A little more connection between the chapters, but it's a good plot. Any updates or sequel?!? It's just getting good!
Reviewer: electricq Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 03/02/10 01:26 am
Hey!
I'm the queen of dumbass mistakes. Don't be shy, send out some beta emails! I would volunteer myself but i think Jacci would fishslap me for volunteering my services as a beta.. lol.. talk about the blind leading the blind.
Your story is very creative, but I do agree with Rachell, you have jumped around a little bit. We readers crave little details. Again your concept is truly wonderful.
And to Rachell.. i don't think i've ever been served in a review for another story before ;). I do apologize for taking soo long.. i misjudged my writing speed for the last two months. Grr to school. Exams are almost here and then i should increase. If it makes you feel better the next africa is about to be sent off to the beta's.
So good luck looking for the beta's Courtney.. and really great plot that you have going.
Reviewer: KatieQ Signed [Report This]Date: 02/04/07 05:44 pm
I really enjoy your story except for one thing...you jump around too much. What happened during the escape? How did they escape? You could use a beta reader (can't we all????) which would help to polish and make your story really shine. I am looking forward to your next chapter.
BTW KatieQ, you should talk! Just because you write long chapters and have at least 2 stories in the works that you are tormenting us with by not giving us anything for extended periods of time, doesn't mean short chapters aren't welcomed. (big grin!) Just keep it up Courtneyhawk, I like the short chapters. It feeds my habit.
Author's Response: What can I say. I come from a fandom where... ermm I had to BEG AND SCREAM for a beta.. I'm alittle gun shy about asking for one here. It's a habit of jumping around I'll try to slap my muse into shape over that *Lash Lash Spanks* Okay... You'll find out about the escape ... Nawww KatieQ is kinda right my chapters COULD be longer. I am just not used to posting under this kinda format. ... Beta reader beta reader *eyes list* *Sighs* Yeah I'm chicken Reviewer: RaChell Signed
[Report This]Date: 01/04/07 05:35 pm
ooh! this story is surrounded with mystery! Can't wait for your to reveal what is going on! Great hook! Hope you post again soon! My only complaint is that the chapters are a little short ;)
Author's Response: Okay I promise Chapter 10 (Which I will post on Monday) Should be much longer *grins* Just for my hero *giggles*
Date: 31/03/07 06:40 pm
very good story but i am dying for some parker and jarod.
Author's Response: Remember this is Ethan's story mainly.. There might be some 'light' Parker and Jarod action near the end.. but it's Ethan's escape!
[Report This]Date: 31/03/07 12:53 pm
This is really getting interesting. Nice to see more of Ethan for a change. Don't stop now!
Author's Response: Thank You ooo mighty godling! It is nice to see a fic for Ethan... I thought it's something that's rarely done
[Report This]Date: 30/03/07 08:01 pm
wonderful. I can wait till we have them all together again. What will the reaction be to the baby.
Reviewer: mpj Anonymous [Report This]Date: 30/03/07 01:38 pm
Nice start and very interesting. I'm curious where you will take this. Nicely done.
Reviewer: RaChell Signed
[Report This]Date: 29/03/07 07:40 pm
Hey!
Intriguing beginning!! I like how you wrote Ethan's inner sense into the sotry. He's a character who definately hasn't had to much glory in fics.. very curious as to where you will take this. =)
Date: 29/03/07 06:19 pm
You have to continue. Can wait to see what happens next.
[Report This]Date: 29/03/07 01:09 pm
