the series. 

Can you tell I am enjoying this? Good work. 

 



Author's Response: Thanks Bucky, you are always encouraging, and that is so welcomed. I try to keep your vision of Parker in mind as I write!!  ;-)  I know that helps! ha ha.

Reviewer: Bucky Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 28/04/08 04:35 am
Title: Chapter 10 If Loving was enough

Not disappointed at all! Still really like your work and the way you write. You give life to the characters and their feelings and emotions, and it's really original and very well done! Sorry if I didn't let a lot of reviews but I never manage to let one (the security code is always a bit tricky and I end up writting a lot and sending nothing...) But just so you know, that's one of my favourite fanfic still in progress... so don't stop there and carry on with this so wonderful work!!!

 

 

As I said, really tricky security code, I'm trying a second time...lol



Author's Response:

Thank you! Sometimes I think I'm over my head in this story and reviews like yours and some of the others keep me going. Thank you for taking the time to read and let me know you are reading.

Yes, sometimes I have to play with the security code more than once too. But your review is worth it to me. Thanks for not giving up on the code or me.

Reviewer: Faith Parker Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 27/04/08 02:37 pm
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