Wonderful story you have here. I am so impressed by your creativity with the use of the dual timelines. It's a great idea and the way you're carrying it out is very effective. In addition, your characterizations truly capture the essence of their personalities as evident in the conversations.
However, as a result, I believe it is somewhat overly weighted with dialogue. It may improve the story to weave in some more descriptive parts like you did initially. Just a thought...
Great job. I can't wait for more; I hope you don't keep us waiting too long.
Author's Response:
Wow, well thank you very much. There is more dialogue, you're absolutely right. I love doing description, but usually feel more pressured to get on with the plot and what's going on. Now that I know someone else appreciates the description though, maybe I'll start adding more in. ;)
Reviewer: Topanga Anonymous [Report This]Date: 08/08/07 11:43 am
yay!! ty... and now, more pls. :-) :-p
Author's Response: Hey, you're welcome! I'll try and get on that some time I suppoooose.
Date: 05/08/07 11:55 pm
Like your new story. Like how you are working with the two time lines.
Can't wait to read more!
Author's Response: Thank you, Morgan! I appreciate it. Reviewer: Morgan Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/08/07 01:45 pm
Very nice and exciting but then I'd expect nothing less from you!
Author's Response: I've gotta keep myself entertained too! Thanks, RaChell. You're such a good little reviewer.
Date: 04/08/07 11:18 am
A very nice chapter. The characters are spot on. I love your Miss Parker in snappy mode.
Thanks for sharing!
Author's Response: Thanks, Cathy! Very sweet of you. Reviewer: Cathy Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/08/07 10:22 am
This is good and I liked MP's barbs....very so like her. ;-) Great job, looking forward to more.
Author's Response: Thank you! Strangely, her vicious quips come naturally for me which makes me wonder just how evil I am deep down. ;) But nothing gets more attention and agony than the Parker lines because they HAVE to be perfect. Reviewer: whashaza Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 04/08/07 12:36 am
this is so great! reading this story feels like acctually watching tP again. so real.
can't wait for more :o)
peace!
Author's Response: Thank you! That's the best compliment you could give. Reviewer: Jazzy Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 04/08/07 12:17 am
i still find the layout of this story oh so fascinating! favorite chappie ever..in life.
Author's Response: Thanks, friend! I didn't even realize how many references I'd made to you. Yay us. Reviewer: soulmatefosho Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 03/08/07 09:57 pm