hey there agaaain!
well that was one oh-so-sweeet chapter! usually it gets too sappy when J and MP finally get it on. But again you didn't ruin anything but kept the essence of their character alive while moving them to the next romantic-level.
Loved the fact that MissP would use the same words she used years ago when she was a girl just before they kissed. somehow it just...fits.
So pllllease keep on the good work and continue this story soon. For I'm dying out of curiosity! ;-)
Reviewer: IceAngel Signed
[Report This]Date: 10/01/10 05:33 pm
So here I am again!;-)
There was another thing which I totally adored about your story: the way Parker beahves as a "prisoner".lmao
I always had troubles with imagining her as a weeping captive. In other stories she kinda breaks always at some point or just seems te weak. And there you were with your stiry and gave me the answer to my question. "How would the real Miss Parker appear and behave when being the captive or prisoner?"
Especially those lines make it clear:
"One sweeper attempted to guide her into the room with a hand to her back, and with a quick "Not today, bucko" gave up."You guys are still letting my sister boss you around? You do realize she's the prisoner right?""
" Miss Parker left without a struggle, and the sweepers hurried to keep up with her quick pace. Lyle followed with a soft "morons" under his breath."
HAHAHAHA! just oh-so-much fun to read!!!
And again I can see it right in front of my inner eye.perfect!
keep on the beautiful work!
Reviewer: IceAngel Anonymous [Report This]Date: 10/01/10 05:17 pm
Awesome! I'm on the edge of my seat waiting for Jarod to bust loose on all of them. Come on! Give 'em what they deserve. And hurry up! It's hard to wait for these chapters, you know.
Reviewer: Rob Anonymous [Report This]Date: 05/11/07 07:32 am
hahaha i love that even while miss parker is a prisoner at the centre she is still in complete control. having those sweepers chase her down the hallway and stuff haha. oh and Mama N made me lol like for real. some wonderful JMP in this chapter and i loooved it! they can do anything when they are together. seriously. lyle better watch the hell out.
Author's Response: Miss Parker is just amazing all around no matter where she is. That's the moral of this story. I'm always glad to make you lol. Glad you liked it of course (though what option did you really have?)!
Date: 23/10/07 01:11 pm
This chapter was well worth the wait. I like the interaction between and characterization of Jarod and Miss Parker on Day 6. But I'm curious about what Jarod has in mind now. Lyle had better watch out.
I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response: I'm glad you think so! It was a little longer than usual to make up for my inadequate updating. That seems to be everyone's main consensus: Lyle had better watch out! Reviewer: Cathy Signed
[Report This]Date: 23/10/07 08:44 am
this is getting really interesting. great writing.
can't wait for more :o)
peace!
Author's Response: The plot thickens... dun dun dun... thanks :) Reviewer: Jazzy Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 23/10/07 01:12 am
Hey!
Props to you for finding your muse while in school. Can you find mine while you are at it?
I am very intrigued, especially given Jarod's more optimistic state at the end of Day 33. Maybe it was just acceptance, but i do aimagine you have somehting more brewing.
Great job and i love the creative format of this story (she says for like..the 6th time!)
Author's Response:
Yours must be vacationing. Mine comes back periodically, but I wish it would stick around longer.
Jarod is pretty sketchy near the end of this, but that's certainly intentional. A little confusion makes a story a little better. THANK YOU :D
Reviewer: KatieQ Anonymous [Report This]Date: 22/10/07 08:59 pm
Awesome!!
I love that chapter!!
The emotions of Parker and Jarod are intense and credible, and it's well written!!
Thank you for updating and I'll be here for the sequel !
Author's Response: Thank you! Be prepared, it'll probably be a couple weeks. I tried to make this chapter longer though to make up for the wait. Reviewer: Julia Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 22/10/07 04:31 pm
New chap! yay!
Hm, snowed in out in the middle of nowhere . . . methinks I know where this is going:)
The caught-by-the-Centre plot is certainly getting interesting. I loved the little interplay between Jarod and Syd at the end. Hope he's got something good up his sleeve.
Need more soon!
Author's Response:
Yeah gee where could it be going!? Only somewhere good. ;)
The Centre is always where things get extra intriguing...
Reviewer: MP Signed [Report This]Date: 22/10/07 02:37 pm
